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Comment from keepthefaith
I liked your poem. It flowed well and was well written.
Everyone must shine their light to do better in this world. Make it a better place. Help each other. I liked the picture that accompanied your poem. Great job!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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I liked your poem. It flowed well and was well written.
Everyone must shine their light to do better in this world. Make it a better place. Help each other. I liked the picture that accompanied your poem. Great job!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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thank you so so much
Comment from Nanashirley
I like the way you can say so much in such a few words. I found no editing needed. I would like to know how you get your ideas. You can follow so many genres in a very enjoyable way
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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I like the way you can say so much in such a few words. I found no editing needed. I would like to know how you get your ideas. You can follow so many genres in a very enjoyable way
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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thank you so much
Comment from jlsavell
weirdgrace, this is stunning!!! what an absolutely decorum to live ones life by. This should be in the wise and wisdom book of quotes. So very well done!!!!!!! jlsavell
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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weirdgrace, this is stunning!!! what an absolutely decorum to live ones life by. This should be in the wise and wisdom book of quotes. So very well done!!!!!!! jlsavell
Comment Written 14-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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thank you
Comment from Amyna
This is a beautiful poem, and so true. I agree with you totally!
Good- better - best - the best way I have ever seen these words explained.
Wish I could have given you six stars.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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This is a beautiful poem, and so true. I agree with you totally!
Good- better - best - the best way I have ever seen these words explained.
Wish I could have given you six stars.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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thank you so much
Comment from Readywriter52
The poem does give people good advice. We should help each other. It never hurts to feel empathy for another person. Their pain is our pain.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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The poem does give people good advice. We should help each other. It never hurts to feel empathy for another person. Their pain is our pain.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2010
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thank you again
Comment from irishestep
I like the message of this poem. The only thing I would change is the form-it is hard to read and I had to read it a few times. Maybe make 3 two-line stanzas (combine lines-like lines 1 and 2). I am not sure how the title fits. Definitely memorable.
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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
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I like the message of this poem. The only thing I would change is the form-it is hard to read and I had to read it a few times. Maybe make 3 two-line stanzas (combine lines-like lines 1 and 2). I am not sure how the title fits. Definitely memorable.
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Comment Written 13-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
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thank you so much, I will get to this and fix
Comment from Bellringer
What an wonderful little poem that could have been written by one of the greats. I loved it. The message is needed today. The only suggestion I have is to maintain consistency of capitalization in the opening of each line. Best wishes, Hector
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
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What an wonderful little poem that could have been written by one of the greats. I loved it. The message is needed today. The only suggestion I have is to maintain consistency of capitalization in the opening of each line. Best wishes, Hector
Comment Written 13-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
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you are so kind, thank you
Comment from Soledadpaz
This is beautiful, Grace. You paint a picture of benevolence towards one's fellow man. The more worthy that of helping a stranger, for no one is a stranger in the eyes of God.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
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This is beautiful, Grace. You paint a picture of benevolence towards one's fellow man. The more worthy that of helping a stranger, for no one is a stranger in the eyes of God.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
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thank you I tried
Comment from missy98writer
wierdgrace,
your poem is beautifully written. Gorgeous are work you used. I loved the lines:
He does better
who does bless
The stranger
in his wretchedness.
Yet, best, Oh best
of all does he
Who helps
a fallen enemy."
I love your spiritual verse. What a uplifting and delightful read. Have a great weekend.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
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wierdgrace,
your poem is beautifully written. Gorgeous are work you used. I loved the lines:
He does better
who does bless
The stranger
in his wretchedness.
Yet, best, Oh best
of all does he
Who helps
a fallen enemy."
I love your spiritual verse. What a uplifting and delightful read. Have a great weekend.
Melissa.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
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you are so so kind, thank you
Comment from anjum-artwriter
A great holy message, a reminder we need as human beings to remember the Good is always the winner and blessed by God.
A highly effective combination of words, the impact of 'he does well who does good' comes heavy forceful and striking on the reader and the word 'brotherhood' encompasses all humanity.'Helping a fallen enemy' is the height of goodness' mentioned in all religions.This shows the authors love of good deeds and the future lies with our Holy Guiding Light.The best is the graceful grand link with the light in the clouds.I have often seen and felt the same.One of my poems 'Asking The Clouds' has been published in the UK.Nature talks to us , it is for us to see the Maker and be Blessed.great work.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
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A great holy message, a reminder we need as human beings to remember the Good is always the winner and blessed by God.
A highly effective combination of words, the impact of 'he does well who does good' comes heavy forceful and striking on the reader and the word 'brotherhood' encompasses all humanity.'Helping a fallen enemy' is the height of goodness' mentioned in all religions.This shows the authors love of good deeds and the future lies with our Holy Guiding Light.The best is the graceful grand link with the light in the clouds.I have often seen and felt the same.One of my poems 'Asking The Clouds' has been published in the UK.Nature talks to us , it is for us to see the Maker and be Blessed.great work.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
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thank you so so much
