Comment from Nanette Mary

Excellent

Hullo Angel Debbie ....

Generally speaking, this is nicely written although in just a few places, there is room for improvement in your metre and also your rhyming.

* The words ...from / thumb ... do not rhyme.
* You have - Why do you look me down and say ...
I suggest - Why do you put me down and say ....

Thank you for sharing these thoughts with us.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2010

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Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, an enjoyable read about the teenage angst and aggravation. i enjoyed reading this one. great job

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2010

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Comment from samandlancelot

Excellent

So many times I think teens would like to say what's on their mind if they thought anyone would consider what they had to say. Patricia

Forgetting (For getting) it out in the open Would mean a lot to me, I'm hope'n

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2010

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