Water Under the Bridge
senryu110 total reviews
Comment from marinol man
What about if your Matt Foley and you live in a van down by the river???? Ok, if you know Chris Farley and Saturday Night Live and then you definitely get that :)
Good job, I'll make sure mine is a ways off the bank ;)
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2010
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What about if your Matt Foley and you live in a van down by the river???? Ok, if you know Chris Farley and Saturday Night Live and then you definitely get that :)
Good job, I'll make sure mine is a ways off the bank ;)
Comment Written 27-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2010
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Thank you, marinol man - I appreciate your review. Brooke
Comment from Judy Swanson
Hi Brooke,
A poignant reminder of those less fortunate - living "under the bridge" either literally or metaphorically. And, we should not so easily forget, or dismiss, the plight. You said a lot in your spare words. Sweep and makeshift are very powerful words - strategically place to give full meaning. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest. Judy
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Hi Brooke,
A poignant reminder of those less fortunate - living "under the bridge" either literally or metaphorically. And, we should not so easily forget, or dismiss, the plight. You said a lot in your spare words. Sweep and makeshift are very powerful words - strategically place to give full meaning. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest. Judy
Comment Written 27-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Judy, thanks so much for your thoughtful review, my friend - I apologize for the delayed reply to your review - I'm playing catch up. Brooke :-)
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You are so welcome. I buried in catch-up too! But, enjoying it so much. Judy
Comment from Begin Again
Brooke,
Far too many people would rather turn their heads and try not to notice the poor unfortuante ones who struggle to survive ....your poem was perfect ...loved the way you used the phrase "water under the bridge"...Great job!
Carol
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2010
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Brooke,
Far too many people would rather turn their heads and try not to notice the poor unfortuante ones who struggle to survive ....your poem was perfect ...loved the way you used the phrase "water under the bridge"...Great job!
Carol
Comment Written 27-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2010
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Carol, thank you, my friend - yes, lots of head turning goes on. Brooke
Comment from Majicman
I enjoyed your lovely poem. However, it was much enhanced by your explanation of homelessness and your encounter with the little girl. Excellent. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2010
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I enjoyed your lovely poem. However, it was much enhanced by your explanation of homelessness and your encounter with the little girl. Excellent. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2010
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Thanks, Majicman, for your thoughtful review. Brooke
Comment from marym224
An interesting slant on the old saying, Brooke. It has a lot more meaning though, with your description of its application in your area. I've always taken 'water under the bridge' to mean events of any kind that happened long ago are 'water under the bridge' because you can't do a thing to alter them. So usually, they are best forgotten. Similar to your description, but I don't only apply the saying to unimportant things, if you can follow my meaning. Our youngsters are learning much earlier about the uglier side of life, aren't they? My neice was giving a lift to her son's friend. He told them his Dad had gone to Afghanistan. Then he turned to her son and said, "If my Dad gets killed, would you like to come to his funeral?" My niece nearly drove off the road! Life! Hugs. xxx
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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An interesting slant on the old saying, Brooke. It has a lot more meaning though, with your description of its application in your area. I've always taken 'water under the bridge' to mean events of any kind that happened long ago are 'water under the bridge' because you can't do a thing to alter them. So usually, they are best forgotten. Similar to your description, but I don't only apply the saying to unimportant things, if you can follow my meaning. Our youngsters are learning much earlier about the uglier side of life, aren't they? My neice was giving a lift to her son's friend. He told them his Dad had gone to Afghanistan. Then he turned to her son and said, "If my Dad gets killed, would you like to come to his funeral?" My niece nearly drove off the road! Life! Hugs. xxx
Comment Written 27-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2010
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Mary, thank you for your thoughtful reivew and for sharing that amazing story with me. Brooke
Comment from Minglement
Very provocative subject and author notes for your excellent entry in the senryu contest. I didn't know they built houses under bridges anywhere. That's amazin and scary. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2010
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Very provocative subject and author notes for your excellent entry in the senryu contest. I didn't know they built houses under bridges anywhere. That's amazin and scary. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2010
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Marcia, thanks so much for our kind review. It's not houses they build - it's just makeshift shelters from boxes and tarps and two by fours, anything people can scrounge. Brooke
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Ah, okay. Yes, I know about that. Even sadder. Tired brain from all the writing (Poem a day challenge) and reviewing (same reason), etc. Good job. Marcia
Comment from Stephen C Winter (Vs
Dear Brooke,
What a wonderful Senryu, I got the meaning and its sadness straight away before I even read your notes. I have read about people making homes under bridges. such a sad State of affairs for wealthy society's such as the united states and here in the UK. People often see these people as invisible and less worthy, the saying that comes to mind "There bye the grace of God go I"
I am always mindful that writing on a site, that has many people from many nations that sayings may vary, however this saying "Water under the bridge" Is hugely popular this side of the water. What a read and what a message.....Bravo Brooke
Kind regards
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2010
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Dear Brooke,
What a wonderful Senryu, I got the meaning and its sadness straight away before I even read your notes. I have read about people making homes under bridges. such a sad State of affairs for wealthy society's such as the united states and here in the UK. People often see these people as invisible and less worthy, the saying that comes to mind "There bye the grace of God go I"
I am always mindful that writing on a site, that has many people from many nations that sayings may vary, however this saying "Water under the bridge" Is hugely popular this side of the water. What a read and what a message.....Bravo Brooke
Kind regards
Steve
Comment Written 27-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2010
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Thanks so much, Steve - you always really think about what I've said - I never worry that you just skim read to make a fast member dollar :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
A perfect senryu in all aspects, Brooke. You bring a side of human nature that exists everywhere on this planet and the irony in your satori is a powerful line. Is senryu different than haiku that it's okay to use capitals and punctuation?
Best wishes in the contest,
Karyn :>)
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2010
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A perfect senryu in all aspects, Brooke. You bring a side of human nature that exists everywhere on this planet and the irony in your satori is a powerful line. Is senryu different than haiku that it's okay to use capitals and punctuation?
Best wishes in the contest,
Karyn :>)
Comment Written 27-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2010
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Karyn, yes, even though some traditionalists want no caps and punctuation, even Alvin allows for caps and punctuation in senryu. LOL Thanks so much :-) Brooke
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Thanks, Brooke. I signed up for his class the other day so I'd learn then, but was curious now. lol
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
We don't expect the problem of homelessness in our "prosperous" societies, but its there. In places like the Philippines along the Pasig River (which is almost an open sewer),the shacks are built into it, over it and along it - each thime there is a typhoon, literally hundreds drown or are swept away.
Your poem touches on a very raw nerve in our societies...
Patrick
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2010
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Hi Brooke,
We don't expect the problem of homelessness in our "prosperous" societies, but its there. In places like the Philippines along the Pasig River (which is almost an open sewer),the shacks are built into it, over it and along it - each thime there is a typhoon, literally hundreds drown or are swept away.
Your poem touches on a very raw nerve in our societies...
Patrick
Comment Written 27-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2010
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Patrick, thank you for your most insightful comments on this poem. Brooke :-)
Comment from --Turtle.
Hi Brooke,
I read through this Senryu, The human condition to want to forget unpleasant things shows through, for me. I thought the image of making a home, lost, and the double meaning for water under the bridge did well to spur some thought.
--Turtle.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2010
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Hi Brooke,
I read through this Senryu, The human condition to want to forget unpleasant things shows through, for me. I thought the image of making a home, lost, and the double meaning for water under the bridge did well to spur some thought.
--Turtle.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2010
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Thanks so much, Turtle - I appreciate your thoughtful response to my commentary :-) Brooke
