Emotions of Love and Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 120 "Now Look What We Did!"Love and Life with many emotions
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Comment from mojo78
Nice poem with a excellent flow and very sensual, nice color to express that passion you are trying to emphasis in your words and the feeling you are expressing. The words in this poem really gel together and roll of the tongue.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Nice poem with a excellent flow and very sensual, nice color to express that passion you are trying to emphasis in your words and the feeling you are expressing. The words in this poem really gel together and roll of the tongue.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind words. They are greatly appreciated.
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your welcome : )
Comment from richard7
Have to grin at this!
Neat enticing duets with a good sense of humour to be read in your vivd visual wording!
I think it is tasteful and very age of anyone to read!
Yes, poor mr happy, sometimes he just wants a snooze!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2010
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Have to grin at this!
Neat enticing duets with a good sense of humour to be read in your vivd visual wording!
I think it is tasteful and very age of anyone to read!
Yes, poor mr happy, sometimes he just wants a snooze!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2010
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Oh silly me I guess, Just got to try anything once for a laugh. Thanks for the nice review. Need to protect young readers even know they probably know more then I do about the subject. But there is always that one bad apple that ruins it for all if you know what I mean. Take care.
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protect young readers ,,,
have you seen the computer games they play!
:-)
Comment from Nefarioushibachi
I like that you ventured into a territory that isn't expressed very often on this site but there are a few spag and structure issues. "touchs" should be "touches" and the rhyming feels a tad forced. I just don't know how well rhyming works for a poem like this because often rhymes make a poem sound like a Dr. Seuss book. The changes in the meter make it difficult to get into a rhythm while reading it. I think its a great idea, simply in need of revision
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2010
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I like that you ventured into a territory that isn't expressed very often on this site but there are a few spag and structure issues. "touchs" should be "touches" and the rhyming feels a tad forced. I just don't know how well rhyming works for a poem like this because often rhymes make a poem sound like a Dr. Seuss book. The changes in the meter make it difficult to get into a rhythm while reading it. I think its a great idea, simply in need of revision
Comment Written 31-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2010
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Ok this was the first ever in writing like this for me, I appreciate the honest review I will take into consideration your words. Thank you. Have a wonderful day!!
Comment from Aarondodd1989
Nice erotic poem. The imagery was very strong. The emotion and lust is well presented and the joke line at the end was fun. I liked this piece a lot, and the image was a great complement to the piece.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2010
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Nice erotic poem. The imagery was very strong. The emotion and lust is well presented and the joke line at the end was fun. I liked this piece a lot, and the image was a great complement to the piece.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2010
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Thank you for the great review, I tried my best at this it's not my norm but I guess it got the point across. Thank you again. Have a wonderful day!
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You're welcome. Writers should try their hand at everything.
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That's right get out of your comfort zone a little. Have a great day:)
Comment from Ntorious
FIRST OF ALL I WANT TO SAY THIS PICTURE MADE ME SAY OOOH!
I THINK IT WAS PERFECT FOR YOUR POEM.
I LOVED THE RHYMING.
YOU KEPT READING AND SMILING.
MEMORIES FLOODING BACK OF SEXUAL ENDEAVORS.
THE TITLE WAS LURING AND JUST EXCELLENT.
JUST A SUGGESTION THOUGH, THE LAST PARAGRAPH LIKE A WILTED GOOSE.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2010
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FIRST OF ALL I WANT TO SAY THIS PICTURE MADE ME SAY OOOH!
I THINK IT WAS PERFECT FOR YOUR POEM.
I LOVED THE RHYMING.
YOU KEPT READING AND SMILING.
MEMORIES FLOODING BACK OF SEXUAL ENDEAVORS.
THE TITLE WAS LURING AND JUST EXCELLENT.
JUST A SUGGESTION THOUGH, THE LAST PARAGRAPH LIKE A WILTED GOOSE.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2010
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Just an expresion I use for the ok deflated penis. Had to get a laugh in there. I guess i did with you. Have a wonderful day!
