Sole Conveyance
Free verse seasonal contest entry27 total reviews
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
"Fleedleflump" this is real poetry. You have structure, cadence, meter and qualities of metaphor in beautiful literature. It gets my vote.
Don
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2010
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"Fleedleflump" this is real poetry. You have structure, cadence, meter and qualities of metaphor in beautiful literature. It gets my vote.
Don
Comment Written 07-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2010
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Thank you, Don. You've really made me feel good about this piece. I'm so glad you plugged into the emotions.
Mike
Comment from MyYiaYia
Hey Mike, I enjoyed the read. I can commiserate with you. I too like to be alone at times to write. I snuggle in bed with the blankets and think about what to write. Sometimes it comes to me, sometimes it is only a sentence, sometimes nothing. I liked this piece about being cold and devoid of anything and finally warming up and finding what you were looking for. A really great poem. Debbie :0) BTW, how is your fiance doing? It has been awhile, but your piece reminded me of her. Don't ask why, cause I can't answer that.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2010
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Hey Mike, I enjoyed the read. I can commiserate with you. I too like to be alone at times to write. I snuggle in bed with the blankets and think about what to write. Sometimes it comes to me, sometimes it is only a sentence, sometimes nothing. I liked this piece about being cold and devoid of anything and finally warming up and finding what you were looking for. A really great poem. Debbie :0) BTW, how is your fiance doing? It has been awhile, but your piece reminded me of her. Don't ask why, cause I can't answer that.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2010
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Thank you :-). For the lovely, empathic review, and for your concern. My fiance is mostly recovered from her double surgery now, and is busy looking for a new job. The wedding is only a month away now, too! Talk about stress and happiness combining!
I think being alone for periods of time is absolutely essential for any creative spirit. It was helps us remember who we are :-)
Mike
Comment from Lady Jane
It's wonderful that in poetry you find the freedom to traipse through the seasons of your life :) Well written poem here, fleedleflump. And, where did you get that name. It sounds like something from Willy Wonka :) I enjoyed reading this soulful write and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2010
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It's wonderful that in poetry you find the freedom to traipse through the seasons of your life :) Well written poem here, fleedleflump. And, where did you get that name. It sounds like something from Willy Wonka :) I enjoyed reading this soulful write and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2010
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I've always been one for writing random sentences into the margins and gaps of my notebooks. School was no different, and once, back in ye olde days when I was a teen, I scribble "Fleedleflump Beeblemooer has no belly button" in my Maths exercise book, much to the disgust of my teacher. Therein was Fleedleflump born, and I've used him ever since!
In those times of quiet solitude, alone with my thoughts, it's Fleedleflump who brings me the words.
Mike
Comment from patmedium
Yep ... here stands our Mike, once again, doing what he excells at - writing navy blue words which always, to me, have a STRONG gleam of starlight to them! Pat.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2010
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Yep ... here stands our Mike, once again, doing what he excells at - writing navy blue words which always, to me, have a STRONG gleam of starlight to them! Pat.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2010
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Now there is a review by a lady who knows how to write them! Thank you, my dear :-)
Mike
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Flatterer! Hey... whatever happened to that gloriously dark write about the fall of civilisation? I don't recall a final ending? Did I miss something somewhere?
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Oh, it had an ending alright, and it was way darker than I'd anticipated. I don't recall in you reviewed it or not. It's called "Terra Sanctum: A shadow on the Grey". If you click the Books tab in my portfolio it's the top entry, then you just need to go to chapter 10 :-)
Mike
Comment from JennieClare
A worthy contender for the contest describing your depressed state during the winter. And then comes the spring thank the Lord! we always welcome the end of winter don't we and the beginnings of new life. great poem. Jennieclare
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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A worthy contender for the contest describing your depressed state during the winter. And then comes the spring thank the Lord! we always welcome the end of winter don't we and the beginnings of new life. great poem. Jennieclare
Comment Written 04-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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Thank you, Jannie :-). I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem.
Mike
Comment from amada
This is a very emotional and sincere. It attracts me the creative way in which you describe your demons, driving chills, the shadow beast, etc. "finding my way, the black over the grey" is my favorite one. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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This is a very emotional and sincere. It attracts me the creative way in which you describe your demons, driving chills, the shadow beast, etc. "finding my way, the black over the grey" is my favorite one. Best wishes!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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Thanks, Amada :-). I thought it would be difficult to write a more biographical poem (I usually assume characters when I write), but it came very naturally in the end.
