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keep your hope alive....

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Comment from L Stout
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sweet poem well done keeping to limiting form interesting topic good flow quite lyrical I particularly liked the last part, my favourite line was through branches bared, bent like arms
waving a rainbow of hope although I also liked your reference to tears

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2010
    thanx fragorl! :)
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello shelley,
I like your vivid picture and imagination about how changes to winter
I say an excellent entry.

good luck
Gert

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
    thankya! :-)
reply by Gert sherwood on 22-Sep-2010
    smiles
    Gert
Comment from Pili Pubul
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Terrific tanka, I love very much the very poetic images you created. Good luck in the contest.

through branches bared, bent like arms
waving a rainbow of hope

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
    thanx pili! :)
Comment from Sasha
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This is truly lovely. A wonderful description of autumn turning into winter. Excellent entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best. I especially like the lines, winter's affect blows through branches bared, bent like arms
waving a rainbow of hope...very nice work with this one.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
    thanx smurphette! :)
Comment from chita
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You have a good flow with your poem and write with emotion about how leaves falls like tears in autumn and winter blows through bare branches giving a rainbow of hope--great job.

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 Comment Written 21-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
    thank you chita :)
reply by chita on 21-Sep-2010
    You're welcome:))
Comment from Swtdreamz
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I like how leaves fall like tears in autumn's chilly breath.
I can imagine the sky blowing out white puffs of smoke against a rain of crackling leaves.
Good imagery.

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 Comment Written 21-Sep-2010


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
    hehe thanx dreamz! :)