A Street of Ancient Mexico
a blank verse poem133 total reviews
Comment from lgm859
This is such an awesome poem and nicely written using creativity in your words, imagery and the way you monopolized the iambic pentameter (da DUM da DUM da DUM da DUM da DUM) without rhymeing. I enjoyed reading this poem, it definitely kept me captivated and stimulated the creativity in my imagination.
Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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This is such an awesome poem and nicely written using creativity in your words, imagery and the way you monopolized the iambic pentameter (da DUM da DUM da DUM da DUM da DUM) without rhymeing. I enjoyed reading this poem, it definitely kept me captivated and stimulated the creativity in my imagination.
Well done.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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I am glad the poem kept you captivated. That is quite a compliment. Thanks for a great review.
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you're welcome
Comment from keimosobie
Hello
Good job. i learbed some new words. It is very deep and beautiful. Why was there blood did you kill your ex wife or something and why was her visage there. Seems there more to this poem then meets the eye. good job.
And review my poem Foster mother by Keimosobie
thanks bye
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Hello
Good job. i learbed some new words. It is very deep and beautiful. Why was there blood did you kill your ex wife or something and why was her visage there. Seems there more to this poem then meets the eye. good job.
And review my poem Foster mother by Keimosobie
thanks bye
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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For clarification, the visage is a hallucination. The blood loss occurred when the narrator of the poem fell down whilst drunk and hit his head. The best way to have me review a poem of yours is to write me a private message requesting a review. My identity should be revealed next week. Thanks for stating my poem is deep and beautiful.
Comment from Claire Beck
This was my favorite set of lines:
Yet I discovered God that afternoon
Whilst the whole village slept, oblivious
To the diverse and sundry ways our Lord
Performs great deeds and miracles and signs.
I can't think of anything to improve it.
Nice work!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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This was my favorite set of lines:
Yet I discovered God that afternoon
Whilst the whole village slept, oblivious
To the diverse and sundry ways our Lord
Performs great deeds and miracles and signs.
I can't think of anything to improve it.
Nice work!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Yes, I really like that stanza as well. That one just flowed out of me; I think God truly inspired that one. I am glad you liked it. Thanks for an excellent review.
Comment from L.lora
Very nicely done, such a
daunting task/challenge to
take on however I believe
you have met it well. Your
accomplished pen has provided
a smooth well flowing write
with much to ponder, in a very
pleasing format. no nits or spags,
good luck with your contest. Lora
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Very nicely done, such a
daunting task/challenge to
take on however I believe
you have met it well. Your
accomplished pen has provided
a smooth well flowing write
with much to ponder, in a very
pleasing format. no nits or spags,
good luck with your contest. Lora
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thank you for a very kind and excellent review; I greatly appreciate it.
Comment from Robert D Wilson
You tell a very nice story which moves from the depths of darkness and despair to light and love. Your words depicting both extremes are filled with passion and the sense that the speaker has been there and is baring his soul to the listener. Good job.
Best wishes in the contest.
Bob
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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You tell a very nice story which moves from the depths of darkness and despair to light and love. Your words depicting both extremes are filled with passion and the sense that the speaker has been there and is baring his soul to the listener. Good job.
Best wishes in the contest.
Bob
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thanks for so well understanding the ambiance of my poem. I truly appreciate this excellent review.
Comment from E.P. Thomas
This is an absolutely beautifully written blank verse poem. I found your very informative notes to be excepionally helpful, especially your explanation of meter and rhyme in this form. I loved how your imagery worked to create and then expand upon the underlying message. Mexico is such a beautiful country, but I never found it to be especially romantic until now. Thank you.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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This is an absolutely beautifully written blank verse poem. I found your very informative notes to be excepionally helpful, especially your explanation of meter and rhyme in this form. I loved how your imagery worked to create and then expand upon the underlying message. Mexico is such a beautiful country, but I never found it to be especially romantic until now. Thank you.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Oh, I am so happy you saw how romantic Mexico is. It is a beautiful country, as you say and as my father taught me (he often had business with Mexicans.) The literary works that have come out of Mexico in the last twenty to thirty years have been superb. Thanks such a complimentary and excellent review. Your review moved me.
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I wish I cd have said something a little more intelligent. Lacking those skills, I speak to how a poem affects my thinking. Yours is truly moving. Good luck. I wish you the best.
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The primary purpose of a poem is to move the reader; all else (although I am a traditional formalist structure is very important to me) is secondary. I greatly appreciate your review. You saw the forest; some people see only the trees.
Comment from kchandler
Excellent poem. You handle the form beautifully and still manage to show a vibrant moment of a person lost in a personal hell saved, and it doesn't feel trite to me. Simply wonderful.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Excellent poem. You handle the form beautifully and still manage to show a vibrant moment of a person lost in a personal hell saved, and it doesn't feel trite to me. Simply wonderful.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thanks for an exceptional review. I greatly appreciate it.
Comment from Julie G
A lyrical work of beauty and finesse...finely constructed with care and thought. The emotion comes though without the use of a hammer over the head. It fills the heart with a gentle, lovely touch recognizing that, while not sought, this unexpected encounter brought the balm of tender romance to soothe the injured soul seeking solace while on a walk in the quiet peace of a village in siesta.
Julie G
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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A lyrical work of beauty and finesse...finely constructed with care and thought. The emotion comes though without the use of a hammer over the head. It fills the heart with a gentle, lovely touch recognizing that, while not sought, this unexpected encounter brought the balm of tender romance to soothe the injured soul seeking solace while on a walk in the quiet peace of a village in siesta.
Julie G
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thank you for perceiving the ambience I wanted to convey so well and for an exceptional review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from LadyWave
I enjoyed this work very much. I thought it was very rich and imaginative. I especially liked the line -
"Dark bruises are discovered on my soul"
Very powerful!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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I enjoyed this work very much. I thought it was very rich and imaginative. I especially liked the line -
"Dark bruises are discovered on my soul"
Very powerful!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thanks for your review. I especially like that line as well.
Comment from RKagan
You take the reader on a journey to a foreign land, and with your wonderful descriptions we can see it. We also feel the emotions that you are expriencing in this heartbreaking love affair, as well as the joy you find in your new love. good job.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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You take the reader on a journey to a foreign land, and with your wonderful descriptions we can see it. We also feel the emotions that you are expriencing in this heartbreaking love affair, as well as the joy you find in your new love. good job.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thanks. If I can cause that kind of empathetic reaction in a reader, I have done well as a writer. Thanks for a good review.
