The Ephemeral Magic of the Muse
An idea inspired by a Sgaletti poem37 total reviews
Comment from Resplendere
Usually when rhyme shows up in a poem nowadays it interferes- to put it lightly. I am grateful/happy to report that the rhyme in this case is what made the poem. I appreciated the movement of it- I never stumbled. It did remind me of older poems.
I can relate to your creative process.and I enjoyed the wordy second to last stanza. it almost doesn't work but it does!
"These passages of freedom
are my pond'rings
writ for you,
to think about,
or just to misconstrue"
this is the only part I thought could have been said
in a more detached-veiled and yet clever way.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2010
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Usually when rhyme shows up in a poem nowadays it interferes- to put it lightly. I am grateful/happy to report that the rhyme in this case is what made the poem. I appreciated the movement of it- I never stumbled. It did remind me of older poems.
I can relate to your creative process.and I enjoyed the wordy second to last stanza. it almost doesn't work but it does!
"These passages of freedom
are my pond'rings
writ for you,
to think about,
or just to misconstrue"
this is the only part I thought could have been said
in a more detached-veiled and yet clever way.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2010
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THank you, Resplendere. I was very pleased with how this piece was received. I will certainly take another look at the closing paragraph and seek improvement opportunities. I very much appreciate your taking the time to read one of my older pieces and share your thoughts with me.
Mike
Comment from kdstorm
This is a good piece and the photo of the cat is awesome and made me laugh. The reason? I have a kitten that is six months old. She is as black as the one in the photo and her name is....Muse of course LMAO. Good job.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2010
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This is a good piece and the photo of the cat is awesome and made me laugh. The reason? I have a kitten that is six months old. She is as black as the one in the photo and her name is....Muse of course LMAO. Good job.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2010
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I love the idea of calling a kitten Muse :-). They certainly do leave one full of ideas. I'm so glad you liked my poem andlittle Ozzy sitting atop it (we call that picture 'The Codfather').
Mike
Comment from FREE-ONE
FLEEDLEFLUMP-before I can even get to the writing, let's start off with that picture...It set the mood for whatever I was about to read!!! Next your words where acrobatic and just interesting from many standpoints from the point of you as the poet explaining the thought concept to your over anticipation of the readers and how the work is received...I did not see the original posting on this very busy board but I enjoyed it tremendously and wish you a congrats on your placement for this well deserved poem...It was a great pleasure to read...Free
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2010
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FLEEDLEFLUMP-before I can even get to the writing, let's start off with that picture...It set the mood for whatever I was about to read!!! Next your words where acrobatic and just interesting from many standpoints from the point of you as the poet explaining the thought concept to your over anticipation of the readers and how the work is received...I did not see the original posting on this very busy board but I enjoyed it tremendously and wish you a congrats on your placement for this well deserved poem...It was a great pleasure to read...Free
Comment Written 30-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Free :-). I was so thrilled to get nominated and I got more votes than I could have dared hope for. Thank you for such a fantastic review. This one almost wrote itself. It's probably a little self indulgent, writing about the writing process, but when the urge is there I have to follow :-)
Mike
Comment from Realist101
Oh my little "Cartman"!!! Congratulations Mike! I absolutely love this...what a magical pen you have and use. I like these phrases!
"meddlesome inventions"
"mixed up intentions"
This is so appropriate for all of us! Ha. And this cutie pie muse, adorning your computer desk! ") Susan
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2010
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Oh my little "Cartman"!!! Congratulations Mike! I absolutely love this...what a magical pen you have and use. I like these phrases!
"meddlesome inventions"
"mixed up intentions"
This is so appropriate for all of us! Ha. And this cutie pie muse, adorning your computer desk! ") Susan
Comment Written 26-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Susan :-). I was really pleased with this poem, and stunned when I got not only nominated for PoM, but actually received lots of votes. The winning poem is the one I voted for, so that's the next best thing to winning myself! :-). I have little Cartman to thank!
