Another Pretty Face
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Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Gorgeous art work of Angelheart's you used. Your chapter was real sensual. Poor Joe and Sara are going to implode from passion. Soon kisses won't be enough for them. I was happy to read Steven and Leya are having twins. The jury is out of Joe being such a gentleman. He's almost too good to be true. There has to be a flaw or two in this man. Here are some paragraphs that stood out for me:
Joe's kisses grew more passionate. I need to stop while I can. He held out his billfold. "I have a few more pictures I'd like to show you." He flipped to a new photo. "This is Steven Albright, our team chief, and his wife, Leya. She's pregnant with twins and due in about a month."
Joe moved closer and wiped a strand of hair from her cheek. "Don't be embarrassed. I have the same desires, but I didn't bring you here to make love to you. I know you're not comfortable with me, yet."
"Fair question. I get up around five-thirty and do PT (physical training). Then around eight-thirty my day starts. If I'm at the Task Force, my days are actually simple. I run down information on drug cartel movements; basically I'm just a watch dog."
After adjusting himself on the blanket, he said, "On Monday, Wednesday, and Friday afternoons I have martial arts training. Tuesday's and Thursday's are for weapons training." His voice suddenly grew serious. "I can't tell you what happens when I leave the country. It's not because I don't trust you, but because it could put you in danger."
After he parked the car in front of her house, he opened the door and helped her out. He slid his arm around her waist. "Think Cassie is watching or is she asleep?"
As he opened the car door, he looked back at Sara still standing at the door with her hand across her stomach. He understood how deeply he loved her and wondered how long it would take her to trust him enough to love him.
I sense Sara's apprehension to fully give herself to Joe. You did a wonderful job with your latest chapter, my friend. I sent you a pump. Keep up the excellent writing. Get better or I'll kick your butt. I hope that motivates you. As long as your feeling fine to teach I say teach if not your body needs rest to fight the cancer cells. I look forward to the next chapter of your romance book title 'Another Pretty Face.' Love and kisses. . .Melissa!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Barbara,
Gorgeous art work of Angelheart's you used. Your chapter was real sensual. Poor Joe and Sara are going to implode from passion. Soon kisses won't be enough for them. I was happy to read Steven and Leya are having twins. The jury is out of Joe being such a gentleman. He's almost too good to be true. There has to be a flaw or two in this man. Here are some paragraphs that stood out for me:
Joe's kisses grew more passionate. I need to stop while I can. He held out his billfold. "I have a few more pictures I'd like to show you." He flipped to a new photo. "This is Steven Albright, our team chief, and his wife, Leya. She's pregnant with twins and due in about a month."
Joe moved closer and wiped a strand of hair from her cheek. "Don't be embarrassed. I have the same desires, but I didn't bring you here to make love to you. I know you're not comfortable with me, yet."
"Fair question. I get up around five-thirty and do PT (physical training). Then around eight-thirty my day starts. If I'm at the Task Force, my days are actually simple. I run down information on drug cartel movements; basically I'm just a watch dog."
After adjusting himself on the blanket, he said, "On Monday, Wednesday, and Friday afternoons I have martial arts training. Tuesday's and Thursday's are for weapons training." His voice suddenly grew serious. "I can't tell you what happens when I leave the country. It's not because I don't trust you, but because it could put you in danger."
After he parked the car in front of her house, he opened the door and helped her out. He slid his arm around her waist. "Think Cassie is watching or is she asleep?"
As he opened the car door, he looked back at Sara still standing at the door with her hand across her stomach. He understood how deeply he loved her and wondered how long it would take her to trust him enough to love him.
I sense Sara's apprehension to fully give herself to Joe. You did a wonderful job with your latest chapter, my friend. I sent you a pump. Keep up the excellent writing. Get better or I'll kick your butt. I hope that motivates you. As long as your feeling fine to teach I say teach if not your body needs rest to fight the cancer cells. I look forward to the next chapter of your romance book title 'Another Pretty Face.' Love and kisses. . .Melissa!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Soon we will see Joe's flaw. I appreciate your pump and your support. Your strength is something I am striving for. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
I keep an eye on our families, making sure the cartels - add comma
on Friday afternoon's - drop the apostrophe
your life is more exiting than mine - exciting
Think Cassie watching - Think Cassie is watching
You are so tugging at my heart strings as I wait along with Joe for Sara's love and trust to fully open up to him :-) Brooke
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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I keep an eye on our families, making sure the cartels - add comma
on Friday afternoon's - drop the apostrophe
your life is more exiting than mine - exciting
Think Cassie watching - Think Cassie is watching
You are so tugging at my heart strings as I wait along with Joe for Sara's love and trust to fully open up to him :-) Brooke
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Sara opens up very soon, but then gets squashed. Thank you for you kind review and I will get on those errors.