Mike
Comment from adewpearl
Huge surprise that you chose winter chills, MIke ;-)
buffeted and scalded by cold's bite
that icy tone that you intone
my thoughts and dreams but skeletal reminders - these are just some of my favorite lines, compelling in their imagery and word choices :-)
I absolutely love the shift in outlook in the final verse as words are your salvation and vindication :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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Huge surprise that you chose winter chills, MIke ;-)
buffeted and scalded by cold's bite
that icy tone that you intone
my thoughts and dreams but skeletal reminders - these are just some of my favorite lines, compelling in their imagery and word choices :-)
I absolutely love the shift in outlook in the final verse as words are your salvation and vindication :-) Brooke
Comment Written 04-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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If it's been a story, I had a cracker of an idea for Spring, but when poetry was the key, and in response to a heavy level of frsutration I was feeling yesterday, well, it was Winter all the way ;-). I'd been composing lines in my head for a while, and the mood (and the suddenly looming contest deadline!) hit me just right. Thank you, Brooke :-)
Mike
Comment from RaymondJohn
It's great you can write your way out of your funk. I find it helps a lot, too. I have been more motivated to write lately, so I know the feeling. Nice forward movement, imagery and use of language. You have always been one of my favorite writers. Ray
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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It's great you can write your way out of your funk. I find it helps a lot, too. I have been more motivated to write lately, so I know the feeling. Nice forward movement, imagery and use of language. You have always been one of my favorite writers. Ray
Comment Written 04-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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Thanks, Ray! I'm rarely as high on life as when I'm churning out poetry and stories. Usually my low times come when I'm too busy at home or work, or just too plainknackered, to write. One day I'll earn my keep with it, then hopefully I won't have so many clashes (wishful thinking!).
Mike
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Well, if this is how you
write when depressed, Mike,
then just think how talented you
are and you won't feel so low again.
Ill-health is all that ever pulls
me down, and being high-spirited by
nature, it shows - so like you - my
remedy is to write... and so... my
spirits are lifted.
I simply loved this - need I say more...
here is a deserving six...
And good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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Well, if this is how you
write when depressed, Mike,
then just think how talented you
are and you won't feel so low again.
Ill-health is all that ever pulls
me down, and being high-spirited by
nature, it shows - so like you - my
remedy is to write... and so... my
spirits are lifted.
I simply loved this - need I say more...
here is a deserving six...
And good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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Thank you, Margaret :-). I usually write very happy, hopeful poetry when I'm down, and it usually does the trick. My darkest, most depressing poetry is usually written when I'm happy - perhaps because it's safe to do so with a high mood to cushion me! All I know for sure is the words work their magic best when I'm have a quiet alone-moment :-)
Mike
Comment from missy98writer
Mike,
your poem is an excellent entry in the Seasonal Journey Through Life contest. Great title Sole Conveyance. Your poem is deeply emotional with wonderful narrative and very descriptive writing. Fitting art work you used. Effective use of metaphor such as driving chills, upon my heard, icy tone that you intone, unmakes the walls, sets the stones, within my hearth, find my way back, harder than intent, need to vent, shadow beast unleashed, scorn devours, Winter's pale expanse, skeletal reminders, cold's bite, within chagrin, lock myself away, self indulgent wit, determined lines, defining what I want to be, aspiring fame, wrought in me, ailing form, haven from the storm, words are my salvation and Spring-born smiles. Deep, dark and thought pondering free verse. Good luck to you in the voting booth.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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Mike,
your poem is an excellent entry in the Seasonal Journey Through Life contest. Great title Sole Conveyance. Your poem is deeply emotional with wonderful narrative and very descriptive writing. Fitting art work you used. Effective use of metaphor such as driving chills, upon my heard, icy tone that you intone, unmakes the walls, sets the stones, within my hearth, find my way back, harder than intent, need to vent, shadow beast unleashed, scorn devours, Winter's pale expanse, skeletal reminders, cold's bite, within chagrin, lock myself away, self indulgent wit, determined lines, defining what I want to be, aspiring fame, wrought in me, ailing form, haven from the storm, words are my salvation and Spring-born smiles. Deep, dark and thought pondering free verse. Good luck to you in the voting booth.
Melissa.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
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Thank you, Melissa :-). I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. There's nothing like being utterly alone to make me feel at peace and inspired. If Winter is depression, then words are my Spring, and the words prefer to play when I'm on my own :-)
Mike
