Stillborn
In The Father's office32 total reviews
Comment from Kasey Carroll
This is an interesting topic for a story. I enjoyed reading your spin on the "waiting" of the stillborn. The young man hopefully gets a second chance. A good story.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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This is an interesting topic for a story. I enjoyed reading your spin on the "waiting" of the stillborn. The young man hopefully gets a second chance. A good story.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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Thank you, KC. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I'm surprised and delighted you pulled it from my portfolio. Thank you again. Peace, Lee
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Still exploring the site and I decided to drop in. I imagine Him with a Yiddish accent rather than Irish, but we're on the same page. A gentle, hopeful tale. Nancy
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2010
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Still exploring the site and I decided to drop in. I imagine Him with a Yiddish accent rather than Irish, but we're on the same page. A gentle, hopeful tale. Nancy
Comment Written 04-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2010
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Thank you Nancy. It is always an unexpected pleasure when someone delves into the archives. I appreciate it. Peace, Lee
Comment from hotstuff
Goodness, this is such a powerful story. I felt like sobbing my heart out, so am sat here with a great big lump of emotion in my throat. I can understand how you were a winner in the competition. Superb writing detailing complex thoughts about life and death in a way that was both interesting and very moving. I want to thank you and wish I had a six star to give you.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Goodness, this is such a powerful story. I felt like sobbing my heart out, so am sat here with a great big lump of emotion in my throat. I can understand how you were a winner in the competition. Superb writing detailing complex thoughts about life and death in a way that was both interesting and very moving. I want to thank you and wish I had a six star to give you.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much, hotstuff, for your very thoughtful comments. A review such as this transcends stars. My deepest appreciation. Peace, Lee
Comment from findingmyroom
I can see why your story placed in the contest...Congrats! This is a terrific, magical yet homey view of a life that wasn't quite. I've never considered the perspective of a stillborn voice before. Excellent.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2010
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I can see why your story placed in the contest...Congrats! This is a terrific, magical yet homey view of a life that wasn't quite. I've never considered the perspective of a stillborn voice before. Excellent.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much for the galaxy of stars and the wonderful comments. I am honored that you enjoyed my story. Peace, Lee
Comment from MissMerri
A marvelously told and truly strange story, Lee. I loved the creativity in the idea, for starters, and the way it was told made it so believable, as if I were actually watching this conversation play out before my eyes. It was truly a remarkable story in every way. How creative you are!!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
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A marvelously told and truly strange story, Lee. I loved the creativity in the idea, for starters, and the way it was told made it so believable, as if I were actually watching this conversation play out before my eyes. It was truly a remarkable story in every way. How creative you are!!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much MissMerri. Reviews like this are what we all live for---not the stars so much, but the encouragement of our talented peers. You make me proud. Thank you. Peace, Lee
Comment from whitteron
You are indeed a storyteller, and perhaps add a dash of theology to spice things up. This is clever, orginal, and well written. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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You are indeed a storyteller, and perhaps add a dash of theology to spice things up. This is clever, orginal, and well written. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Thany you for the good thoughts. Peace, Lee
Comment from marcellawachtel
Great fairy-tale type story. Starts slow and keeps on rolling into a full fledged most entertaining and sweet narrative. I enjoyed reading this very much.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Great fairy-tale type story. Starts slow and keeps on rolling into a full fledged most entertaining and sweet narrative. I enjoyed reading this very much.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Thank you so much for your kind words. Peace, Lee
Comment from Lon Frank
I love it!
My favorite line:
"Ah, but look at me now. All the experience in the world, and I still can't keep the lint out of the belly-button, now can I?"
LOL! Sums up all our contemplations and confabulations of God, now donnit? And, the whole of life as mostly the fabric of waiting; what a deep thought. We wait to be, then wait to be gone; wait to arrive then wait to leave. We wait to fall in love, then sometimes wait to escape.
Great job, Lee!
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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I love it!
My favorite line:
"Ah, but look at me now. All the experience in the world, and I still can't keep the lint out of the belly-button, now can I?"
LOL! Sums up all our contemplations and confabulations of God, now donnit? And, the whole of life as mostly the fabric of waiting; what a deep thought. We wait to be, then wait to be gone; wait to arrive then wait to leave. We wait to fall in love, then sometimes wait to escape.
Great job, Lee!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Thank you Lon. I greatly appreciate your comments. Best of lluck to you, man. Peace, Lee
Comment from Soledadpaz
Wow! Lee, this is amazing! I am so glad I popped into my voting booth or I would have never seen this entry of yours. It is truly a special write. The line: "But they were waiting to love me" gave me chills.
"Waiting is the tense in which life is truly written" is the ultimate profound thought. That is so on the mark, it is eerie.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Wow! Lee, this is amazing! I am so glad I popped into my voting booth or I would have never seen this entry of yours. It is truly a special write. The line: "But they were waiting to love me" gave me chills.
"Waiting is the tense in which life is truly written" is the ultimate profound thought. That is so on the mark, it is eerie.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Sole, thank you so much. The stars are wonderful, but that you picked out two of my favorite lines is even better. Peace, Lee
Comment from sugardog
Lee, I seemed to have missed this one-not sure why. Was it a blind entry?? Anyway, what a wonderful story-truly enjoyable!!! I love the way you show a boy coming to God in his office in heaven to talk to him about being a stillborn and if maybe he could get another chance...you show us how it might be when someone is dead and how the family is missing and wanted that child. And you give us hope at the end-LOVE that! I could picture this sweet boy talking to the big man-the dialogue was spot on, so well done. An extremely well written piece. I see why it's nominated and I wish you lots of luck!!! Have been out of town for a bit, so sorry I am behind! Hope you and your mother are well. :) Dana
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Lee, I seemed to have missed this one-not sure why. Was it a blind entry?? Anyway, what a wonderful story-truly enjoyable!!! I love the way you show a boy coming to God in his office in heaven to talk to him about being a stillborn and if maybe he could get another chance...you show us how it might be when someone is dead and how the family is missing and wanted that child. And you give us hope at the end-LOVE that! I could picture this sweet boy talking to the big man-the dialogue was spot on, so well done. An extremely well written piece. I see why it's nominated and I wish you lots of luck!!! Have been out of town for a bit, so sorry I am behind! Hope you and your mother are well. :) Dana
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Sug, thank you so much for the generous stars, but even more for the thoughtful words. I'm really happy that you caught up with this story. Thanks for finding it. Hope to hear from you again soon. Peace Dana, Lee
