Comment from lola29

Excellent

Alvin, I don't know from where you draw your inspiration, but no doubt, your pen is dipped in the most divine nectar of inspiration. This is truly an exquisite piece of work. Thank you for shairing your brilliant talent with us.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2010

Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it. I give credit to God for my inspiration; I don't know where else it could originatae.

Comment from Mirandawrites

Excellent

What a profound poem. I enjoy the depth of emotions and feelings conveyed through this poem. I read despair and extinguished passion turn to reverence and tenderness, and ultimately salvation of the soul. So poignant. I only find the color of the fonts too subdued and rather hard on the eyes. Excellent work!

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2010

Yes, I had a hard time deciding on what colors to use. However, I tried to match the picture. Thanks for a great review.

reply by Mirandawrites on 21-Aug-2010

You're welcome. Maybe you could try to make the yellow lighter, so that the font stand out more in the dark background.

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2010

I'll definitely look into that. I have a note on my desk to do so. Thanks for the suggestion.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I liked the title to set the scene, and I admired your storytelling in this blank verse. I also enjoyed your bits of alliteration and following the rules you stated in your notes.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010

Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written with good form, good flow, a great poem about the pain you went through from abuse , i enjoyed reading it and i wish you the best of luck in the contest

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010

Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it.

Comment from Soledadpaz

Excellent

I don't know about form but I do know content and your poem evokes a need for me to walk down a street of ancient Mexico, the land of my birth. One day I will do just that and think of your poem.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010

Yes, I worked hard on this poem and I think it just oozes Mexican culture. Thanks for a great and reaffirming review.

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is absolutely marvelous. The emotion you convey are vivid and provide superb imagery. I found this deeply moving and quite powerful. You have a true gift my friend, and I want to thank for sharing it with us. This is beautifully written and deserves a six, but of course I am out so I can only offer a meager 5 to show my appreciation for your excellent poem.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010

Thanks for a great review. Actually, since you brought it up, you can change the rating to six stars on Sunday. Here's how:

It's actually very easy to change the review or rating of a work. I do it often on Sunday when I receive my allotment of four six stars reviews. Of course, each time I do that, I lose a six star rating for the week beginning on said Sunday.

Go to My Menu in the upper left hand corner of the screen. Scroll down to My Feedback and from the drop-down menu, select Reviews I Wrote. All the reviews you have written will come up, and you scroll down to the one you want to change. Click on Edit Review in the lower RIGHT hand screen of the review; you then can change the wording of the review or the rating.
Of course, I am not asking you to revise the review or the rating; I am just explaining how it can be done after the fact--it's helped me correct many a mistake.

I truly appreciate your review, as you live in Mexico, and this has a very Mexican feel to it, I think. Have you read any of the chapters of my novel Luisa? Much of it is set in Mexico. Thanks again.

Comment from missy98writer

Excellent

Poet,
your blank verse poem is eloquently written. Beautiful art work and color presentation. Great titled 'A Street of Ancient Mexico.' Vivid imagery, excellent narrative, great meter and very descriptive writing. The stanzas that stood out for me:

I feel void of erotic thoughts and lust;
Clandestine demons in noon naps display
Emotions and corpse I show crowds who knock--
My psyche bears concerns in heart and soul.

Yet I discovered God that afternoon
Whilst the whole village slept, oblivious
To the diverse and sundry ways our Lord
Performs great deeds and miracles and signs.

So during the siesta that fine day
I walked a street of ancient Mexico
And viewed one maiden's liquid soft brown eyes;
I met the woman whom I now adore.

Cleaver use of alliteration and metaphors. Your poem is a marvelous entry in the blank verse III contest. Good luck in the contest. It was my pleasure to read your blank verse poem. Have a fabulous Friday.
Melissa.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010

Thank you for a wonderful review. I was concerned about the first stanza you quote, and you have reassured me. This review made my day.

Comment from dportwood

Excellent

I enjoyed this series of unrhymed quatrains and the theme and message. However, there are some lines in which iambics fails such as:

Emotions and corpse I show crowds who knock--

I tumbled from drink when you closed the door

Just my opinion.

Duane

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010

Yes, I know. For clarification, the stresses fall oddly on the words and in the first line and from in the second line. It was the only way I saw to have the whole lines scan for iambs. I am open to suggestions. Thanks for a good review.

Comment from Morning Mist

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem very much. You took me on a journey of soul and spirit. Very fragile things they are yet also very resilient. From despair we can arise to find love, and we never know where that may be. Good luck,
Blessings,
Morning Mist

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010

Thanks for understanding the flow of the poem so well and for a good review. I truly appreciate both.

Comment from mmmichelle34

Excellent

That is a wonderful poem was very nice reading I thought you did a great job at telling the story in a poem. I gave you five stars the highest I'm allowed for the time being :).. Would love to see more.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010

Thanks for a great review. Since you brought it up, you can change the rating on Sunday. Here's how:

It's actually very easy to change the review or rating of a work. I do it often on Sunday when I receive my allotment of four six stars reviews. Of course, each time I do that, I lose a six star rating for the week beginning on said Sunday.

Go to My Menu in the upper left hand corner of the screen. Scroll down to My Feedback and from the drop-down menu, select Reviews I Wrote. All the reviews you have written will come up, and you scroll down to the one you want to change. Click on Edit Review in the lower RIGHT hand screen of the review; you then can change the wording of the review or the rating.
Of course, I am not asking you to revise the review or the rating; I am just explaining how it can be done after the fact--it's helped me correct many a mistake.

Thanks again for the review. There are many more works of mine in my portfolio You might enjoy Thy Grace; it's the highest ranked poem on the site.

reply by mmmichelle34 on 20-Aug-2010

I am still a little new to this but i love this sight and all thork and i give credit were it belongs and yous that was a wounderful peace...

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2010

Thank you.