Kindred Spirits
Feelings about my horse Buster.20 total reviews
Comment from humpwhistle
Susan this is a lovely love poem. Now, I could be ridiculously off-base here, but I think you are talking to your horse. If I am right, you take all the credit. If I am wrong, I'll eat a saddle. Gentle nudge. Nice work. Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2010
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Susan this is a lovely love poem. Now, I could be ridiculously off-base here, but I think you are talking to your horse. If I am right, you take all the credit. If I am wrong, I'll eat a saddle. Gentle nudge. Nice work. Peace, Lee
Comment Written 11-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2010
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I think it would be fun to see you attempt to eat a saddle, but it is to the horse! I put the tiny note at the top of the title? But someone else said it could go to a person too, so we are both right? I really am super glad you liked it Lee. Looking forward to your next post too! ") Susan
Comment from c_lucas
I read your poem out loud and did not have much trouble with it. Try it and seen if you can spot the places to smooth out. As is, it is very well written. Good luck in your contest.
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reads much better. good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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I read your poem out loud and did not have much trouble with it. Try it and seen if you can spot the places to smooth out. As is, it is very well written. Good luck in your contest.
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reads much better. good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Hi Charlie! I respaced it some, I appreciate your help! If you have more suggestions, just holler at me! Free verse is hard!") S.
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It looking much better, Susan. Charlie
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Susan,
I enjoyed your poem.
And I think it is a fine free verse poem.
Flows well.
You capture your love for your horse really well.
Great image and visual presentation.
Good title.
I like your 4th and 5th stanzas the best.
Good luck in the contest.
Katie
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Susan,
I enjoyed your poem.
And I think it is a fine free verse poem.
Flows well.
You capture your love for your horse really well.
Great image and visual presentation.
Good title.
I like your 4th and 5th stanzas the best.
Good luck in the contest.
Katie
Comment Written 11-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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") Thank you Katie!! I am thrilled that you liked this! Free verse is a lot harder than one might think too! ") xoxo. Susan
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Susan,
You're welcome. So I've heard, though I find it easier than structured verse.
xoxo,
katie
Comment from BethShelby
This is a beautiful love poem. It it about a person or a horse? I like the way you use the Western metaphors to describe the connection. The picture carries out the Western theme and makes me think we are talking about a horse. I think you free verse is done just right. There aren't many rules about free verse. To me they need to express feelings and this one does.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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This is a beautiful love poem. It it about a person or a horse? I like the way you use the Western metaphors to describe the connection. The picture carries out the Western theme and makes me think we are talking about a horse. I think you free verse is done just right. There aren't many rules about free verse. To me they need to express feelings and this one does.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Hi Beth! Yes, about my horse Buster in profile pix? I would like to take him out west and ride. Oh well! ") I will in my dreams! ") Thank you Beth!! xoxo. Susan
Comment from LoveLifeKnight
the reason why i love free verse is that as far as i know its free. no one can actually tell you whats right or wrong! to me this is perfect free verse, because it gets all the emotions across. i can imagine what you might see, and feel a little of what you feel.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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the reason why i love free verse is that as far as i know its free. no one can actually tell you whats right or wrong! to me this is perfect free verse, because it gets all the emotions across. i can imagine what you might see, and feel a little of what you feel.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Hi there! I guess you are right? I just didn't know if this was smooth enough or? Thanks, I am glad you like it! ") Susan
Comment from psalmist
I loved the descriptions and emotion of this piece. The words were perfect. However, I felt it was too broken up, making the flow awkward. i.e.: I would attach "This small joy" to either the first two lines, or the next two lines.
I see a mountain range
when I gaze
into the window of your soul.
You know who I am
by my love
for you
that will never die.
You are mine, and I am yours,
bound by kindred spirits
that soar
until the end of time...
An otherwise beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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I loved the descriptions and emotion of this piece. The words were perfect. However, I felt it was too broken up, making the flow awkward. i.e.: I would attach "This small joy" to either the first two lines, or the next two lines.
I see a mountain range
when I gaze
into the window of your soul.
You know who I am
by my love
for you
that will never die.
You are mine, and I am yours,
bound by kindred spirits
that soar
until the end of time...
An otherwise beautiful poem.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Hi there! I did respace it and it is a little better? Thank you for this great help! I really do appreciate it! If you want look again and see if I did it right? Free verse is not as easy as I thought?? ") xoxo. Susan
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I'm not sure there is any right or wrong, but I feel it does read more smoothly.
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Hi there, thanks for checking it for me! I appreciate your help very much!! Susan
Comment from Valkarie
I think this free verse is done excellently, it has a good flow is concise and your words flow with such a dialogue that is concise and most visual. Your dialogue is well executed and has such impeccable word flow making this poem a most artistic expressed piece which is emotional and well written.
A very well written piece which is most creative.
Valkarie...
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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I think this free verse is done excellently, it has a good flow is concise and your words flow with such a dialogue that is concise and most visual. Your dialogue is well executed and has such impeccable word flow making this poem a most artistic expressed piece which is emotional and well written.
A very well written piece which is most creative.
Valkarie...
Comment Written 11-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Hi Val! Thank you!! I respaced the lines, so hope it looks better? I really appreciate your time for me , also the great rating! ") Susan
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Susan...You're a very good writer just keep it up eh. V...
Comment from cacfilly
As someone who has owned horses in my lifetime, I just loved this. I could so remember having that same feelings, although I never rode where you have written. What a great poem. I'm pretty sure it's terrific free verse, but I don't know much about it as I write rhyming. Kudos for a great job.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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As someone who has owned horses in my lifetime, I just loved this. I could so remember having that same feelings, although I never rode where you have written. What a great poem. I'm pretty sure it's terrific free verse, but I don't know much about it as I write rhyming. Kudos for a great job.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Hi there! Nice to meet another horse person too! I am in Indiana, and just dream of riding out west. Maybe someday!! I love it out there! I usually rhyme too, this was not as easy as I thought it would be! ") Thanks for this kind review!! ") Susan
Comment from dportwood
Realist101,
This poem could easily be written to a person. But then, we as horse people know that our best friend possesses human qualities. Love it.
Duane
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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Realist101,
This poem could easily be written to a person. But then, we as horse people know that our best friend possesses human qualities. Love it.
Duane
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Comment Written 11-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Hi Duane! Thank you! You got that it could be both! Great! Thank you so much!! I am thrilled that you liked this too! ") Susan
Comment from Sharon Lee
I like it, some of the spacing isn't needed though. It all depends on how you want to to flow I guess. A sweet read though, very warm and beautiful.
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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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I like it, some of the spacing isn't needed though. It all depends on how you want to to flow I guess. A sweet read though, very warm and beautiful.
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Comment Written 11-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Hi Sharon! I did respace it, thank you for this kind help! I do think it is better now? ") HUGS! Susan
