A Titanic Tribute
the final reality122 total reviews
Comment from Mike K2
I found this poem both well written, interesting and unique to tackle such a unique perspective. There are times, I got in over my head and was resigned in the possibility that I wouldn't be getting out of it. Luckily that hasn't been the case yet!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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I found this poem both well written, interesting and unique to tackle such a unique perspective. There are times, I got in over my head and was resigned in the possibility that I wouldn't be getting out of it. Luckily that hasn't been the case yet!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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I thank you (albeit late) for reading me.
Comment from mmichelle97219
Its okay. You got a story going but there is something missing, an emotional thread, sensory details just little details sparsely sprinkled through that would really make I pop. Like I said okay with the potential to be outstanding.
Michelle
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Its okay. You got a story going but there is something missing, an emotional thread, sensory details just little details sparsely sprinkled through that would really make I pop. Like I said okay with the potential to be outstanding.
Michelle
Comment Written 22-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Thank you Michelle.
Comment from christopherjl
This is very well written. I have no suggestions for your poem only a comment that you are able to convey a beautiful message with your words. I really enjoyed the metaphor, especially the line regarding the feather.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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This is very well written. I have no suggestions for your poem only a comment that you are able to convey a beautiful message with your words. I really enjoyed the metaphor, especially the line regarding the feather.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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How very nice of you. Thank you.
Comment from jadapenn
The great Titanic. You convey a good picture of acceptance of fate once everyone realised that the end was in sight. I bet those who had a little wine enjoyed it to the end. I loved when the feathers come to rest upon the silent floor.
Well penned and I thoroughly enjoyed. luv jada
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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The great Titanic. You convey a good picture of acceptance of fate once everyone realised that the end was in sight. I bet those who had a little wine enjoyed it to the end. I loved when the feathers come to rest upon the silent floor.
Well penned and I thoroughly enjoyed. luv jada
Comment Written 22-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Thank you Jada. And Merry Christmas.
Comment from SecretSquirrel
Yeah this is a great poem. It has a lot of good, locked-in symbolism and word play. I thought the theme didn't get expressed as much as it should, until the last couple of lines, but it is a great poem anyway. It may suffer from overgeneralization of the theme in the middle. It has strong emotional play between the teller and her subject and has some strong observations. Really a good poem deserving of some 6'es. There are a lot of nice soft endings to the verse lines.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2010
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Yeah this is a great poem. It has a lot of good, locked-in symbolism and word play. I thought the theme didn't get expressed as much as it should, until the last couple of lines, but it is a great poem anyway. It may suffer from overgeneralization of the theme in the middle. It has strong emotional play between the teller and her subject and has some strong observations. Really a good poem deserving of some 6'es. There are a lot of nice soft endings to the verse lines.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2010
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Now for someone ranked 781 on reviewing, and someone I have not seen too often, this is a pretty strong, intelligent review. I thank U.
Comment from AudreyRose
Beautifully worded, very eloquent with a mournful undertone. You definitely set the mood woth just the right rythm and beat. Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Beautifully worded, very eloquent with a mournful undertone. You definitely set the mood woth just the right rythm and beat. Great job.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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And thank you for a great review.
Comment from jmyron
I like it. Your poem paints a picture of a dream and tragedy, and the painting enhances the effect. You might like my poem, "The Black Gang." And no, it's not racial.
John
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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I like it. Your poem paints a picture of a dream and tragedy, and the painting enhances the effect. You might like my poem, "The Black Gang." And no, it's not racial.
John
Comment Written 22-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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Thank you John.
Comment from carolann60
A very strong poem Victor, I love the author's note that you have added as well!.I especially love the lines "Turn and face your past, linger enough to cast,light across its shadows." I find that very profound. It is always a pleasure to read your work victor. I look forward to reading more in the future, regards carolann
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2010
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A very strong poem Victor, I love the author's note that you have added as well!.I especially love the lines "Turn and face your past, linger enough to cast,light across its shadows." I find that very profound. It is always a pleasure to read your work victor. I look forward to reading more in the future, regards carolann
Comment Written 22-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2010
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Carol Ann, what a beautiful review. I hope I can live up to ur expectations. U might want to skip my next poem. It is coming in quite controversial. lol
Comment from Mountainstar2
A very good tribute poem written for the memory of the titanic, and the lives of those lost that morning. I enjoyed reading it and thought the picture very good. The wording content is sad, yet written very good. It's is as unique as the Titanic was its self.
What a sad day that was as the children were put to bed that night, knowing it to be their last night alive...
Thanks for sharing this tribute to the great unsinkable Titanic. Blessings...MOuntainstar2..
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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A very good tribute poem written for the memory of the titanic, and the lives of those lost that morning. I enjoyed reading it and thought the picture very good. The wording content is sad, yet written very good. It's is as unique as the Titanic was its self.
What a sad day that was as the children were put to bed that night, knowing it to be their last night alive...
Thanks for sharing this tribute to the great unsinkable Titanic. Blessings...MOuntainstar2..
Comment Written 22-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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Thank you.
Comment from Vickstarxx
Hi victortouche, I thought this was exceptional. The imagery and flow are excellent with the reader getting a true feeling of acceptance of the fate before the crew and the wisdom one would experience in such a moment! Vicki
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2010
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Hi victortouche, I thought this was exceptional. The imagery and flow are excellent with the reader getting a true feeling of acceptance of the fate before the crew and the wisdom one would experience in such a moment! Vicki
Comment Written 22-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2010
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Vicki, I am overjoyed U liked it. Ur six star rating is very generous. I do sincerely appreciate it.
