Short Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Gossip"A book of a mixture of stories
37 total reviews
Comment from bookishfabler
Oh what dilerious fun. I smashing story. I wonder what happened with Roberto? LOL.
Oh(,) my God, I'm so sorry. I didn't-"
gossiping about theformer first lady and her family by none other than the woman herself.
(seperate theformer)
hugs Book
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Oh what dilerious fun. I smashing story. I wonder what happened with Roberto? LOL.
Oh(,) my God, I'm so sorry. I didn't-"
gossiping about theformer first lady and her family by none other than the woman herself.
(seperate theformer)
hugs Book
Comment Written 25-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Book,
Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
Comment from shygirl21
hee hee this is such a fun story! And exactly why I never talk in bathrooms about people!
Nice to read your work again, I must go find out what happened with that thriller you were writing!
Pamela x
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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hee hee this is such a fun story! And exactly why I never talk in bathrooms about people!
Nice to read your work again, I must go find out what happened with that thriller you were writing!
Pamela x
Comment Written 25-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Pamela,
Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
Comment from jadapenn
Smiles, this was a grand story. You had so much excitement and suspense going and the humour was good. I guess Hillary is used to all this type of thing going on. lol.
Loved the essay.
Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Smiles, this was a grand story. You had so much excitement and suspense going and the humour was good. I guess Hillary is used to all this type of thing going on. lol.
Loved the essay.
Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
Comment Written 24-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Jada,
Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Judian James
Good one Carol. I guessed early on, but it was still so much fun to read. I've been sent on seminars like that to places like Nassau and you're scheduled from 8am until 5pm followed by mandatory cocktail parties! excellent piece of writing from the perspective of two young women. well done
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Good one Carol. I guessed early on, but it was still so much fun to read. I've been sent on seminars like that to places like Nassau and you're scheduled from 8am until 5pm followed by mandatory cocktail parties! excellent piece of writing from the perspective of two young women. well done
Comment Written 24-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Jude,
Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This is a fun story. I can imagine something like that really happening. But Hillary would have to be more gracious that I imagined her to be to invite two strangers to her daughter's wedding. The part about the conversation from the bathroom stall is totally believable.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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This is a fun story. I can imagine something like that really happening. But Hillary would have to be more gracious that I imagined her to be to invite two strangers to her daughter's wedding. The part about the conversation from the bathroom stall is totally believable.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Beth,
Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
Comment from IndianaIrish
Your story is so entertaining and fun, Carol. The dialogue is lots of fun and what a way to end a boring conference! Best of luck!
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Your story is so entertaining and fun, Carol. The dialogue is lots of fun and what a way to end a boring conference! Best of luck!
Indy :>)
Comment Written 24-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Indy,
Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
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I miss you and your work, too, Carol!! I hope to see you back real soon, too. Smiles to you!!
Comment from Realist101
OH NEAT! And the blond girl looks like a younger version of you Carol!! Cute! This is so well done, you always use dialogue so perfectly, just like we are listening to people there talking in front of us! And I love this ending too. Just perfect...") Hugs!! Susan
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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OH NEAT! And the blond girl looks like a younger version of you Carol!! Cute! This is so well done, you always use dialogue so perfectly, just like we are listening to people there talking in front of us! And I love this ending too. Just perfect...") Hugs!! Susan
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Susan,
Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Carol,
What a great story and very believable. I can see something like this happening. I saw one nit...
She'd just been caught gossiping about theformer first lady and her family by none other than the woman herself.
(space between the and former)
Your story is interesting and has a good flow. A pleasure to read and review.
Becky
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Hi Carol,
What a great story and very believable. I can see something like this happening. I saw one nit...
She'd just been caught gossiping about theformer first lady and her family by none other than the woman herself.
(space between the and former)
Your story is interesting and has a good flow. A pleasure to read and review.
Becky
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Becky,
Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
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The pleasure is mine and you are welcome. Look forward to hearing from you again. Hurry back!
Comment from apelle
funny and imaginative written with a touch or realism hard to doubt...very funny also
it could happen to any body, any time...
thanks and good luck
Adina
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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funny and imaginative written with a touch or realism hard to doubt...very funny also
it could happen to any body, any time...
thanks and good luck
Adina
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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apelle,
Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
Comment from rama devi
WOW--what a tale! is it fact or fiction? (i thought the contest required non-fiction but this is listed as fiction so am unsure).
Anyway, it is very well penned with superb flow, development and dialog. I could see the scenes flash like a film in my mind.
Couple of suggestions-
*back to back speakers
maybe use hyphens.
back-to-back
*Simultaneously, their mouths dropped open and their eyes were glued to the couple(')s activity.
*"Excu-," the woman's voice started to reply. (no comma after dash)
*She'd just been caught gossiping about theformer first lady add space between THE and FORMER
Good work. A strong contender.
So, did this actually occur?
If so--wow. if not, good idea for the story.
Love, rd
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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WOW--what a tale! is it fact or fiction? (i thought the contest required non-fiction but this is listed as fiction so am unsure).
Anyway, it is very well penned with superb flow, development and dialog. I could see the scenes flash like a film in my mind.
Couple of suggestions-
*back to back speakers
maybe use hyphens.
back-to-back
*Simultaneously, their mouths dropped open and their eyes were glued to the couple(')s activity.
*"Excu-," the woman's voice started to reply. (no comma after dash)
*She'd just been caught gossiping about theformer first lady add space between THE and FORMER
Good work. A strong contender.
So, did this actually occur?
If so--wow. if not, good idea for the story.
Love, rd
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Rd,
Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
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AW, thanks dear Carol. missed you too. it is good to be away sometimes but then also great to return. HOpe you will be back soon as well!
Lots of Love, rd
