The Crossing
a puma cub crosses a highway, practice flash23 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
This is a very well-written but sad story. You have told this story with good imagery and emotional appeal. It is true that the wildlife is gradually losing its ability to survive due to human encrochment on their territory.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2010
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This is a very well-written but sad story. You have told this story with good imagery and emotional appeal. It is true that the wildlife is gradually losing its ability to survive due to human encrochment on their territory.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2010
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Hi Beth! Thank you again! This is a favorite subject, I mean, I am always upset when an animal is hit along a road. SO very sad. I could really break your heart with one incident. But I won't. Thank you for this great review! Love, Susan
Comment from missy98writer
Susan,
your Western fiction story is wonderfully written and a delightful read. Your story paints a vivid picture in the readers head. Great action, very good narrative and good descriptive writing. Hos sad the baby cougar died. I loved the last paragraph and I loved this line: "the mother cougar finally left her cub, to disappear like a ghost into the red hills of Arizona." Your story was moving and technically excellent. It was a pleasure reading your short story. Have a lovely day or evening.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Susan,
your Western fiction story is wonderfully written and a delightful read. Your story paints a vivid picture in the readers head. Great action, very good narrative and good descriptive writing. Hos sad the baby cougar died. I loved the last paragraph and I loved this line: "the mother cougar finally left her cub, to disappear like a ghost into the red hills of Arizona." Your story was moving and technically excellent. It was a pleasure reading your short story. Have a lovely day or evening.
Melissa.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Hi Melissa! Thank you! I am happy to hear that you enjoyed this one! I love cougars! I hear they are starving in California, it's sad. Thank you again Melissa. HUGS!! Susan
Comment from Judian James
I am very bad with pieces like this. They are so devastating for me and I had to stop twice due to the tears. This is a very complimentary review because I normally would have stopped by the end of the first paragraph, but it was so well written, I felt compelled to read on. I hated it, but am very impressed with your skill in writing this tragic and true piece about man's infringing on natural habitats of animals in the wild
excellent, excellent writing
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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I am very bad with pieces like this. They are so devastating for me and I had to stop twice due to the tears. This is a very complimentary review because I normally would have stopped by the end of the first paragraph, but it was so well written, I felt compelled to read on. I hated it, but am very impressed with your skill in writing this tragic and true piece about man's infringing on natural habitats of animals in the wild
excellent, excellent writing
Comment Written 23-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Wow Jude, I am happy, yet not...that you were upset...but death is as much a part of life as life. Thank you so much, for reading this, your opinions always mean a lot to me. And I love all the wild things, and just can't stand to see so much "progress", but it is unstoppable. Thank you again my friend. Luv, Susan
Comment from Daylok
Excellent Topic and a great inspirational read!! Great story and very sad. Hopefully their will be better solutions in the near future!! Good job!!-Daylok
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Excellent Topic and a great inspirational read!! Great story and very sad. Hopefully their will be better solutions in the near future!! Good job!!-Daylok
Comment Written 23-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Hi Day! Yes, but you know, humans are just going to keep on taking over all the wildlands. It's a sad thing. SO very sad. I love the cougars. We have some in Indiana too. We have seen 4 or 5 in just this 3 county area in the passed few years. ") Just beautiful. One came up to our barn too, my son chased it off! Yes, he is a nitwit at times? ") Luv, Susan
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lol... nitwit maybe? Better safe than sorry though. Cougars are beautiful!!
Comment from highlander104
This is a beautiful story of a mother's love for her cub. We see this all too often, but as long as we continue soliciting newly developed properties, i.e., homes, shopping malls, and automobiles, there will be lots more loss of wildlife.
Good write.
Jean K.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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This is a beautiful story of a mother's love for her cub. We see this all too often, but as long as we continue soliciting newly developed properties, i.e., homes, shopping malls, and automobiles, there will be lots more loss of wildlife.
Good write.
Jean K.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Hi Jean! Thank you SO much. Yes, it is awful, but unstoppable I am afraid. I love the cougars, they are so beautiful. We have seen several of them in Indiana too! Thanks again, this review means a lot to me!! Susan
Comment from RKagan
This was so sad. Regardless of the animal that is hit by a car, I am always heartbroken when I see it. However, the thought of a beautiful cougar dead for no reason takes my breath away. This is well written and it touched me deeply.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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This was so sad. Regardless of the animal that is hit by a car, I am always heartbroken when I see it. However, the thought of a beautiful cougar dead for no reason takes my breath away. This is well written and it touched me deeply.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Hi R!! Thank you. For reading and sharing your thoughts. I am glad to evoke emotion, this is what we all like to do! I so appreciate your time to read and review too!! ") Smiles..Susan
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Oh, how sad is this, but
the sadest thing of all is,
it's true to life - wild-life
are affected by their ever
disappearing habitat.
a great read, Susan - Margaret.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Oh, how sad is this, but
the sadest thing of all is,
it's true to life - wild-life
are affected by their ever
disappearing habitat.
a great read, Susan - Margaret.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Hi Margaret!! Yes, I have heard about these lovely creatures starving in California and maybe Arizona, we have a few cougars in Indiana. They call them panthers here! I had one on tape a few years ago. It came up out of the woods. Stood beside our mailbox, and trotted nonchalantly down along the edge of the road out of sight! I was amazed! Thank you my friend, it's wonderful to know you like this one!! Luv, Susan
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
Wow what an exiting piece, it was exiting and tens, I loved the art work that you chose with it. Well done it needs no edit
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Wow what an exiting piece, it was exiting and tens, I loved the art work that you chose with it. Well done it needs no edit
Comment Written 23-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Hi Mary, Thank you very much. I always love seeing your name here, and to receive such helpful and encouraging reviews from you. Smiles! Susan
Comment from misscookie
Oh boy thuis is my second tear jerer this morning. this truly is a heart breaker because little by klittle man has destroy the free land, homesofmany beauitful wild animals.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2010
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Oh boy thuis is my second tear jerer this morning. this truly is a heart breaker because little by klittle man has destroy the free land, homesofmany beauitful wild animals.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2010
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Hi Cookie! Thank you!! Yes, and it will only continue too. Sadly, humans are just engulfing everything. Talk about a plague of locusts! It's very disheartening. SO glad tho, that this gave you a sense of what I was conveying! ") Thank you my friend. Susan
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Youare always on point, you are very welcome.Have a nice day, untill next time.
Comment from Dom G Robles
This is a story of a lioness, a cub, who on an evening walk across a new freeway on a mountain was hit and thrown through the impact of the bumper to her hind legs and thrown to a ditch and later died. It was not until morning when the mother lion found her dead cub. The mother sat at her side asking the cub to follow her home. The writer says. "Hours later, the moon finally retreated into morning, and as the sun came up, the mother cougar finally left her cub, to disappear like a ghost into the red hills of Arizona."
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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This is a story of a lioness, a cub, who on an evening walk across a new freeway on a mountain was hit and thrown through the impact of the bumper to her hind legs and thrown to a ditch and later died. It was not until morning when the mother lion found her dead cub. The mother sat at her side asking the cub to follow her home. The writer says. "Hours later, the moon finally retreated into morning, and as the sun came up, the mother cougar finally left her cub, to disappear like a ghost into the red hills of Arizona."
Comment Written 23-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Hi Dom! Thanks! It's great to hear from you! I always appreciate your time for me, I hope you are having a great evening!! ") Susan
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You are always welcome Susan. Anytime, always. Dom
