Emotions of Love and Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 71 "My Mom"Love and Life with many emotions
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Comment from miss joyce
This is well written with good flow and content. You've done justice to your Mom in this piece. It sounds that you and siblings retained the love demonstrated by the Mom who was always there for you. Thanks for sharing this! Blessings!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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This is well written with good flow and content. You've done justice to your Mom in this piece. It sounds that you and siblings retained the love demonstrated by the Mom who was always there for you. Thanks for sharing this! Blessings!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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Thank you for the nice comments. Yes us kids stood by our Mother with much Love.
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Good work and keep'em coming. Blessings!
Comment from Magics02
Oh this one story/poem and the picture had me a bit choked up. SO sorry for your loss of Mom. No other love then a daughter for a mother. This poem hit me and I admire your write of her. She would be so proud of this for sure. And it touched my heart. The pic even looks like my mom:) Thank you for a great poem:) Magics02
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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Oh this one story/poem and the picture had me a bit choked up. SO sorry for your loss of Mom. No other love then a daughter for a mother. This poem hit me and I admire your write of her. She would be so proud of this for sure. And it touched my heart. The pic even looks like my mom:) Thank you for a great poem:) Magics02
Comment Written 27-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind thoughts. They are very much appreciated. I'm sure there are many others who see there families in simular situations as this. Thank you again
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Yes you are so correct. A brave and beautiful poem of yours!!
Comment from chita
You have great artwork and a good flow with your poem--you write with emotion and you are descriptive--you write about how you had discord in your home between your mother and father--as children you went through a lot--great job.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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You have great artwork and a good flow with your poem--you write with emotion and you are descriptive--you write about how you had discord in your home between your mother and father--as children you went through a lot--great job.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind comments and as childre we did go through alot but made it in the end. Thank you again
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You're welcome:))
Comment from wvfreespirit
"Dad had problems excepting his son" I think excepting should be accepting in this line and "covered allot" maybe caused alot would be a little better. Over all the flow was good. It drew me in and kept me reading I could empathize with you and the pain you were going through. Good job keep writing.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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"Dad had problems excepting his son" I think excepting should be accepting in this line and "covered allot" maybe caused alot would be a little better. Over all the flow was good. It drew me in and kept me reading I could empathize with you and the pain you were going through. Good job keep writing.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind help and words they are greatly appreciated. I have sice corrected the items you have spoke of theank you again.
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You're welcome
Comment from TT7Z
Your pain and anguish is clearly noted in this piece. Some of your rhymes are a bit stretched and messages were a bit fuzzy but overall message though a sad one was clear and to the point. Sometimes we wish we could go back in time to fix the wrong, however God gives us strength to plod along for his plan. You will see both your mom and grandma, in heaven I am sure. For now all you can do is share and express by writing such a sad but lovingly done poem for your cherished mom. Well done. Thank you.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Your pain and anguish is clearly noted in this piece. Some of your rhymes are a bit stretched and messages were a bit fuzzy but overall message though a sad one was clear and to the point. Sometimes we wish we could go back in time to fix the wrong, however God gives us strength to plod along for his plan. You will see both your mom and grandma, in heaven I am sure. For now all you can do is share and express by writing such a sad but lovingly done poem for your cherished mom. Well done. Thank you.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind words. These will greatly be appreciated.
Comment from misscookie
What a story to be told there is a mesage with in this poem for those who can't see it in your painful writing.
the mother, children get abruse and suffer with physical and emotional pain the only one escaspe is the husband and father.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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What a story to be told there is a mesage with in this poem for those who can't see it in your painful writing.
the mother, children get abruse and suffer with physical and emotional pain the only one escaspe is the husband and father.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind words. These will greatly be appreciated.
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You're bvery welcome.
Comment from chells36
Even (know) my bother had his problems that didn't bother me
He was (roping) with another woman in the hay
This is a well written and very brave piece you have written here
There are however two typos in the lines above I have highlighted them for you to edit
The meter is good and the flow is urgent
thanks xx
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Even (know) my bother had his problems that didn't bother me
He was (roping) with another woman in the hay
This is a well written and very brave piece you have written here
There are however two typos in the lines above I have highlighted them for you to edit
The meter is good and the flow is urgent
thanks xx
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind words. I have since fixed these errors Your feed back is well taken. Thank You. All was greatly appreciated.
Comment from stanishmichelle
This is a very touching poem. I liked the way you expressed the pain and suffering of a family so poetically. It reads like a story, and flows so fluently.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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This is a very touching poem. I liked the way you expressed the pain and suffering of a family so poetically. It reads like a story, and flows so fluently.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind words. These will greatly be appreciated.
Comment from R.Selvey
This poem is not bad-its' horrible in a sense of the abuse you and your family lived threw, till her drying day-from this abuser.You lived threw this you are a suviver.You have felt bout sides-love and pain.Your mother sounds like a very special,wonderful women-Bless her heart-and yours!Continue to grow.(One word of advice)love-don't hate-feel sorry for that Devil,he made his bed-let him lie in it!That is a fine example of how not to be. God Bless
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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This poem is not bad-its' horrible in a sense of the abuse you and your family lived threw, till her drying day-from this abuser.You lived threw this you are a suviver.You have felt bout sides-love and pain.Your mother sounds like a very special,wonderful women-Bless her heart-and yours!Continue to grow.(One word of advice)love-don't hate-feel sorry for that Devil,he made his bed-let him lie in it!That is a fine example of how not to be. God Bless
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Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind words. These will greatly be appreciated.
Comment from Gooloom
Your poem is dripping with tears. Tears for a vicious selfish, detestable dad. And aloving mom who tolerated this abuse and tried to protect her children as much as possible. There is a sense of relief now that she is gone and you hope she is happy with grand ma and at lastable to feel real love. As a poem you need to work harder, as there are many sp.and other errors. But as a raw feeling from your heart, your emotions do reach out and touch. You have the talent so do try and write better next time. Gooloom
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Your poem is dripping with tears. Tears for a vicious selfish, detestable dad. And aloving mom who tolerated this abuse and tried to protect her children as much as possible. There is a sense of relief now that she is gone and you hope she is happy with grand ma and at lastable to feel real love. As a poem you need to work harder, as there are many sp.and other errors. But as a raw feeling from your heart, your emotions do reach out and touch. You have the talent so do try and write better next time. Gooloom
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind words. These will greatly be appreciated.
