My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Harry"a collection of my poetry
6 total reviews
Comment from Valkarie
I like your piece of poetry it has a good rhyming and rhythm which captures the tone and the visual effect of your piece, making for a most concise piece of writing. Most expressive and adequate in emotional stance this is an inspiring write with a complexity that has a very good word flow. With a good balance and dialogue this piece has an artistic expression which makes this a most skillful and creative write.
Valkarie...
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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I like your piece of poetry it has a good rhyming and rhythm which captures the tone and the visual effect of your piece, making for a most concise piece of writing. Most expressive and adequate in emotional stance this is an inspiring write with a complexity that has a very good word flow. With a good balance and dialogue this piece has an artistic expression which makes this a most skillful and creative write.
Valkarie...
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you SO much for your thoughtful and kind review.
Comment from Goyle
Pretty good - the pacing is good, all though the repeated use of some of the words is off-putting. It seems to lose pace as it nears towards the end. Also, it recycles rhymes too often for my taste. But I like the idea of mimogene.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Pretty good - the pacing is good, all though the repeated use of some of the words is off-putting. It seems to lose pace as it nears towards the end. Also, it recycles rhymes too often for my taste. But I like the idea of mimogene.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your review; I understand your comments and agree; it was difficult to write in the format - but I wanted to try! I'm glad you liked my creation, the mimogene.
Comment from MizKat
Mustangpatty - I think the rhyming of your poem is very good even though it felt forced to you. I really like your poem. What a great contribution for the prompt 'Share a Story in a Poem. Kat
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Mustangpatty - I think the rhyming of your poem is very good even though it felt forced to you. I really like your poem. What a great contribution for the prompt 'Share a Story in a Poem. Kat
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Harry and other mimogenes will show up in other stories.
Comment from chita
Your artwork and arthor notes are superb-you have a good flow with your poem and you show your creativity by creating a creature-you are descriptive and write with emotion-you ryhyme well-Oh what a wonderful but sad ending he was swept away--great job.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Your artwork and arthor notes are superb-you have a good flow with your poem and you show your creativity by creating a creature-you are descriptive and write with emotion-you ryhyme well-Oh what a wonderful but sad ending he was swept away--great job.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read my entry. Your review made me smile -- I enjoyed creating a new creature, and I think he may become "someone" in future stories. Thanks again.
Comment from InterestingRon
I've read one or two of the entries for this contest and yours is a very strong contender indeed. Nicely crafted. I enjoyed the fantasy theme. Good luck in the contest. Ron
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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I've read one or two of the entries for this contest and yours is a very strong contender indeed. Nicely crafted. I enjoyed the fantasy theme. Good luck in the contest. Ron
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Hi Ron; Thank you for taking the time to review my entry, and your kind words. I sincerely hope the contest goes well. I enjoyed creating Harry.
Comment from kintesiegel
I love your new creature and he is an heroic little guy on top of all his other attributes. The configuration of your poem is almost painful though. You don't allow any space for the reader to pause and that makes the poem as you say feel a little forced. Why not break it out into stanzas and see how that feels?
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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I love your new creature and he is an heroic little guy on top of all his other attributes. The configuration of your poem is almost painful though. You don't allow any space for the reader to pause and that makes the poem as you say feel a little forced. Why not break it out into stanzas and see how that feels?
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much for taking the time to review and read my little story. I did go back and edit - breaking the poem into stanzas, and hopefully, it will help. Thanks again.
