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Comment from Amyna
You paint a pretty picture here. I like to watch the fish, specially dolphins. They are quite fascinating, aren't they...
Your poem brings all this to mind.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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You paint a pretty picture here. I like to watch the fish, specially dolphins. They are quite fascinating, aren't they...
Your poem brings all this to mind.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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thank you, your the best
Comment from misscookie
Nice AS=ARTWORK
I REMEMBER SEEING FISH JUMP OUT OF THE WATER FOR THE FIRST TIME IT WAS AMAZING THAT WHAT YOUR POEM AND ARTWORK REMINDED ME OF.
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Nice AS=ARTWORK
I REMEMBER SEEING FISH JUMP OUT OF THE WATER FOR THE FIRST TIME IT WAS AMAZING THAT WHAT YOUR POEM AND ARTWORK REMINDED ME OF.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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thank you
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Readywriter52
The picture goes well with the poem. The visual effects in the poem are good. "With gentle swooping gensture" or "It skims and turn" are good visual effects.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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The picture goes well with the poem. The visual effects in the poem are good. "With gentle swooping gensture" or "It skims and turn" are good visual effects.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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thank you so much
Comment from ulster3
Hello wierdgrace.
This is another excellent descriptive poem that draws a clear picture in the mind's eye. I think this may be a typo for gestures? genstures.
You are a fine Poet.
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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Hello wierdgrace.
This is another excellent descriptive poem that draws a clear picture in the mind's eye. I think this may be a typo for gestures? genstures.
You are a fine Poet.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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thank you so much
Comment from Bellringer
There is good imagery but I'm a bit confused with the "fits of anger." Is this a personification of the tides of or the fish? The fish seemed to be so calm in the rest of the poem...then it turns into Rambo. By the way, you have "genstures," Should be gestures. Regards, Hector
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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There is good imagery but I'm a bit confused with the "fits of anger." Is this a personification of the tides of or the fish? The fish seemed to be so calm in the rest of the poem...then it turns into Rambo. By the way, you have "genstures," Should be gestures. Regards, Hector
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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thank you so somuch
Comment from MikiB
Excellent little poem written here about their lake. Very nice picture on it. You got me on genstures. I looked in all four dictionaries I have and it's not in them!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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Excellent little poem written here about their lake. Very nice picture on it. You got me on genstures. I looked in all four dictionaries I have and it's not in them!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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thank you so much
Comment from Mª Luisa López Pisú
Poem fully completely. Congratulaciłn.
The best poem, yn reod.
To much inspiratiłn is very in yours vers.Armoniłn and fluid, you enjoys me. Trantes very much.
God bless you. Din¡mica
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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Poem fully completely. Congratulaciłn.
The best poem, yn reod.
To much inspiratiłn is very in yours vers.Armoniłn and fluid, you enjoys me. Trantes very much.
God bless you. Din¡mica
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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thank you so so much
Comment from laren
This lovely poem tell us about a fish. How tides affected by the moon changes the mood, then, after the storm the calm.
Very well written!
Laren
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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This lovely poem tell us about a fish. How tides affected by the moon changes the mood, then, after the storm the calm.
Very well written!
Laren
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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thank you so much
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Thank you for sharing,
Laren
Comment from missy98writer
wierdgrace,
your poem is very well written. Lovely art work and presentation. Excellent narrative, great use of alliteration, and cleaver use of metaphors with the phrases 'Tides of softness' and 'fist of anger.' I enjoyed all the lines because the paint a picture in the readers head:
The silver movement of
the fish with gentle swooping
genstures.
It skims and turns
with
Tides of softness or fits of anger.
Then it settles down when the
moon sets in again.
Thanks for sharing your excellent poem.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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wierdgrace,
your poem is very well written. Lovely art work and presentation. Excellent narrative, great use of alliteration, and cleaver use of metaphors with the phrases 'Tides of softness' and 'fist of anger.' I enjoyed all the lines because the paint a picture in the readers head:
The silver movement of
the fish with gentle swooping
genstures.
It skims and turns
with
Tides of softness or fits of anger.
Then it settles down when the
moon sets in again.
Thanks for sharing your excellent poem.
Melissa.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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thank you so much
Comment from Hanna Marie
Sounds like a fisherwoman to me. Great job. I can see the little buggers jumping out into the evening air catching mosquitos or mayflies..or whatever is their dinner. Blessings Hanna
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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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Sounds like a fisherwoman to me. Great job. I can see the little buggers jumping out into the evening air catching mosquitos or mayflies..or whatever is their dinner. Blessings Hanna
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Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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thank you so much
