A Street of Ancient Mexico
a blank verse poem133 total reviews
Comment from Bryana
What a beautiful poem describing
the streets in Ancient Mexico, very
similar to other countries where
the Spanish influence is obvious
This is my favorite stanza ...
So during the siesta that fine day
I walked a street of ancient Mexico
And viewed one maiden's liquid soft brown eyes;
I met the woman whom I now adore.
I wish the author good luck in the contest. This is a wonderful entry.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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What a beautiful poem describing
the streets in Ancient Mexico, very
similar to other countries where
the Spanish influence is obvious
This is my favorite stanza ...
So during the siesta that fine day
I walked a street of ancient Mexico
And viewed one maiden's liquid soft brown eyes;
I met the woman whom I now adore.
I wish the author good luck in the contest. This is a wonderful entry.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Yes, I love that stanza, too. This can apply to cities from San Juan, Puerto Rico, to Cartagena, Columbia. Thanks for an exceptional review for this Latin-inspired poem.
Comment from DEWalsh
The beginning is very powerful with its echo of Christ while I enjoy the movement towards God (discovered when no one else was awake) and finally the Aztec princess of the desires you thought you had lost. I have always been fascinated by the interplay between the sensual and the sacred and you do an excellent job of integrating the two.
Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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The beginning is very powerful with its echo of Christ while I enjoy the movement towards God (discovered when no one else was awake) and finally the Aztec princess of the desires you thought you had lost. I have always been fascinated by the interplay between the sensual and the sacred and you do an excellent job of integrating the two.
Well done!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thanks. I love to read mystic works, especially Latin ones, because of that fusion of the sensual and the sacred. You understand my work well. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from FredCollingwood
I read this a couple of times and the meter follows the iambic pentameter beat well. It's one of my favorite poetic styles.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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I read this a couple of times and the meter follows the iambic pentameter beat well. It's one of my favorite poetic styles.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a great review; there were several places I was concerned about the meter and you have reassured me.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Poet,
This is a fine blank verse for the contest. You have excellent word selection and the flow is even. Also the theme is quite different which just adds to its charm. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Hi Poet,
This is a fine blank verse for the contest. You have excellent word selection and the flow is even. Also the theme is quite different which just adds to its charm. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate. I like that you saw the even flow and the different theme.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi the author,
Excellent piece of free verse and a really interesting theme running through it as well. I liked the obligatory 'happy ending' after the dark start.
Patrick
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Hi the author,
Excellent piece of free verse and a really interesting theme running through it as well. I liked the obligatory 'happy ending' after the dark start.
Patrick
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it.
Comment from c_lucas
My only complaint is there isn't enough contrast. I had to highlight to read. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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My only complaint is there isn't enough contrast. I had to highlight to read. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Yes, I shall look into changing that. Thanks for a great review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Fireshadow
This is a very creative and imaginative writing where you use outstanding imagery to narrate your story within a free verse format. I see this as a strong contender for the contest and wish you the best of luck. My only suggestion is to perhaps consider changing the color of the words to a lighter one for easier reading. The background color is a perfect match for the artwork color, which is also a great match for the poem.
Your technical information on free verse writing is excellent. Thank you for sharing it. Amarillys
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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This is a very creative and imaginative writing where you use outstanding imagery to narrate your story within a free verse format. I see this as a strong contender for the contest and wish you the best of luck. My only suggestion is to perhaps consider changing the color of the words to a lighter one for easier reading. The background color is a perfect match for the artwork color, which is also a great match for the poem.
Your technical information on free verse writing is excellent. Thank you for sharing it. Amarillys
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a great review. You are the third person to mention the color scheme. One person liked it; one did not. With your review, it's two to one to change it. Do you have any suggestions? Thanks again for your review, especially the very complimentary first line.
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The background color is perfect - it goes very well with the artwork selected. What you should change is the color of the words to make them lighter and better visible. Hope this helps.
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Yes, it does. I'll take a look at it this afternoon (I am in California.)
Comment from wierdgrace
This is well written, and well said, the poem flowes smoothly, even with the the different vowels, good luck in the contest, and will watch for you
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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This is well written, and well said, the poem flowes smoothly, even with the the different vowels, good luck in the contest, and will watch for you
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a great review. To put in all those different vowel sounds was extremely difficult; thanks for noticing that.
Comment from jadapenn
You created a good visual of this street in ancient Mexico and I could feel the heat during this siesta. I do not know anything about blank verse - so am rating on the pleasure of reading the content.
Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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You created a good visual of this street in ancient Mexico and I could feel the heat during this siesta. I do not know anything about blank verse - so am rating on the pleasure of reading the content.
Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a great review; if I can make a reviewer feel something, I have done well as a writer.
Comment from Valkarie
One could feel the tension in your piece of poetry, it flowed so well and took the reader on a special journey.
This is a most inspiring piece of writing well thought out and very well written with the use of word power to the limits. The vocabulary within your poem is artistically done and your words flowed so eloquently. This is an impressive piece of writing which puts the reader in Ancient Mexico. Just a most creative piece indeed.
Valkarie...
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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One could feel the tension in your piece of poetry, it flowed so well and took the reader on a special journey.
This is a most inspiring piece of writing well thought out and very well written with the use of word power to the limits. The vocabulary within your poem is artistically done and your words flowed so eloquently. This is an impressive piece of writing which puts the reader in Ancient Mexico. Just a most creative piece indeed.
Valkarie...
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a wonderful review; I am so honored when people call my work beautiful.
