A Street of Ancient Mexico
a blank verse poem133 total reviews
Comment from Trybuck
It was my pleasure to read your work and your very informative author's notes. Blank verse isn't my favorite but you seemed to have handled it quite well. Hope it does well in the contest, Buck
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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It was my pleasure to read your work and your very informative author's notes. Blank verse isn't my favorite but you seemed to have handled it quite well. Hope it does well in the contest, Buck
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Thank you. If a blank verse of mine gives pleasure to someone to whom it isn't a favorite, I have done well as a writer. Thanks again for a good review.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. I liked it when I read it then I took the time to read author's notes and went back and reread it with fresh eyes. Magnificent! Thank you for sharing. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. I liked it when I read it then I took the time to read author's notes and went back and reread it with fresh eyes. Magnificent! Thank you for sharing. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Thank you for a good review and especially for reading it twice; I truly appreciate both.
Comment from skye
Descriptive and beauitfully crafted poem about romance and love in Mexico.
I love dark bruises on my soul... it describes this so well, in such a concrete way.
Very very well done.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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Descriptive and beauitfully crafted poem about romance and love in Mexico.
I love dark bruises on my soul... it describes this so well, in such a concrete way.
Very very well done.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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Thanks for understanding so well what I wanted to convey; I truly appreciate it.
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the choice of words. Very emotional and descriptive. It sounds like a person leaving an abusive relationship finding a healthy one. I can tell you were careful with pronunciation so you could fit the rules of the contest.
If a poem is written in English is should be written so the stresses are as any standard English speaking person would stress them. I don't think these kind of notes would be allowed when published in a book.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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I like the choice of words. Very emotional and descriptive. It sounds like a person leaving an abusive relationship finding a healthy one. I can tell you were careful with pronunciation so you could fit the rules of the contest.
If a poem is written in English is should be written so the stresses are as any standard English speaking person would stress them. I don't think these kind of notes would be allowed when published in a book.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 03-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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No, they wouldn't. They would have never been added had not they been in response to other reviews. However, stresses are not universal in standard English (look up againin the dictionary; it has three pronunciations.) Thanks for your review.
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You're welcome.
dragonpoet
Comment from animatqua
I am having a difficult time reconciling the first three sections of the poem with the last three. I must really be in a ditzy place, because this is the third poem I just haven't been able to get, in spite of the wonderful discourse on it in the author's notes.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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I am having a difficult time reconciling the first three sections of the poem with the last three. I must really be in a ditzy place, because this is the third poem I just haven't been able to get, in spite of the wonderful discourse on it in the author's notes.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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No, that is the intention of this poem. There is a turn from despair to hope between the third and fourth stanza. It was intentionally written that way; it has the structure of a Biblical psalm. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from boberto
I don't care for the Bard, but this was an enjoyable read.
How fortunate to lose love and stumble into another on the same day. Maybe the worm from the bottle still had you under it's influence. Good luck in the contest.
boberto
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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I don't care for the Bard, but this was an enjoyable read.
How fortunate to lose love and stumble into another on the same day. Maybe the worm from the bottle still had you under it's influence. Good luck in the contest.
boberto
Comment Written 03-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a great and amusing review; I truly appreciate it.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Firstly, my opinion of your work is that it is great. I found nothing to snipe or gripe about. In fact, I've thoroughly enjoyed reading it. I like your style and the content too.
As for your extensive author notes, I hadn't planned on an English lesson when I came to read this poem but I am so very glad I've had one. I now know an awful lot more about blank verse than I could ever have hoped to learn. :)
Good luck in the contest, although I'm sure this is a winner.
Warm wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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Firstly, my opinion of your work is that it is great. I found nothing to snipe or gripe about. In fact, I've thoroughly enjoyed reading it. I like your style and the content too.
As for your extensive author notes, I hadn't planned on an English lesson when I came to read this poem but I am so very glad I've had one. I now know an awful lot more about blank verse than I could ever have hoped to learn. :)
Good luck in the contest, although I'm sure this is a winner.
Warm wishes
Kat
Comment Written 03-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a good review. Actually, the reviews have been mixed, and the extensive author's notes are a result of that. I do appreciate your comments on my notes.
Comment from SWANNY
Nicely done. From what I could tell you've met the requirements of the contest (though I am no expert on the subject by any means). I didn't notice any errors and I have no suggestions for improvment.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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Nicely done. From what I could tell you've met the requirements of the contest (though I am no expert on the subject by any means). I didn't notice any errors and I have no suggestions for improvment.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a good review; I truly appreciate it.
Comment from Minglement
I enjoyed the moving tory you tell in this blak vers poem contest entry. Well chosen words create vivid word pictures. I appeciated the beauty of our presentation and your explanation of free verse (which is not what it sounds like). Good luck in the contesest.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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I enjoyed the moving tory you tell in this blak vers poem contest entry. Well chosen words create vivid word pictures. I appeciated the beauty of our presentation and your explanation of free verse (which is not what it sounds like). Good luck in the contesest.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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Oh, it's blank verse. Did I say free verse? Thanks for a good review.
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I don't know, I lost my place, LOL. Either way, I enjoyed it.
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I am glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from zoocq
This was beautifully composed and with a lyrical swell to it. I am not familiar with the form so thank you for your indepth form explanation.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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This was beautifully composed and with a lyrical swell to it. I am not familiar with the form so thank you for your indepth form explanation.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it.
