not necessarily narcissistic
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Comment from Kelly Shackelford
Thank you for the author's notes. I love learning something new. The poem was a delight to read. I look forward to seeing more
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2010
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Thank you for the author's notes. I love learning something new. The poem was a delight to read. I look forward to seeing more
Comment Written 13-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2010
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Thankyou Kelly, your comments are much appreciated. I love it when I learn something new too. I just wish I was able to use the font I wanted (Papyrus) and the amazing photo I found of a statue of Narcissus, staring at the pool (The duck was the closest I could get)as it would have made such a difference to the presentation of the poem. Regards, Jan
Comment from Sharon Lee
A delightful read, I loved this interpretation. A story the doesn't grow old and has much meaning. I don't know why you choose not to punctuate, a comma isn't an ugly thing.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2010
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A delightful read, I loved this interpretation. A story the doesn't grow old and has much meaning. I don't know why you choose not to punctuate, a comma isn't an ugly thing.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2010
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Thankyou for your positive reply, it is much appreciated. The exercise was to use no punctuation at all and to find other means of creating a pause. I am discovering there are many forms of expressing style and layout and I quite enjoyed the challenge. It takes a bit of getting used to, but I think it's an interesting style. Regards, Jan
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well that makes sense, but you do have to use somethingâ?¦ so many just don't get that.
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One of my very favourite poets is Rod McKuen. His poems are nearly always written in that style - No capital letters, little punctuation, lots of gaps or indentations. E E Cummings is even more difficult to read, it's so quirky; random, but extremely clever and makes the reader work to fathom what is being said, as does Emily Dickinsons work. I am learning fast that Poetry doesn't conform to any specific style or rule, which is what makes it interesting, don't you think? Thanks for your interest in my poem Sharon, it's nice, and appreciated, when people make that extra effort. Regards, Jan
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Hi Janelle
It's more of an American thingâ?¦ not using punctuation. I can see why it is not needed sometimes, but when not used properly it frustrates me that people think it always works well :) Thanks for the convoâ?¦ Oh and you understand punctuation which also helps writing this way
Comment from sk42rn
I really enjoyed the poem and its reference to the mythological character.
Suggestion: Now that you know he was pining for the twin, could your last line have been - " and believing it your twin be?"
Good job.
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2010
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I really enjoyed the poem and its reference to the mythological character.
Suggestion: Now that you know he was pining for the twin, could your last line have been - " and believing it your twin be?"
Good job.
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Comment Written 13-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2010
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Thankyou sk42m, for your positive feedback, It was kind of you to take the time to review my piece.
the lines:
is it infatuation or just pure
folly perfection seeking
its twin in the nearest
mirror
is a reference to him looking for his twin. Thanks again, regards Jan.
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Great!
