A Street of Ancient Mexico
a blank verse poem133 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
I just wanted you to know how much I loved reading this. It is, of course, a perfect example of what blank verse should sound like. It was readable, meaningful, full of the things that make poetry poetry, like metaphor and music and rich language and strong images. I really like this!!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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I just wanted you to know how much I loved reading this. It is, of course, a perfect example of what blank verse should sound like. It was readable, meaningful, full of the things that make poetry poetry, like metaphor and music and rich language and strong images. I really like this!!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thanks for a great review. I did find a few rhymes, after the fact though!
Comment from MyYiaYia
Since I don't know enough about BV as of yet, I must ask the question about the following line. If you can't rhyme in the same line, why would they allow a repetitive word? This is confusing to me. Is this an example of 'breaking the rules'? Can we talk about this in class? Deb :0)
-When one impairs one's body and one's mind.-
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2011
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Since I don't know enough about BV as of yet, I must ask the question about the following line. If you can't rhyme in the same line, why would they allow a repetitive word? This is confusing to me. Is this an example of 'breaking the rules'? Can we talk about this in class? Deb :0)
-When one impairs one's body and one's mind.-
Comment Written 28-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2011
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Yes, please bring this up in class. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
Alvin, this is a poem of symbols and more abstract truths, as good poetry should be.
Images have an underlying message. This serves more than one purpose, but to me sets a mood.
I get an idea of old Mexico as you've intended.
I think the budding romance is skillful and apparently is fulfilled.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2010
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Alvin, this is a poem of symbols and more abstract truths, as good poetry should be.
Images have an underlying message. This serves more than one purpose, but to me sets a mood.
I get an idea of old Mexico as you've intended.
I think the budding romance is skillful and apparently is fulfilled.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a great review. You definitely caught the tone of the poem. Thank you for that.
Comment from DragonSkulls
I find it hard that anyone would even question some of the things you needed to explain. This is an outstandind piece of art, the nerve of some people. Well worth a six in my book Alvin. Great write, from the first stanza to the last. /Ron
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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I find it hard that anyone would even question some of the things you needed to explain. This is an outstandind piece of art, the nerve of some people. Well worth a six in my book Alvin. Great write, from the first stanza to the last. /Ron
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thanks for this exceptional review. After all the discussion on meter, I truly appreciate it. Thank you again so much.
Comment from InterestingRon
I've just finished reading William H. Precott's monumental History of the Conquest of Mexico. It's a pretty old book, but spellbinding. I find your beautifully composed poem captures all the atmosphere of that book. In far less words too! A reading treat. Thank you. Ron
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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I've just finished reading William H. Precott's monumental History of the Conquest of Mexico. It's a pretty old book, but spellbinding. I find your beautifully composed poem captures all the atmosphere of that book. In far less words too! A reading treat. Thank you. Ron
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it. I always try to be historically accurate in my work.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is one strong and very powerful little poem. I love your choice of words especially This line
[Dark bruises are discovered on my soul;]
I have one small suggestion to offer.
[My body has fresh ones to correspond.] - the word 'ones' seems pale in comparison to the rest of the poem. Maybe you could find a stronger word such as 'wounds' 'weals' abrasions etc.
Apart from that tiny glitch, your poem is excellent.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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This is one strong and very powerful little poem. I love your choice of words especially This line
[Dark bruises are discovered on my soul;]
I have one small suggestion to offer.
[My body has fresh ones to correspond.] - the word 'ones' seems pale in comparison to the rest of the poem. Maybe you could find a stronger word such as 'wounds' 'weals' abrasions etc.
Apart from that tiny glitch, your poem is excellent.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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That's a good suggestion; I shall consider it carefully. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
This is a powerful, image-filled poem. As you imply, God works in mysterious ways and places so unlikely as it sees,"Romance was born that day in Mexico."
Thank you for the rules of blank verese. I never had it fully explained before. Good luck in the contest. I wish I had six stars remaining. Will you settle for six Irish hugs?
Roger
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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This is a powerful, image-filled poem. As you imply, God works in mysterious ways and places so unlikely as it sees,"Romance was born that day in Mexico."
Thank you for the rules of blank verese. I never had it fully explained before. Good luck in the contest. I wish I had six stars remaining. Will you settle for six Irish hugs?
Roger
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Yes, though you can change the rating tomorrow, if you want. Here's how:
It's actually very easy to change the review or rating of a work. I do it often on Sunday when I receive my allotment of four six stars reviews. Of course, each time I do that, I lose a six star rating for the week beginning on said Sunday.
Go to My Menu in the upper left hand corner of the screen. Scroll down to My Feedback and from the drop-down menu, select Reviews I Wrote. All the reviews you have written will come up, and you scroll down to the one you want to change. Click on Edit Review in the lower RIGHT hand screen of the review; you then can change the wording of the review or the rating.
Of course, I am not asking you to revise the review or the rating; I am just explaining how it can be done after the fact--it's helped me correct many a mistake.
Thanks again for a wonderful review.
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hello Writer,
It was a pleasure to read your interesting and well constructed poem. You did a great job with this blank verse and I send good wishes to you.
Cheers, W ^-^
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Hello Writer,
It was a pleasure to read your interesting and well constructed poem. You did a great job with this blank verse and I send good wishes to you.
Cheers, W ^-^
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it.
Comment from Kingsland
I couldn't tell you if your syllable count was right because I don't count them. I never pay attention to them when I write a poem either. I just read it out loud to myself. If it comes forth smoothly. Well, then it works for me. This poem has some good imagery and seems to flow well for a free verse poem. It was just a delight to have read and written a review for... John
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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I couldn't tell you if your syllable count was right because I don't count them. I never pay attention to them when I write a poem either. I just read it out loud to myself. If it comes forth smoothly. Well, then it works for me. This poem has some good imagery and seems to flow well for a free verse poem. It was just a delight to have read and written a review for... John
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Thank you for a good review; I truly appreciate it.
Comment from closetpoetjester
Wow this was a wonderfully romantic piece about finding love in Mexico after being through a tumultuous breakup with someone who was adored.
This had a nice fluidity to it and I thank you for the plethera or explanation on pronunciations etc in your authors notes.
I liked the second and fourth stanzas the best and thought this was beautifully written. Despite the sad start to this it took a turn for the best and I found it a fantastic representation of Blank Verse.
Well done and good luck with this stunning piece.
Cheers ...
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Wow this was a wonderfully romantic piece about finding love in Mexico after being through a tumultuous breakup with someone who was adored.
This had a nice fluidity to it and I thank you for the plethera or explanation on pronunciations etc in your authors notes.
I liked the second and fourth stanzas the best and thought this was beautifully written. Despite the sad start to this it took a turn for the best and I found it a fantastic representation of Blank Verse.
Well done and good luck with this stunning piece.
Cheers ...
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Thank you for a good review; you are very kind.
