Martini
Is she real or a dream?81 total reviews
Comment from arsinBW
This is a good one and I can relate to it in more ways than one. Is her refering to the alcohol. It read that way to me which I liked.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2013
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This is a good one and I can relate to it in more ways than one. Is her refering to the alcohol. It read that way to me which I liked.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2013
Hello Barb,
"fantasy and reality in a muse can take us beyond the limits of imagination, especially with a bottle of martinis
This line came from a wonderful poet on fan story. Love it!!
So pleased that you enjoyed my poem. "martini" is the first poem I wrote after a poem writing hiatus of 35 years. It has taken some editing to get here.
To answer your question, "is her referring to the alcohol", I would say that "her" is a reference to this woman, real or not, who has him in quite a tizzy.
Peace,
Jill
:-)
This should have come with a disclaimer, no martinis were consumed prior to or during the crafting of this poem!...scouts honor
LOL
Comment from Bill Schott
I'm not entirely sure but I think the delirium tremors will be following these waking hallucinations that are luring him into the miasma.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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I'm not entirely sure but I think the delirium tremors will be following these waking hallucinations that are luring him into the miasma.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Hi bill,
Thank you for your entirely candid impressions of my poem "martini".
Peace,
Jill
:-)
Comment from Tonulak
Great word choices and a real "film noir" sense conveyed here....The fantasy could be real or the product of "living in the bottle". A fascinating write--Ted
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Great word choices and a real "film noir" sense conveyed here....The fantasy could be real or the product of "living in the bottle". A fascinating write--Ted
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
Hello Ted,
"fantasy and reality in a muse can take us beyond the limits of imagination, especially with a bottle of martini in hand"
This line came from a wonderful poet on fan story. Love it!!
So pleased that you enjoyed my poem. "martini" is the first poem I wrote after a poem writing hiatus of 35 years. It has taken some editing to get here....
"great word choices and a real film noir sense conveyed....a fascinating write...."
feels even more gratifying than it sounds!!
It will be a pleasure getting to know you through your poems
Any favorite titles in your portfolio?
Peace,
Jill
:-)
This should have come with a disclaimer, no martinis were consumed prior to or during the crafting of this poem!...scouts honor
LOL
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No Martinis? That's a pity, though I can't drink gin....somethng in it, the juniper berries? Vodka martini for me, though I like the "brown/amber" hard spirits, but adore fine wine (I actually wrote about food and wine for a time). I'm pretty confident in my poetry....beauty is in the eye....
Interesting stuff you've penned--Ted
Comment from michaelcahill
this is absolutely spectacular. every word so perfectly appointed to the precise space it belongs in. original phrase after beautiful original phrase. even the shape is enticing with a martini in the middle. not much of a critique I realize. but great is great. thank you. mike
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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this is absolutely spectacular. every word so perfectly appointed to the precise space it belongs in. original phrase after beautiful original phrase. even the shape is enticing with a martini in the middle. not much of a critique I realize. but great is great. thank you. mike
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
Hello mike,
"fantasy and reality in a muse can take us beyond the limits of imagination, especially with a bottle of martini in hand"
This line came from a wonderful poet on fan story. Love it!!
So pleased that you enjoyed my poem. "martini" is the first poem I wrote after a poem writing hiatus of 35 years. It has taken some editing to get here....
"absolutely spectacular...original phrase after beautiful original phrase....great is great."
feels even more amazing than it sounds!!
It will be a pleasure getting to know you through your poems
Peace,
Jill
:-)
This should have come with a disclaimer, no martinis were consumed prior to or during the crafting of this poem!...scouts honor
LOL
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ha! I also stopped writing for a very long while. what were we thinking? welcome back! mike
Comment from sunnilicious
That is a wonderful poetic narrative, especially for a Friday afternoon. You are creative as this poem drips with focused visual imagery. Romantic and expressive. Fantastic work.
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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That is a wonderful poetic narrative, especially for a Friday afternoon. You are creative as this poem drips with focused visual imagery. Romantic and expressive. Fantastic work.
glitter-graphics.com
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
Hi Sunni,
"fantasy and reality in a muse can take us beyond the limits of imagination, especially with a bottle of martini in hand"
This line came from a wonderful poet on fan story. Love it!!
So pleased that you enjoyed my poem. "martini" is the first poem I wrote after a poem writing hiatus of 35 years. It has taken some editing to get here.... ."
"wonderful poetic narrative....drips with focused visual imagery....fantastic work!"
feels even more gratifying than it sounds!!
