Emotions of Love and Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "I'll Always Be There"Love and Life with many emotions
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Comment from TT7Z
You may wish to consider these changes to help the over all flow of your piece.
v3 L2: remove 'for you' from that line.
v8 L1: add an 's' to need.
v9 L1: add 'the' after me.
v11L2: change 'there even if you' to 'there, tho' you'
These changes may help the flow in those stanzas.
Give it a try and see what you think.
Great poem overall. Thank you for sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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You may wish to consider these changes to help the over all flow of your piece.
v3 L2: remove 'for you' from that line.
v8 L1: add an 's' to need.
v9 L1: add 'the' after me.
v11L2: change 'there even if you' to 'there, tho' you'
These changes may help the flow in those stanzas.
Give it a try and see what you think.
Great poem overall. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank You I will consider looking into these changes. Your comments are welcomed. Thank you again for reading this piece.
Comment from countess gram
This is a good love poem. The flow is good and the structure is sound . There is one thing that needs fixing, the word"cleaver" should be "clever".Other than that you're good. Well done!
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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This is a good love poem. The flow is good and the structure is sound . There is one thing that needs fixing, the word"cleaver" should be "clever".Other than that you're good. Well done!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank You the spelling error has been fixed. Greatly appreciated.
Comment from acvguard11
Love the inspiration...the love you put into this poem really stands out and it shows that person youll be there anytime...at the end with the god has granted this special love...u really get across the message that god loves everyone :) great job
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Love the inspiration...the love you put into this poem really stands out and it shows that person youll be there anytime...at the end with the god has granted this special love...u really get across the message that god loves everyone :) great job
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank You for the kind words toward this poem. I have been blessed with a special someone who I dearly love and have wrote this for him to show I will always be there. Thank You
Comment from vandawalker
This has a good theme. At times the rhyme is sing song. I really like the last two verses. They seem natural
your (you're)
cleaver (clever)
To you and I from above
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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This has a good theme. At times the rhyme is sing song. I really like the last two verses. They seem natural
your (you're)
cleaver (clever)
To you and I from above
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Spelling errors have been corrected Thank You for bringing it to my attention.
Comment from RKagan
From what you have written it sounds as if you have been blessed with a wonderful love. This poem is a great tribute to that love. It is well written and reads nicely aloud.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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From what you have written it sounds as if you have been blessed with a wonderful love. This poem is a great tribute to that love. It is well written and reads nicely aloud.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank You for your kind words. They will be taken with grace. And Yes I have been blessed with a wonderful love. Take Care and may God bless you!
