Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

Writer,

Great advice whispered in this young one's ear...and leaving her to discover the surprises in life was an excellent choice. An entertaining piece. Very enjoyable.

Carol

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010

Thank you Carol, I really appreciate your review and comments.

Comment from Soledadpaz

Excellent

Well, done. Good sound advice. I have often thought what it would have been like to go back in time and speak to myself as a child. Trouble is, I don't think I would have listened to me!

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010

Thank you for the review and the comments. I didn't listen to the adults in my life but I might have listened to someone who knew my future. Maybe.

Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

Very good story and full of good advice for anyone to follow in thier life. I liked the picture of the little girl. Great job.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010

Thank you for the review and the lovely comments. The little girl in the picture is me.

Comment from Sharon Lee

Excellent

I like this writing prompt. I think you done a great job of it. I enjoyed all the things you covered, from your weight and teeth.. to love and feeling confident. well done!

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010

Thank you Sharon, I appreciate the review and comments. It was an interesting thought provoking prompt and it was fun writing it. I wish I'd had some of that advice, especially the weight and teeth. LOL

reply by Sharon Lee on 18-Oct-2010

lol

Comment from chells36

Excellent

I would hug me and tell my childlike self to be brave and avoid trouble and at all costs
choose a nice gentle man and be good to herself
I really like this thought provoking piece
Well written with a good flow
Thanks xx

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010

Thank you chells36, I really appreciate your review and comments. This was a thought provoking challenge.

Comment from dportwood

Excellent

author,

This is a creative story told with a measure of the knowledge of life.

You may wish to consider the following for edit:

will be around to see your grow up.
should be:
will be around to see you grow up.

All stories don't have happy ending,
should be:
All stories don't have happy endings,

You've inheirted the fat gene,
should be
You've inherited the fat gene,

You are unique just as they are.
should be:
You are unique just as you are.

Don't talk about anyone behind their back,
should be:
Don't talk about anyone behind his back,

There is no one who is better than you are.
would be better as:
There is no one better than you are.

Duane

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 Comment Written 18-Oct-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010

Thank you Duane, You are an excellent editor. No matter how many times I read my own writing over, I always miss things. I have made the corrections.