A Voice From Your Future
A message to the child you will someday become26 total reviews
Comment from jl & bandit
I have to say I have read all the entries to the contest, and I believe this one in many ways would work for all people in general. This is a very truthful, honest and touching work.
I very much enjoyed this
JL&B
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2010
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I have to say I have read all the entries to the contest, and I believe this one in many ways would work for all people in general. This is a very truthful, honest and touching work.
I very much enjoyed this
JL&B
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much for the review and your great comments. I certainy appreciate them and I'm so glad you enjoyed this.
Beth
Comment from Magics02
This write is so beautiful. The honesty, feelings and thoughts you wrote of here have surely reached me this night. It is like a mothers letter to her daughter, that is how I felt. Very good here and very deserving of the winning ribbon!! Magics
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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This write is so beautiful. The honesty, feelings and thoughts you wrote of here have surely reached me this night. It is like a mothers letter to her daughter, that is how I felt. Very good here and very deserving of the winning ribbon!! Magics
Comment Written 20-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovely comments. It was heartfelt and I enjoyed writing it.
Hugs,
Beth
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You are so welcome as I am still sitting here thinking of it:) hugs to you fine lady. Magics
Comment from patmedium
This is very well written indeed. I have thoroughly enjoyed reading. I find the author's notes somewhat confusing, though. Pat.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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This is very well written indeed. I have thoroughly enjoyed reading. I find the author's notes somewhat confusing, though. Pat.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Hi Pat, Thanks for the review and nice comment. As to the author's notes, I was repeating the writing prompt in my own words. Here what it actually said:
If you could return in time and warn the child, inspire the young person, that would eventually become you,,,,what would you tell him/her?
Comment from Matoshka
I so enjoyed reading this. I could see it, going back in time to tell ourselves about not making the same mistakes. To tell ourselves God does love us, to be content with what we have. It would be such a blessing if we really could go back. I loved how your story flowed so smoothly from beginning to end. This was just excellent writing.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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I so enjoyed reading this. I could see it, going back in time to tell ourselves about not making the same mistakes. To tell ourselves God does love us, to be content with what we have. It would be such a blessing if we really could go back. I loved how your story flowed so smoothly from beginning to end. This was just excellent writing.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much for the review of six stars and the wonderful comments. I wish that had been possible but at least in the end we do learn from our mistakes. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
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You are so very welcome and we do learn. I did enjoy it. Blessings.
Comment from Nefarioushibachi
I thought this was a great piece. It works especially well towards the end. It feels a bit loose in the beginning, and tightens up towards the end. Maybe a different introduction sentence would make the beginning feel more clean.
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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I thought this was a great piece. It works especially well towards the end. It feels a bit loose in the beginning, and tightens up towards the end. Maybe a different introduction sentence would make the beginning feel more clean.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I appreciate your suggestion.
Comment from missy98writer
Mystery Writer,
your essay is awesomely written. You narrative is excellent. Adorable vintage art work you used. You offer sage advice for a child. I enjoyed the lines: "Your life will always be filled with love. There is something out there for you who will love you and take care of you." I can so relate to the advice of the fat gene you inherited will catch up with you. I so agree with your advice that your words will be used against you. I read this aloud to my family and they told me to vote for you and you will be getting my vote in the voting booth. Your essay give terrific advice to a young child.
Missy.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Mystery Writer,
your essay is awesomely written. You narrative is excellent. Adorable vintage art work you used. You offer sage advice for a child. I enjoyed the lines: "Your life will always be filled with love. There is something out there for you who will love you and take care of you." I can so relate to the advice of the fat gene you inherited will catch up with you. I so agree with your advice that your words will be used against you. I read this aloud to my family and they told me to vote for you and you will be getting my vote in the voting booth. Your essay give terrific advice to a young child.
Missy.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much Missy, I'm so glad you liked this and I'm pleased that you intend to vote for me. Your comments are awesome.
Hugs,
Comment from BradJarvis
An excellent piece! Love the way you did it, the sentiment, and the real feel to it. Only a minor nit (not worth revising): "O.K." should be either "OK" or "okay" (without punctuation).
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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An excellent piece! Love the way you did it, the sentiment, and the real feel to it. Only a minor nit (not worth revising): "O.K." should be either "OK" or "okay" (without punctuation).
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. I appreciate you reading this. I'll fix the okey.
Comment from Changeisgood
If only we could hear our future selves. In this case, the adult has grown wise. Maybe some of your futurity did seep back and help shape your youth. Liked your advice about the piano lessons and the hints about what you, as an adult, would do. Also, that the youngster's parents would grow old together. That stood out as being highly unbelievable at the time (of your youth).
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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If only we could hear our future selves. In this case, the adult has grown wise. Maybe some of your futurity did seep back and help shape your youth. Liked your advice about the piano lessons and the hints about what you, as an adult, would do. Also, that the youngster's parents would grow old together. That stood out as being highly unbelievable at the time (of your youth).
Comment Written 20-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much for the review and your comment. I wish it would have been posible to know all this earlier. I worried a lot as a child that my parents would not stay together. Actually they probably shouldn't have.
Comment from richard7
Very full advice from a parent to the child.
Well written and clear to read with lots of good advice on how to discover, learn and grow through time.
a good message to the girl from her mother, with a positive note that they will meet inhereafter.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Very full advice from a parent to the child.
Well written and clear to read with lots of good advice on how to discover, learn and grow through time.
a good message to the girl from her mother, with a positive note that they will meet inhereafter.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. Actually it is advice from the person you know are to the child who will become you. Just a bit of time travel back into the past to warn that child about pitfalls they may face.
Comment from Robin Moynihan
This was a pleasant, positive message. I especially enjoyed the last paragraph, nice advice for all of us. I also enjoyed the thought at the beginning;Let it be a surprise. Life's more fun that way.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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This was a pleasant, positive message. I especially enjoyed the last paragraph, nice advice for all of us. I also enjoyed the thought at the beginning;Let it be a surprise. Life's more fun that way.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much for the review, Robin, I so glad you liked it.
Hugs
