Emotions of Love and Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Wanting, Needing, Finding"Love and Life with many emotions
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Comment from TT7Z
Oh Ms. Debbie such depth to your quest for this man's love. One can almost feel your tears as you cry, sense your anguish as the uncertainty arise, and sense your release and relief as your quest is finally answered. Oh dear Angel one can only surmise how you survived such a quest with such anguish and despair with only the hope of a possible future time providing the answer. Thank you for sharing such an outpouring of your inner being. 7z
possible typo in this line, it doesn't make sense, Ms. Deb.
'The sorrow will is still there, and it's tomorrow...
' I think you meant to say 'The sorrow IS still there, and it's tomarrow...'
This makes the more sense. This was not enough to downgrade your rating. Thank you.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2010
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Oh Ms. Debbie such depth to your quest for this man's love. One can almost feel your tears as you cry, sense your anguish as the uncertainty arise, and sense your release and relief as your quest is finally answered. Oh dear Angel one can only surmise how you survived such a quest with such anguish and despair with only the hope of a possible future time providing the answer. Thank you for sharing such an outpouring of your inner being. 7z
possible typo in this line, it doesn't make sense, Ms. Deb.
'The sorrow will is still there, and it's tomorrow...
' I think you meant to say 'The sorrow IS still there, and it's tomarrow...'
This makes the more sense. This was not enough to downgrade your rating. Thank you.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2010
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Mistake has been corrected makes more sense now. Thank you for noticing the error. Thank you again have a wonderful day TT7Z
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take a look again. still mixed up. sorry ms deb
Comment from misscookie
a movie star had a line which said snap out of it.
I Like how you are expressing all this pain, you feeling for this person. And it's tearing me apart. I know other readers will feel the same way. this is a sign of a good writer when the reader feels what your writing. I hope you got some happy writes for me to read too.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2010
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a movie star had a line which said snap out of it.
I Like how you are expressing all this pain, you feeling for this person. And it's tearing me apart. I know other readers will feel the same way. this is a sign of a good writer when the reader feels what your writing. I hope you got some happy writes for me to read too.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2010
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Yes There are happy writes, my life is not all bad. Thank you for checking me out. I like to live life and to give love and that is what God's love is all about whether good or bad they all survive in the same world. Thank you.
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You put a smile on my face after I readthis because I sense you have a relationship with the creator, and thats is where your true.comfort comes. Take care
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Your absolutely right. Read my Henry Doo childrens poem I bet your grand kids will love it! Thanks again.
Comment from WordsPoeticallyWorth
An expressive piece of yearning for love, regardless of the questionalble character of the male pined for!
You have done well in the length of the poem, which suggests you have put a considerable amount of effort into it, yet it lacks creativity as the rhymes seem too simplistic - sorry to be negative. Also, some of the grammer is too wayward! But well done for incorporating metaphor and analogy before the end of the piece, which draws the reader more into the poem.
Thank you for sharing. Love love, Andrew. Bye.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2010
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An expressive piece of yearning for love, regardless of the questionalble character of the male pined for!
You have done well in the length of the poem, which suggests you have put a considerable amount of effort into it, yet it lacks creativity as the rhymes seem too simplistic - sorry to be negative. Also, some of the grammer is too wayward! But well done for incorporating metaphor and analogy before the end of the piece, which draws the reader more into the poem.
Thank you for sharing. Love love, Andrew. Bye.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind comments. Don't be sorry for the negitiveness as not everyone can write a five or six all the time. Have a wonderful day.
Comment from Aislinge
Nicely done. The poem reads smoothly, with a pleasing meter and a lilt given it by the rhyme. The last word should probably be 'soul' (spirit) rather than 'sole' (bottom of a shoe or a fish)
Thank you for a great read.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2010
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Nicely done. The poem reads smoothly, with a pleasing meter and a lilt given it by the rhyme. The last word should probably be 'soul' (spirit) rather than 'sole' (bottom of a shoe or a fish)
Thank you for a great read.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2010
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THANK YOU for the Catch. For some reason I always get that word wrong. And spell check doesn't catch it either. Thank You for your kind words. Have a great day!