Mike
Comment from MyYiaYia
Boy do I know the feeling. When my muse is on hiatus, I can't do a darn thing. Of course, on the off chance I try, it turns out to be what a 5 yr. old would write. Love your insight and thank you from all of us who lose our muse, from time to time. Deb :0)
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Boy do I know the feeling. When my muse is on hiatus, I can't do a darn thing. Of course, on the off chance I try, it turns out to be what a 5 yr. old would write. Love your insight and thank you from all of us who lose our muse, from time to time. Deb :0)
Comment Written 23-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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lol, thanks Deb. Yes, it's a horrible experience when you have the will but no means whatsover :-)
Mike
Comment from findingmyroom
Hey, Mike, I really like this piece. Woven beautifully in tantalizingly varied line lengths. It's wonderful that your inspiration often piggybacks on the works of others, and that you are gracious enough to say so!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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Hey, Mike, I really like this piece. Woven beautifully in tantalizingly varied line lengths. It's wonderful that your inspiration often piggybacks on the works of others, and that you are gracious enough to say so!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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One of the draws to Fanstory for me is my review poems! I've always had trouble knowing what I want to write about, but scribble like a loon when I have a subject. Hence contests and the poems of others are a very helpful source of artistic sustenance :-)
Mike
Comment from AlvinTEthington
You point out well how inconvenient the muse can be. It has gotten me out of bed more than once in the middle of the night. I like the use of alliteration, especially in the second stanza.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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You point out well how inconvenient the muse can be. It has gotten me out of bed more than once in the middle of the night. I like the use of alliteration, especially in the second stanza.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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Thanks, Alvin. Inspiration's a soapy fish when we're trying to wrestle it onto the mattress of poetry, no doubt about it! Thank you for your review :-)
Mike
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You're welcome.
Comment from Anemone
You can touch many strings together with words knitted like"When it's absent I'm/bereft." I've rated it excellent, so that's it.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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You can touch many strings together with words knitted like"When it's absent I'm/bereft." I've rated it excellent, so that's it.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Anemone :-). I really apprecite your words.
Mike
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for revealing one source of your inspiration and your explanation of the creative process. Once I saw the title, I felt compelled to read your poem--great attention grabber along with your cat muse! I liked everything about the musings, from the "nets" simile to the litany of "un-'s" and the internal rhymes to the alliteration. The whimsical conclusion was choice! Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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Thank you for revealing one source of your inspiration and your explanation of the creative process. Once I saw the title, I felt compelled to read your poem--great attention grabber along with your cat muse! I liked everything about the musings, from the "nets" simile to the litany of "un-'s" and the internal rhymes to the alliteration. The whimsical conclusion was choice! Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2010
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Thank you so much, Joan! What a fantastic review :-). This was one of those urgent poems that comes ripping out, surfing a wave of raw inspiration. I love writing like that, and response has been amazing!
Mike
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Many thanks for sharing a bit of your writing process. The urgency was communicated, and I am delighted the poem is being well-received. -Joan
Comment from daniela.albu
This wonderful cat muse really inspired you for this poem. To be noted is that the lines that evoke the presence of the muse and the inspiration given by her are more rapid and lively and flow in alliterations suggesting the richness of thought and ideas that come with the tide brought by the muse:
"I will type,
and snipe,
and coddle,
modelling the meddlesome inventions
masked by meter's
stale touch
and my mixed up intentions. "
While the lines describing the muse's absence are slower and suggest the feeling of being "bereft" without the presence of the muse.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2010
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This wonderful cat muse really inspired you for this poem. To be noted is that the lines that evoke the presence of the muse and the inspiration given by her are more rapid and lively and flow in alliterations suggesting the richness of thought and ideas that come with the tide brought by the muse:
"I will type,
and snipe,
and coddle,
modelling the meddlesome inventions
masked by meter's
stale touch
and my mixed up intentions. "
While the lines describing the muse's absence are slower and suggest the feeling of being "bereft" without the presence of the muse.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Daniela. This has come across exactly how I intended. I'm so glad you enjoyed the read :-)
Mike
