The Best Summer of My Life
I'll always remember September 3.15 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
Wow John, this was such a beautiful write and my tears only welled up in the last four lines.
Wonderfully told as always, you somehow manage to dangle the carrot til the very last few lines in terms of how the story ends and it was complete with a great plot and very strong characters.
This was a story of a broken man who found love and then was stripped bare of it all in one foul swoop.
Excellent write and a pleasure as always to review.
Cheers closet xo
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Wow John, this was such a beautiful write and my tears only welled up in the last four lines.
Wonderfully told as always, you somehow manage to dangle the carrot til the very last few lines in terms of how the story ends and it was complete with a great plot and very strong characters.
This was a story of a broken man who found love and then was stripped bare of it all in one foul swoop.
Excellent write and a pleasure as always to review.
Cheers closet xo
Comment Written 11-Sep-2010
Comment from gspeak
Well written well told love story. I love love stories and this one is sensual, tender, and shows a vulnerability I can rarely capture myself. I also love that it's being told from a male perspective about love--I don't read many of those. Outstanding characterization of both parties and the ending was so touching and loving it was difficult not to empathize and feel John's sadness. Good luck in the contest! Geneva
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Well written well told love story. I love love stories and this one is sensual, tender, and shows a vulnerability I can rarely capture myself. I also love that it's being told from a male perspective about love--I don't read many of those. Outstanding characterization of both parties and the ending was so touching and loving it was difficult not to empathize and feel John's sadness. Good luck in the contest! Geneva
Comment Written 10-Sep-2010
Comment from irishauthorme
Well, you really did it this time. This is, in my humble opinion, your best effort to date.
The total effect of the story is a shocker.
This would kill any normal guy, and after all that this guy had just been through, I wouldn't blame him if he did a Hari-Kari, right there.
irish
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Well, you really did it this time. This is, in my humble opinion, your best effort to date.
The total effect of the story is a shocker.
This would kill any normal guy, and after all that this guy had just been through, I wouldn't blame him if he did a Hari-Kari, right there.
irish
Comment Written 10-Sep-2010
Comment from c_lucas
In today's world, proposals can come from either side. This is one of your better short stories. It held my interest throughout. Good job.
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In today's world, proposals can come from either side. This is one of your better short stories. It held my interest throughout. Good job.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2010
Comment from MumEsGirl
Best read I have had in ages. For a split second I thought this was biographical. That sure scared me.
Poor Mr. Sinclair, he really is out of luck. I was almost in tears when I read the note.
Expertly writtne and captivating
hugs
kate
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Best read I have had in ages. For a split second I thought this was biographical. That sure scared me.
Poor Mr. Sinclair, he really is out of luck. I was almost in tears when I read the note.
Expertly writtne and captivating
hugs
kate
Comment Written 10-Sep-2010
Comment from missy98writer
John,
your story for the summertime story contest is very well written and an enjoyable read. Excellent characterization and narrative, wonderful imagery - I could see the story happen in my head and very descriptive writing. Cute lady in the picture. John was at his wits end with his soon to be ex-wife of one year who had a drug habit and he was unaware of it until she charged fifty-thousand on three credit cards and the one-hundred thousand she drained from his account. It took him five years to pay off the debt his ex incurred on his bank account and credit cards. I loved the turn in the story when at his attorney's office to settle a collecting issue when he met a gorgeous woman, Julie. He was tongue tied in from of her. Wonderful description of Julie with her flowing chestnut colored hair and light brown eyes and a sexy dark mole about a half-inch above her sumptuous lacquered red lips. They started dating then he was informed that Julie was killed in a car wreck. How tragic. He had the officer read the letter they found and it cried because she was going to ask him to marry her. Wow, you wrote a sad ending. The last line was touching when he fell to floor with his hear and spirit broken. I hope your next one has him find another love. This is one of the best stories I've read today. It's a shame I'm out of sixes or I'd gladly award your outstanding story a six. Fantastic job writing. Good luck in the summertime story contest. . .Melissa.
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John,
your story for the summertime story contest is very well written and an enjoyable read. Excellent characterization and narrative, wonderful imagery - I could see the story happen in my head and very descriptive writing. Cute lady in the picture. John was at his wits end with his soon to be ex-wife of one year who had a drug habit and he was unaware of it until she charged fifty-thousand on three credit cards and the one-hundred thousand she drained from his account. It took him five years to pay off the debt his ex incurred on his bank account and credit cards. I loved the turn in the story when at his attorney's office to settle a collecting issue when he met a gorgeous woman, Julie. He was tongue tied in from of her. Wonderful description of Julie with her flowing chestnut colored hair and light brown eyes and a sexy dark mole about a half-inch above her sumptuous lacquered red lips. They started dating then he was informed that Julie was killed in a car wreck. How tragic. He had the officer read the letter they found and it cried because she was going to ask him to marry her. Wow, you wrote a sad ending. The last line was touching when he fell to floor with his hear and spirit broken. I hope your next one has him find another love. This is one of the best stories I've read today. It's a shame I'm out of sixes or I'd gladly award your outstanding story a six. Fantastic job writing. Good luck in the summertime story contest. . .Melissa.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2010
Comment from lola29
Whoa! This is way too much grief for anyone to have to endure. I hope John's spirit will not be brokern forever, but it's understandable if he chooses to shut down for a while.
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Whoa! This is way too much grief for anyone to have to endure. I hope John's spirit will not be brokern forever, but it's understandable if he chooses to shut down for a while.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2010
Comment from Shirley McLain
What a sad story, but a very good one. You have an excellent main caracter and the dialogue is excellent. You kept the action going and I was hooked. Great job
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What a sad story, but a very good one. You have an excellent main caracter and the dialogue is excellent. You kept the action going and I was hooked. Great job
Comment Written 10-Sep-2010
Comment from anabelle
How devastating to have the person you love killed before there is any hope of a long life together.
Good post. I enjoyed it.
Regards, anabelle
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How devastating to have the person you love killed before there is any hope of a long life together.
Good post. I enjoyed it.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 10-Sep-2010
Comment from TT7Z
Well written. Story flowed smoothly. Story line was believable. I found it difficult for a man to examine a woman like he did noticing her eyebrows, eyelashes, and the type of stockings. Not the men I've talked to. Most men would not notice such things. Writer must be a woman. As for the rest of the story very well done very nice piece. Thank you.
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Well written. Story flowed smoothly. Story line was believable. I found it difficult for a man to examine a woman like he did noticing her eyebrows, eyelashes, and the type of stockings. Not the men I've talked to. Most men would not notice such things. Writer must be a woman. As for the rest of the story very well done very nice piece. Thank you.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2010
