The Battle On Teewinot Range
Two stallions fight for dominance18 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
This is a great story. It if full of action and violence. I learned some things about the nature of stallions that I didn't know before. The white horse in the picture is beautiful. Congratulation for having had this story published. I can understand why.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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This is a great story. It if full of action and violence. I learned some things about the nature of stallions that I didn't know before. The white horse in the picture is beautiful. Congratulation for having had this story published. I can understand why.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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Oh Beth! Thank you!! Well, this story wasn't the one, it was the first one about the character Cal..."The Horseman", I don't remember if you reviewed it or not. But some man in Montana contacted me and then put it in his new publication up there! It was neat! I was paid by an ad for my art. I sure am happy you liked this. Your opinion means a great deal to me. ") I hope you are having a great weekend too Beth. We are finally getting some rain, not heavy, but at least SOME! Whew. ") HUG!!! Susan
Comment from anne1204
That is a great story as a stand alone or in a book. What is the publication you have mentioned in the authors notes. This is the first I have read of yours like this. It is great. Anne 1204
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That is a great story as a stand alone or in a book. What is the publication you have mentioned in the authors notes. This is the first I have read of yours like this. It is great. Anne 1204
Comment Written 13-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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Hi Anne! Thanks! It's in my portfolio, called "The Horseman" it was put in a thing called "GreatFallsLittleWords", it's not online yet, I wish I could show you, the man sent me a copy of it. I was so surprised, he paid me with a free ad for my art in it. Tom had warned me it could be a scam, but it was legitimate! I was so happy. Also, "The Lonesome Pines Of Mt. Teewinot" are connected to this. I hope you like them too? They are about as long as this. Thank you for taking time for me Anne, I really do appreciate it. I hope you are having a nice weekend! Susan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Boy you were up early to post. I hope you plan on extending this. I can see a much longer story.
Jackson Hole (gorgeous place)
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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Boy you were up early to post. I hope you plan on extending this. I can see a much longer story.
Jackson Hole (gorgeous place)
Comment Written 13-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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Hi Barbara! Yes, I had this started a month ago, and last evening just decided to get it done. There are two in my portfolio that are the start of this, I think you reviewed them? "The Horseman" and "The Lonesome Pines Of Mt. Teewinot", but thank you for this time for me Barb!! I really appreciate it! I would love to live in Wyoming, but for the winter..."/ ") Smiles! Susan
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What an amazing story with great imagery, making it a pleasure to read, Susan...
new grass, it was
new grass; it was
had became
had become
behind her[,](;) they trusted her
staying low[,](;) he followed - either change - or
staying low, following
horses skull - horse's skull
stringing it's hooves - its
it's flanks - its
Margaret
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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What an amazing story with great imagery, making it a pleasure to read, Susan...
new grass, it was
new grass; it was
had became
had become
behind her[,](;) they trusted her
staying low[,](;) he followed - either change - or
staying low, following
horses skull - horse's skull
stringing it's hooves - its
it's flanks - its
Margaret
Comment Written 13-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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Hi Margaret! Wow, thank you for this help! I really did TRY?? ") to edit and find all of these sorts of things! AHhhhhh!!! ") How I appreciate this, I can't tell you. I couldn't nominate you again yet either..."( I am thrilled that you liked this Margaret...luv! Susan
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is a very strong piece of writing; it is very non passive and is written with varied vocabulary and good use of imagery and description
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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This is a very strong piece of writing; it is very non passive and is written with varied vocabulary and good use of imagery and description
Comment Written 13-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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Hi Goldwell!! Thank you very much! I really do appreciate your time to read this for me, and the kind rating too! ") Susan
Comment from c_lucas
Nature is not easily pleased. The survival of the fittest reules. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
and he wanted help Foley too. (something is missing)
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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Nature is not easily pleased. The survival of the fittest reules. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
and he wanted help Foley too. (something is missing)
Comment Written 13-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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Hi Charlie! Thank you!! I will look at that sentence and see what I did! Thanks! Your input is always great. Susan
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You're welcome, Susan. Charlie
Comment from humpwhistle
Susan, you have a gift for writing about the land and your beloved horses. This story is eloquent and captivating. I believe this is my introduction to your Cal and Tanka tales. When I get a chance, I will look up the others. Good tale. (You might want to re-read---a few spag issues.) Peace, Lee
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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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Susan, you have a gift for writing about the land and your beloved horses. This story is eloquent and captivating. I believe this is my introduction to your Cal and Tanka tales. When I get a chance, I will look up the others. Good tale. (You might want to re-read---a few spag issues.) Peace, Lee
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Comment Written 13-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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Hi Lee!! Thank you! I have lots to do, I really did edit this, and thought I had it! Boy, woe is me. Thank you my friend. It's wonderful to hear from you! Susan
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Not to worry, Susan. Spag doesn't concern me, but it means something to others. You have told me about the latest Cousin's outing yet. Peace, Lee
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A lovely story what a nice place is the story where you live, however its lovely and there must be loads of stories you can create, in a place like it. A good story well written with good flow. Thanks Mary
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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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A lovely story what a nice place is the story where you live, however its lovely and there must be loads of stories you can create, in a place like it. A good story well written with good flow. Thanks Mary
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Comment Written 13-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2010
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Dear Mary~ Thank you for being the first to read this for me! I'm truly thrilled that you like this, I do need to say, I live in the midwest, the state of Indiana, but my heart is always elsewhere. I love the western states, especially Montana and Wyoming. I love Tennessee too. But I am stuck in this hateful place, and writing is the only way I can be "free". I think I was a horse in a past life, lol. Thanks again for being such a great fan!! xox...Susan
