Comment from S.Yocom

Excellent

I like your pretty sedoka, Anonymous Poet, especially "free-flying rainbows." Note that the second line has only five syllables.
Sally

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010

will check that out now! thanx! :)

Comment from missy98writer

Excellent

Poet,
your Sedoka Poem is in perfect form and syllable count of 5/7/7. Exquisite art work and visual presentation. Cool title 'flying rainbows.' Cleaver use of alliteration. I loved the second part of your poem:

transforming nature
into free-flying rainbows ~
beautiful butterfly born

Your Sedoka poem paints a vivid picture in the readers mind how a caterpillar becomes a butterfly after its metamorphosis. Your poem is a fabulous entry in the writing prompt. Good luck in the voting booth. It was my pleasure to read your delightful Sedoka poem.
Missy.

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 Comment Written 22-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010

thank you missy! :-D

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

HI SK
Nice alliteration in both sections.
Artistic presentation with artwork and embedded text.

True to form.

Love the second part image--free-flying rainbows. nice.

Good luck.

Warm smiles, rd



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 Comment Written 22-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010

hi rama! thanx for the r&r! :-)