A Titanic Tribute
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Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
You are a deep poet, Victor. I found the presentation to be filled with emotions of defiance, and endurance amidst dread. Well versed and well worded work.
Isaiah Ramesses
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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You are a deep poet, Victor. I found the presentation to be filled with emotions of defiance, and endurance amidst dread. Well versed and well worded work.
Isaiah Ramesses
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Isaiah, you always seem to "get" my work. I thank you.
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Well thanks. I try. Your work is deep, Victor. I often hope I'm discerning right.
Comment from fairydancer
Not at all what I expected for a tribute to the Titanic.
Use of unusual words and phrases make this a very creative piece.
Last stanza is quite haunting.
Well thought out and written - Cally :)))
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Not at all what I expected for a tribute to the Titanic.
Use of unusual words and phrases make this a very creative piece.
Last stanza is quite haunting.
Well thought out and written - Cally :)))
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Thank you Cally.
Comment from Bellringer
Well done plaintive poem about persons facing an insurmountable fate. There is a certain freedom in knowing there is nothing you can do. You may sneer ("I deny thee, thy great and terrible whale") for a moment; you may laugh "while you repast". Ultimately, you become one with the moment and accept. Regards, Hector
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Well done plaintive poem about persons facing an insurmountable fate. There is a certain freedom in knowing there is nothing you can do. You may sneer ("I deny thee, thy great and terrible whale") for a moment; you may laugh "while you repast". Ultimately, you become one with the moment and accept. Regards, Hector
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Thank you Hector.
Comment from bluedragon776
Wow this is very sad but also very deep and haunting. I was wondering what inspired you to write a poem about the titanic tragedy. Did you see the movie recently? I loved the artwork you chose for this BTW.
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Wow this is very sad but also very deep and haunting. I was wondering what inspired you to write a poem about the titanic tragedy. Did you see the movie recently? I loved the artwork you chose for this BTW.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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I don't know. Well actually maybe I do. I love cooking and pairing food with wine. So I kind of stumbled upon this cookbook, "Last Dinner On the Titanic" and was thinking of recreating the dinner. And from there...
Comment from NadiaScrieva
Excellent job! The tone of this poem is extremely powerful. I enjoyed your author's note as well. I find it an enchanting ode to nature and destiny.
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Excellent job! The tone of this poem is extremely powerful. I enjoyed your author's note as well. I find it an enchanting ode to nature and destiny.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Thank you Nadia.
Comment from rivki1111
Hello, interesting topic for your poem, which I enjoyed reading. You have presented it nicely also.
The reference to the whale, didn't work for me. You also have line breaks in odd places.
Example:'...I deny thee, thou great
and terrible whale..'
This interrupted the works flow for me.
Apart from that, a very good poem that I would recommend to other readers for review, cheers, Rebekah
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Hello, interesting topic for your poem, which I enjoyed reading. You have presented it nicely also.
The reference to the whale, didn't work for me. You also have line breaks in odd places.
Example:'...I deny thee, thou great
and terrible whale..'
This interrupted the works flow for me.
Apart from that, a very good poem that I would recommend to other readers for review, cheers, Rebekah
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Thank you Rebeka.
Comment from idnami
The presentation is lovely. The last stanza especially. Drifting like feathers to the ocean floor. The Titanic is a haunting story and you have allowed the ghosts to gently whisper their tale.
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The presentation is lovely. The last stanza especially. Drifting like feathers to the ocean floor. The Titanic is a haunting story and you have allowed the ghosts to gently whisper their tale.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Thanks Mandi.
Comment from missy98writer
victortouche
a poignant and moving poem that tributes the Titanic Disaster. Great juxtaposition of art work to poem theme. Vivid imagery, excellent narrative, and very descriptive writing. The lines that stood out for me:
ugh while you repast,
and friends will gather 'round you.
Share wine and song together.
And when the ocean's crossed,
whether steerage or the boss,
we'll steep no waves tomorrow.
'And the band playing on' is an expression that came from tragedy such as the Titanic. I love what you put in your author notes to know one's fate and accept it with honor not turn and run like a coward. Impressive writing. . .Melissa.
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victortouche
a poignant and moving poem that tributes the Titanic Disaster. Great juxtaposition of art work to poem theme. Vivid imagery, excellent narrative, and very descriptive writing. The lines that stood out for me:
ugh while you repast,
and friends will gather 'round you.
Share wine and song together.
And when the ocean's crossed,
whether steerage or the boss,
we'll steep no waves tomorrow.
'And the band playing on' is an expression that came from tragedy such as the Titanic. I love what you put in your author notes to know one's fate and accept it with honor not turn and run like a coward. Impressive writing. . .Melissa.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Thank you Missy.
Comment from spiceydog
We all interpret what we read, and of course our own experience shades our understanding. I read this as an anthem to the courage to take risks, that facing past mistakes or hurts will enable us to learn from the past and lessen their detrimental ability to shape our future.
"Great and terrible whale", an analogy to Moby Dick and Ahab? Inspiring to read, especially;
"Attach your colors proudly.
Sail them rain or shine,
Too resolute to fade."
Excellent
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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We all interpret what we read, and of course our own experience shades our understanding. I read this as an anthem to the courage to take risks, that facing past mistakes or hurts will enable us to learn from the past and lessen their detrimental ability to shape our future.
"Great and terrible whale", an analogy to Moby Dick and Ahab? Inspiring to read, especially;
"Attach your colors proudly.
Sail them rain or shine,
Too resolute to fade."
Excellent
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Thank you Mr. Spiceydog.
Comment from ulster3
Hello victortouche.
This is moving and excellent. My grandmother had a friend who went down on that ship. Survivors reported the little remains of the orchestra was playing, Nearer My God to Thee, as the ship slipped under.
I also loved your author notes. Great work!
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Hello victortouche.
This is moving and excellent. My grandmother had a friend who went down on that ship. Survivors reported the little remains of the orchestra was playing, Nearer My God to Thee, as the ship slipped under.
I also loved your author notes. Great work!
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2011
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Thank you Rebecca.
