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Comment from TT7Z
Your poem tends to portray Brandon as the younger brother that keeps getting the short end of the stick when it comes to playing with his older sisters. Nice imagery here, I see a couple of kids playing as the sister reaches over and restarts the game, then sitting at the table all chatting and conversing ever anxious to get back to the game play. Yet ever mindful of who is really in charge. Nice piece, well written, great piece. Thank you.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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Your poem tends to portray Brandon as the younger brother that keeps getting the short end of the stick when it comes to playing with his older sisters. Nice imagery here, I see a couple of kids playing as the sister reaches over and restarts the game, then sitting at the table all chatting and conversing ever anxious to get back to the game play. Yet ever mindful of who is really in charge. Nice piece, well written, great piece. Thank you.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind words TT7Z They are greatly appreciated.
Comment from misscookie
That sound like a home filled with love and happiness.
I love the flow of your poem.And how you describe how the children plays together. It reminded me when my guys were young. Thanks for sharing oops sorry for the 4 I hit the wrong number I hope kit change to a 5.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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That sound like a home filled with love and happiness.
I love the flow of your poem.And how you describe how the children plays together. It reminded me when my guys were young. Thanks for sharing oops sorry for the 4 I hit the wrong number I hope kit change to a 5.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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Yes it is filled with love and happiness. And yes it did turn to 5 Thank You
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I'm glad take care.
Comment from koneart
Growing up as the only boy
Having only two sisters is such a joy!
Poor Kid! Being the only boy. He'll need a lot of love!
Dinner rolls around [put a comma here would really help] game is put away
Got to eat before you can play.
What a nice kid. I love him, too!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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Growing up as the only boy
Having only two sisters is such a joy!
Poor Kid! Being the only boy. He'll need a lot of love!
Dinner rolls around [put a comma here would really help] game is put away
Got to eat before you can play.
What a nice kid. I love him, too!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind words, I'm glad you could relate. Pleas take some time and read my other writings you may enjoy them just as much. Have a wonderful day:)
Comment from samandlancelot
The picture you have created of Brandon is very special and heart-warming. I liked how his sister restarted the game when she was losing. Funny!
Loving his DS games a lot
(What are DS games?)
On his pray of oh yum, yum (I don't understand this line.)
Their families (family's) time what a deal!
Lights Dads (Dad's) heart up with lots of sparks
Give them time and we'll no (know) when
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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The picture you have created of Brandon is very special and heart-warming. I liked how his sister restarted the game when she was losing. Funny!
Loving his DS games a lot
(What are DS games?)
On his pray of oh yum, yum (I don't understand this line.)
Their families (family's) time what a deal!
Lights Dads (Dad's) heart up with lots of sparks
Give them time and we'll no (know) when
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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DS games are game boxes you hook up to the TV and can be played by one or more players at the same time. As for the oh Yum yum that was for the cat that pounced his pray and possibly eating it-hense Yum(Good eating) Thank you for the corrections I will make them and hope you have a better understanding now of this poem. Thank you for reading it. Please take some time and read my other works you may enjoy those also. Have a wonderful day.
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pounced his pray (prey) and possibly -
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Yes your righ! Thank yout
Comment from BethShelby
This little boy sounds like quite a fun young man. My son grew up with three sisters. Sometimes it's not easy being the only boy. The scene you describe so well in your poem is very typical of a loving family.
and we'll no when (we'll know when)
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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This little boy sounds like quite a fun young man. My son grew up with three sisters. Sometimes it's not easy being the only boy. The scene you describe so well in your poem is very typical of a loving family.
and we'll no when (we'll know when)
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind words, I'm glad you could relate. Pleas take some time and read my other writings you may enjoy them just as much. Have a wonderful day:)
Comment from Tushy
Thought this was a really entertaining and enjoyable poem. I have a son & a daugher so could relate to so much of it! It is well written and has a good rhyming scheme. Enjoyable poem!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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Thought this was a really entertaining and enjoyable poem. I have a son & a daugher so could relate to so much of it! It is well written and has a good rhyming scheme. Enjoyable poem!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind words, I'm glad you could relate. Pleas take some time and read my other writings you may enjoy them just as much. Have a wonderful day:)