Peace, hugs and lots of smiles,
Jill
:-)
This should have come with a disclaimer, no martinis were consumed prior to or during the crafting of this poem!...scouts honor
LOL
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Hi Jill. You're nice. Have a great day! H&K, Alicia
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, what a fantastic imagination and what mental images this poem evokes - I can almost see the femme fatale he is seeing or imagining! Now that's a real buzz he's got going on! LOL
Greatly entertaining poem. I enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Wow, what a fantastic imagination and what mental images this poem evokes - I can almost see the femme fatale he is seeing or imagining! Now that's a real buzz he's got going on! LOL
Greatly entertaining poem. I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
Hi dawn,
"fantasy and reality in a muse can take us beyond the limits of imagination, especially with a bottle of martini in hand"
This line came from a wonderful poet on fan story. Love it!!
So pleased that you enjoyed my poem. "martini" is the first poem I wrote after a poem writing hiatus of 35 years. It has taken some editing to get here....
"what a fantastic imagination and what mental images this poem evokes...greatly entertaining..."
feels even more gratifying than it sounds!!
Peace,
Jill
:-)
This should have come with a disclaimer, no martinis were consumed prior to or during the crafting of this poem!...scouts honor
LOL
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LOL - yes, but how could I know for sure, hmm? ... the girl guide...:)
You're most welcome.
Comment from S A Bullen
That was excellent. I really enjoyed it. The chaos on the desk in the after-mourn. The hazy effects of alcohol and the desire it creates. You did this so well. I could actually visualise it. Well done. Sheryn :-)
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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That was excellent. I really enjoyed it. The chaos on the desk in the after-mourn. The hazy effects of alcohol and the desire it creates. You did this so well. I could actually visualise it. Well done. Sheryn :-)
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
Hi sheryn,
"fantasy and reality in a muse can take us beyond the limits of imagination, especially with a bottle of martini in hand"
This line came from a wonderful poet on fan story. Love it!!
So pleased that you enjoyed my poem. "martini" is the first poem I wrote after a poem writing hiatus of 35 years. It has taken some editing to get here....
"that was excellent....you did this so well. I could actually visualize it...."
feels even more gratifying than it sounds!!
Peace,
Jill
:-)
This should have come with a disclaimer, no actual martinis were consumed prior to or during the crafting of this poem!...scouts honor
LOL
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Lol. :-)
Comment from watergirl
What an interesting poem, I liked it a lot. It leaves the reader wondering just how surreal or otherwise this femme is. Mystery and yet real. "Something distant like a wish"
I liked that line. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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What an interesting poem, I liked it a lot. It leaves the reader wondering just how surreal or otherwise this femme is. Mystery and yet real. "Something distant like a wish"
I liked that line. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
Hi watergirl,
"fantasy and reality in a muse can take us beyond the limits of imagination, especially with a bottle of martini in hand"
This line came from a wonderful poet on fan story. Love it!!
So pleased that you enjoyed my poem. "martini" is the first poem I wrote after a poem writing hiatus of 35 years. It has taken some editing to get here....
"...an interesting poem....liked it a lot....well done"
feels even more gratifying than it sounds!!
Peace,
Jill
:-)
This should have come with a disclaimer, no actual martinis were consumed prior to or during the crafting of this poem!...scouts honor
LOL
Comment from Parissa
Well written poem and very interesting. You shown great imagery and paint a very detailed picture. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Well written poem and very interesting. You shown great imagery and paint a very detailed picture. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Hello Parissa,
"fantasy and reality in a muse can take us beyond the limits of imagination, especially with a bottle of martini in hand"
This line came from a wonderful poet on fan story. Love it!!
So pleased that you enjoyed my poem. "martini" is the first poem I wrote after a poem writing hiatus of 35 years. It has taken some editing to get here....
"well written....shown great imagery...."
feels even more gratifying than it sounds!!
It will be a pleasure getting to know you through your poems
Any favorite titles in your portfolio?
Peace,
Jill
:-)
This should have come with a disclaimer, no martinis were consumed prior to or during the crafting of this poem!...scouts honor
LOL
Comment from rightforyou
I enjoyed the reading of this poem and think it should do very well in the free style contest good luck and keep the girls off of my desk...Thanks Ron
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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I enjoyed the reading of this poem and think it should do very well in the free style contest good luck and keep the girls off of my desk...Thanks Ron
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Hello Ron,
"fantasy and reality in a muse can take us beyond the limits of imagination, especially with a bottle of martini in hand"
This line came from a wonderful poet on fan story. Love it!!
So pleased that you enjoyed my poem. "martini" is the first poem I wrote after a poem writing hiatus of 35 years. It has taken some editing to get here....
feels even more gratifying than it sounds!!
Will do my best to keep the girls off of your desk....
LOL
Peace,
Jill
:-)
This should have come with a disclaimer, no martinis were consumed prior to or during the crafting of this poem!... scouts honor
LOL
