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Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "A Great Day - A voice came to me"Variety of Old and fun Poems
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Comment from Readywriter52
The picture is interesting. Every day can be a great day. We have the power and the ability to change the negative into positive. We can influence our lives for the best. That is a gift god has given us.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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The picture is interesting. Every day can be a great day. We have the power and the ability to change the negative into positive. We can influence our lives for the best. That is a gift god has given us.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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Yes this is so so true
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading 'A Great Day - A voice came to me'. It flowed nicely and was enjoyable to read. We all need to remember that tomorrow we get a fresh start.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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I enjoyed reading 'A Great Day - A voice came to me'. It flowed nicely and was enjoyable to read. We all need to remember that tomorrow we get a fresh start.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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so true, thank you so so much
Comment from Nanashirley
It's a nice poem but a little to heavy for me. I have read it three times and I am still not sure. I gave you a five because I think it is me not you that has the problem.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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It's a nice poem but a little to heavy for me. I have read it three times and I am still not sure. I gave you a five because I think it is me not you that has the problem.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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I am so so sorry, Hang in there my friend
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, i like your poetry as well as your stories. these poems are full of imagery and emotion, creating a picture in your reader's mind and filling them with comfort
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, i like your poetry as well as your stories. these poems are full of imagery and emotion, creating a picture in your reader's mind and filling them with comfort
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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thank you so much you are so kind
Comment from fluffnstuff
Hi there. I feel badly giving a four to such a lady/writer as yourself, but I think there is a flaw.
"will circulate around you and help other on that-----"
Perhaps you meant others or another? Sorry, I tried to fit it, but it just didn't.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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Hi there. I feel badly giving a four to such a lady/writer as yourself, but I think there is a flaw.
"will circulate around you and help other on that-----"
Perhaps you meant others or another? Sorry, I tried to fit it, but it just didn't.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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thank you for the review, usually I do not get a star dropped for a key stroke, I missed the s, sorry, but I fixed it, you are a tough reviewer, but you caught it and I fixed it thank you
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Ted T taught me that if it needs any correcting at all...no 5. Sorry, really I'm a softy
Comment from missy98writer
wierdgrace,
your spiritual verse is profound and eloquently written. Gorgeous art work of jgrace you used. Vivid imagery, great narrative and very descriptive writing. The second stanza was my favorite:
Away beyond the sands of time, holds
the greatest secret of all mankind. We can't express our
happiness to be on hand when they command. To
show our fact to every race. To love them each
and everyone. To do our bit whenever we can, we
will then be triumphant over all the land
Cool title 'A Great Day- A voice came to me.'
Your spiritual free verse is excellent. I look forward to reading more of your writings. God bless you.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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wierdgrace,
your spiritual verse is profound and eloquently written. Gorgeous art work of jgrace you used. Vivid imagery, great narrative and very descriptive writing. The second stanza was my favorite:
Away beyond the sands of time, holds
the greatest secret of all mankind. We can't express our
happiness to be on hand when they command. To
show our fact to every race. To love them each
and everyone. To do our bit whenever we can, we
will then be triumphant over all the land
Cool title 'A Great Day- A voice came to me.'
Your spiritual free verse is excellent. I look forward to reading more of your writings. God bless you.
Melissa.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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My voice is being written more now as I am on my way to surgery in Sept. so I guess I am reminded of many thing
Comment from misscookie
this is marvelous darling, just marvelous./ I'm lost for words . I love the not only the movement of the poem but your wordstouched me to the depths of my soul.
what a messasge it brings.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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this is marvelous darling, just marvelous./ I'm lost for words . I love the not only the movement of the poem but your wordstouched me to the depths of my soul.
what a messasge it brings.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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as always you make my days
Comment from animatqua
You have a beautiful way with words, my friend. The content of the poem here says so much to me. I have heard the phrase, "Each one win one". This is part of what I see here. If each one of us would live in such a way as to inspire others, maybe someone else will be moved to do the same thing.
I very much believe that each of us has the capacity to be an angel. You have certainly been one for me!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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You have a beautiful way with words, my friend. The content of the poem here says so much to me. I have heard the phrase, "Each one win one". This is part of what I see here. If each one of us would live in such a way as to inspire others, maybe someone else will be moved to do the same thing.
I very much believe that each of us has the capacity to be an angel. You have certainly been one for me!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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Thank you this makes my day, I am honored
Comment from Minglement
I really enjoyed this beautiful, uplifting poem with such a great message. You have grown in your writing since I was here, over a year ago. It's good to be back and see your progress. Take care, Marcia
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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I really enjoyed this beautiful, uplifting poem with such a great message. You have grown in your writing since I was here, over a year ago. It's good to be back and see your progress. Take care, Marcia
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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now this is a great compliment, thank you so much
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You're so welcome. Keep writing!
Comment from mik4L
This is much better. Good job.
I really like the overall feelings conveyed in this poem - the awe, the majesty. It is a solid start for expressing such an experience. Although, I felt the ending was very loose and needs some work; and there is a need for more line breaks for clarity. I will send my suggestions in a PM not to detract from the review. Thank you for sharing your beautiful words with us.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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This is much better. Good job.
I really like the overall feelings conveyed in this poem - the awe, the majesty. It is a solid start for expressing such an experience. Although, I felt the ending was very loose and needs some work; and there is a need for more line breaks for clarity. I will send my suggestions in a PM not to detract from the review. Thank you for sharing your beautiful words with us.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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I will check out the pm, as this is a rough draft, and three stars makes me worry. I am writting a lot about things before surgery, so hope It is not too bad
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Suggest break up poem like this: (other suggested changes in parenthesis below) KEEP WRITING. Great thoughts!
A great day is ahead for you.
A call from far above.
An Angel speaks
the voice you hear, awake, or asleep
this holy presence is near,
to help and to guide and keep away fear.
It shall comfort you in times
of trouble and lift you up to greater heights than you have ever known.
As a breath of Heaven it comes to lead the way
always marching on ahead,
lighting the way.
Away (suggest "A way")beyond the sands of time,
holds the greatest secret of all mankind.
We can't express our happiness to be on hand when they command.
To show our fact (correct "face") to every race.
To love them each and everyone.
To do our bit whenever we can,
we will then be triumphant over all the land.
See the best in everything, (deleted text that was here to suggest better flow) and help other on
that upward trend.
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thanks for your comments, I did formmat it better, but did not change it all, thank you
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You are most welcome. It looks much better.
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you are truly tough on your reviews, think I will leave it at that, thanks
