Hey You
A whisper to me19 total reviews
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Yes, the artwork here is so appropriate. This is a great piece of writing - put together well and prompts one to ask oneself: if I had the chance to give someone this sort of advice - could I do it so well? Good luck with this.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Yes, the artwork here is so appropriate. This is a great piece of writing - put together well and prompts one to ask oneself: if I had the chance to give someone this sort of advice - could I do it so well? Good luck with this.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much Giddy for taking the time to read and review my work. Hind site...gotta love it hey? tc xoxo
Comment from marcellawachtel
A most touching message, ringing with sincerity. Most poignant is the warning against being blind to the looming threat of sexual abuse. Most powerful it the unshakeable faith in God.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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A most touching message, ringing with sincerity. Most poignant is the warning against being blind to the looming threat of sexual abuse. Most powerful it the unshakeable faith in God.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Thank you for this generous review. Greatly appreciated and wonderfully received. xoxo
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent entry into the contest. it is very well written with good form and good flow, a good storyline, very tender but firm. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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this is an excellent entry into the contest. it is very well written with good form and good flow, a good storyline, very tender but firm. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 20-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my work. I am not that familiar with writing stories so this was a little harder for me. Think these contests are great when they stretch us as writers. Thanks again. xoxo
Comment from BethShelby
This is great advice. Don't you wish it had been possible to get this good advise before we had to learn the hard way? We might have avoided a lot of pitfalls. I love the picture you used. Those eyes really get to you.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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This is great advice. Don't you wish it had been possible to get this good advise before we had to learn the hard way? We might have avoided a lot of pitfalls. I love the picture you used. Those eyes really get to you.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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yes don't we all just wish....thanks for the read and review. xoxo
Comment from Gungalo
Sigh, what a totally unique write this one is. It really just sings of life and all its ups and downs. Yet the song is in a whisper and soft told for the future. Wouldn't it be nice if .......
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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Sigh, what a totally unique write this one is. It really just sings of life and all its ups and downs. Yet the song is in a whisper and soft told for the future. Wouldn't it be nice if .......
Comment Written 19-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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Every time you review one of my pieces it is like a breath of fresh air. You don't mince words, you are kind even if it isn't that good and I am so honored you take the time to read and review my body of work. Thank you so much for that ...xoxo
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There's no need in my book to be mean and rude to anyone. Each of us expresses things in our own way so wo ARE we to say, 'It's not right'? Seems the world would be pretty darned boring if we all wrote exactly the same. I love what you wrote and the way YOU see it. MUAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.
Comment from AprilShower
There is very good advice in this short story. Most of it makes really good sense. Although there are few things in which I don't understand. Maybe they just aren't on my grid of experiences. I have no suggestions.
Best wishes.
April
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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There is very good advice in this short story. Most of it makes really good sense. Although there are few things in which I don't understand. Maybe they just aren't on my grid of experiences. I have no suggestions.
Best wishes.
April
Comment Written 19-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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April, and that was the "revised" one...lol...you know I think maybe I'm not that much of a writer but I keep trying anyone...it's the "stories" that I find difficult, but I do appreciate your read and review. Its awesome of you to take the time. xoxo
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Very wise whispers of wisdom. Excellent writing. Should be a must read for all parents and prospective parents. Good luck to you in the contest
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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Very wise whispers of wisdom. Excellent writing. Should be a must read for all parents and prospective parents. Good luck to you in the contest
Comment Written 19-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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man the stuff we do to kids, wow, my best friend was doing crank and coke while her children were very young...the man she married was a gazillion-aire and had plenty of money to support their habits but, the really awful thing is that neither of them (and this is my BEST friend) thought it was doing anything to the kids! Thank you for reading and reviewing my work. I look forward to going through your body of work. tc xoxo
Comment from annettebda
This is a really good read. I feel the wisdom gained from difficult lessons being passed back without bitterness and that takes courage and redemption.
Annette
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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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This is a really good read. I feel the wisdom gained from difficult lessons being passed back without bitterness and that takes courage and redemption.
Annette
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Comment Written 19-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much...I was crying like a big baby with this one. Hate it when you know what's going to happen and not much you can do to stop the progress, especially when it involves children. thank you for taking the time to read and review my work. xoxo Kiwi
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oh bother I think I might have disqualifed myself by revealing who I am...oh brother making a note did not do it intentionally...
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No worries, I have done that too.darned blind entries!!!
Comment from whitteron
I enjoy the premise of this story, but I found it difficutl to read. The you and we threw me off at times.Some of the words are redundant
in the same paragraph. I think your peice could be much stronger with less words.
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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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I enjoy the premise of this story, but I found it difficutl to read. The you and we threw me off at times.Some of the words are redundant
in the same paragraph. I think your peice could be much stronger with less words.
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Comment Written 19-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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wow a little harsh but so be it.
