A Street of Ancient Mexico
a blank verse poem133 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author,
First I like your very clear authors notes explaining the proper way to write blank verse.
I see a man who has found God and the revival of his soul and how he is fulfilled by finding a special lady who to me is also in need of finding her soul. ( when you said)--
Yet one insomniac saw through veneers;
(it's like the fulfilled man could see through her mind and soul-)
Gert
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010
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Hello author,
First I like your very clear authors notes explaining the proper way to write blank verse.
I see a man who has found God and the revival of his soul and how he is fulfilled by finding a special lady who to me is also in need of finding her soul. ( when you said)--
Yet one insomniac saw through veneers;
(it's like the fulfilled man could see through her mind and soul-)
Gert
Comment Written 20-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010
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Thanks for a good review and such a fine understanding of my poem. I truly appreciate it.
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from adewpearl
Someone thought Aztec and princess rhyme???
emotions and corpse - that does not scan as iambic for me
I feel void of - that doesn't scan for me either
Your blank verse has, with a couple of glitches, excellent iambic pentameter and tells an emotionally intense story of romance. Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010
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Someone thought Aztec and princess rhyme???
emotions and corpse - that does not scan as iambic for me
I feel void of - that doesn't scan for me either
Your blank verse has, with a couple of glitches, excellent iambic pentameter and tells an emotionally intense story of romance. Brooke
Comment Written 20-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010
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For clarification, in the first instance, the stress falls oddly on and--unusual, but sometimes necessary to make the whole line scan as iambic. In the second instance, the same is true of the stress on of. The stanza in which those two lines occur were the most difficult for me to write; it went through numerous revisions. I am open to suggestions. Thanks for a good review.
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I mean was instead of were, of course, in the third sentence.
Comment from marcellawachtel
Maybe it was the Illustration, and maybe the title, but I heard the strums of guitar music as I read this poem. I read about your wounded self, your dreams and your gratitude that God has sent you a maiden to adore. Lovely poem, lots of great imagery.
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010
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Maybe it was the Illustration, and maybe the title, but I heard the strums of guitar music as I read this poem. I read about your wounded self, your dreams and your gratitude that God has sent you a maiden to adore. Lovely poem, lots of great imagery.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010
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Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it. If I can cause a reader to hear music, I have done well as a writer. I am honored.
