Bayou
song lyrics82 total reviews
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hello Victor,
I doubt I caught the rhythm, but I did try. I enjoyed the words, nevertheless. The grass is always greener on the other side of the fence. He's definitely fenced in now!
Ray
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Hello Victor,
I doubt I caught the rhythm, but I did try. I enjoyed the words, nevertheless. The grass is always greener on the other side of the fence. He's definitely fenced in now!
Ray
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Yes, he certainly is. I'm glad you liked even without rhythm. But I have to tell you it is there, and even I would love to hear it in a song. Thank you.
Comment from Dustman6180
I love John Fogerty and Credence Clearwater Revival. And yet, I still had a hard time getting the rhythm. Nevertheless, I enjoyed the story your words told. Never should have left the Bayou.
Dustman
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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I love John Fogerty and Credence Clearwater Revival. And yet, I still had a hard time getting the rhythm. Nevertheless, I enjoyed the story your words told. Never should have left the Bayou.
Dustman
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Yea, like maybe all of us shouldn't have. Thanks.
Comment from TT7Z
Yes I see how this could easily lend to a song rhythm. Your imagery is excellent. I can picture a drunken couple thinking life is just grand. Soon to give way to parted company and the yearning of what was in the bayou. Torn and forlorn a trucker trudges on ever yearning for the slippery mucky mud of the bayou. Well written and a very good piece. Thank you.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Yes I see how this could easily lend to a song rhythm. Your imagery is excellent. I can picture a drunken couple thinking life is just grand. Soon to give way to parted company and the yearning of what was in the bayou. Torn and forlorn a trucker trudges on ever yearning for the slippery mucky mud of the bayou. Well written and a very good piece. Thank you.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Thank you so much Paul. My you've had a remarkable life so far.
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it is remarkable that by the grace of God I am still alive! And by His Word I survive. where is prairie grove anyway?
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I can't remember if i answered you, so I will. Prairie Grove is a very small village in northern Illinois right next to Crystal Lake. Sort of at the end of the train line from Chicago.
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ok, now i remember, I lived in Aurora, Lombard, Glen Ellyn, and Winfield. Had freinds in Woodstock, which is just west from you by a few miles. I slso used to work in Harvard, so I roamed around your ares somewhat. Worked as a comp tech for a number of years in and all around chicago, so I got to know the area fairly well. Praire Grove is a nice area, just getting to developed over the years. Thank you for your reply and sharing.
Comment from gramalot8
Victor, I really could relate to this, as John Fogerty is one of my favorites. A little tough to find the exact rhythm, even with singing it, but nonetheless, very well done with good imagery, flow and movement of the words themselves.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Victor, I really could relate to this, as John Fogerty is one of my favorites. A little tough to find the exact rhythm, even with singing it, but nonetheless, very well done with good imagery, flow and movement of the words themselves.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Thank you very much my erudite one. I have missed you.
Comment from Aussie
As an Australian, I had no problem reading your poem; felt the realness of the words, accent was great, could feel the atmosphere, story was food for thought. I think you did a great job with this - all that was missing was the catfish!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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As an Australian, I had no problem reading your poem; felt the realness of the words, accent was great, could feel the atmosphere, story was food for thought. I think you did a great job with this - all that was missing was the catfish!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Summertime...and the livin' is easy. Catfish are jumpin'...
Thank you.
Comment from jgirlie152
This is a most interesting lyrical poem. It tells a story of lost love, hurt and anger, ending in the pokey. I love the way it's written and has a rhythm to keep it going. I can't think of a melody to go with it, but it sounds very much like a Johnny Cash creation.
:) Joan
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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This is a most interesting lyrical poem. It tells a story of lost love, hurt and anger, ending in the pokey. I love the way it's written and has a rhythm to keep it going. I can't think of a melody to go with it, but it sounds very much like a Johnny Cash creation.
:) Joan
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Johnny cash could do this severe justice. Thanks Joan.
Comment from EdwardVal
For me this piece isn't so much about the rhyme. It's more about the story you tell in your words and a tragic tale it must be. I really enjoyed this and wish you the best of luck getting back to the Bayou. Take Care
Edward Val
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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For me this piece isn't so much about the rhyme. It's more about the story you tell in your words and a tragic tale it must be. I really enjoyed this and wish you the best of luck getting back to the Bayou. Take Care
Edward Val
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Thank you sir.
Comment from heartonsleeve
Hello Bayou,
Great picture and I loved the poem/story. On the third paragraph down do you mean plain as in ordinary, or plane as in airplane wreck?
Yes, this truly does go with Lodi. I love John Fogerty, and CCR too. I enjoyed this.
shell
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Hello Bayou,
Great picture and I loved the poem/story. On the third paragraph down do you mean plain as in ordinary, or plane as in airplane wreck?
Yes, this truly does go with Lodi. I love John Fogerty, and CCR too. I enjoyed this.
shell
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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You have stumbled upon the reason I used plain. It does bring up the image of a plane wreck, yet does he mean plain? I loved the double imaging. Thank you.
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi Victor,
Your lyrics are magical. I certainly don't have any trouble with their rythm because the moment I start to read them the music starts to play. It may not be the music these lyrics were designed for, but it plays just the same. You are much to be congratulated for sharing your musical gift in this way here on FanStory.
Cheers, W ^-^
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Hi Victor,
Your lyrics are magical. I certainly don't have any trouble with their rythm because the moment I start to read them the music starts to play. It may not be the music these lyrics were designed for, but it plays just the same. You are much to be congratulated for sharing your musical gift in this way here on FanStory.
Cheers, W ^-^
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Thanks Ms. Magical.
Comment from percival86jack
Great story, my friend, and yes, one of your better efforts. John Fogerty was, and is, one of the great ones! Cheers, Jack
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Great story, my friend, and yes, one of your better efforts. John Fogerty was, and is, one of the great ones! Cheers, Jack
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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I do believe. Lord above, I do believe.
