A Titanic Tribute
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Comment from knowledge
I think in a way, that the Titanic was an a front to God. It was bragged all over the world that "It was unsinkable". To prove it they sailed into the ice-burg waters; disobeyed the laws of physics and sank. The other law that they disobeyed was having enough lifeboats for all passengers. They arrogantly challenged Mother Nature and lost.
I hope we learn the lesson that they didn't.
This is a well written poem.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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I think in a way, that the Titanic was an a front to God. It was bragged all over the world that "It was unsinkable". To prove it they sailed into the ice-burg waters; disobeyed the laws of physics and sank. The other law that they disobeyed was having enough lifeboats for all passengers. They arrogantly challenged Mother Nature and lost.
I hope we learn the lesson that they didn't.
This is a well written poem.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Yes, the rule for lifeboats changed after the disaster although at the time they were within compliance. Amazing eh? To think the rule for lifeboats didn't state that there be enough room for everybody. Also, did you know our Coast Guard arose out of international regulations following this tragedy.
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Victor. This is such a powerful piece of well written poetry. Your imagery is excellent throughout and I could easily visualise the scene. Well done
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Hi Victor. This is such a powerful piece of well written poetry. Your imagery is excellent throughout and I could easily visualise the scene. Well done
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you Wendyanne.
Comment from Kingsland
Your archaic language just pulls one into this poem. It is so very poetic. It is the verse like the masters wrote. This was just an excellent piece of poetic art to have read and written a review for... John
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Your archaic language just pulls one into this poem. It is so very poetic. It is the verse like the masters wrote. This was just an excellent piece of poetic art to have read and written a review for... John
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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John what a beautiful review. Thank you.
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
One can picture Ahab shaking his fist at the great whale, the Titanic as he spits into the wind.
Your use of excellent metaphors such as 'vale' for death, and 'ocean' for life is also very effective.
The feather is a perfect representation of the ephereal, contrasted against the magnitude of the ocean as a final resting place.
I like this unusual look at the maiden and last voyage of the Titanic and the contrast to the journey and end of life.
The inevitability of it all for both rich and poor, steerage or the boss.
Juliette
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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One can picture Ahab shaking his fist at the great whale, the Titanic as he spits into the wind.
Your use of excellent metaphors such as 'vale' for death, and 'ocean' for life is also very effective.
The feather is a perfect representation of the ephereal, contrasted against the magnitude of the ocean as a final resting place.
I like this unusual look at the maiden and last voyage of the Titanic and the contrast to the journey and end of life.
The inevitability of it all for both rich and poor, steerage or the boss.
Juliette
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you Juliette and well synapsed.
Comment from Bryana
It's a beautiful tribute to the Titanic. I've seen the movie and my heart aches when I see what happened.
These lines caught my attention...
we'll gently drift and wonder.
Feathers come to rest
upon silent floor.
Ah, I do believe,
our graves at last.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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It's a beautiful tribute to the Titanic. I've seen the movie and my heart aches when I see what happened.
These lines caught my attention...
we'll gently drift and wonder.
Feathers come to rest
upon silent floor.
Ah, I do believe,
our graves at last.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you Bryana.
Comment from marcii
Your line.'upon the silent floor,'invokes all the things I have read and seen over the years about the titanic and what happened to it. So much still to this day is somewhat debatable.
A nicely written poem with good structure. It flowed well throughout and good expressions.
Marcii
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Your line.'upon the silent floor,'invokes all the things I have read and seen over the years about the titanic and what happened to it. So much still to this day is somewhat debatable.
A nicely written poem with good structure. It flowed well throughout and good expressions.
Marcii
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you Marcii. I appreciate it.
Comment from animatqua
I found a lot of power in this poem, power that was well expressed and thought provoking. I must admit to a plebian view, however, because I really do not get the comparison between Ahab's obsession and the destruction of the Titanic. Perhaps it has to do with both disasters were caused by arrogance, an arrogance that cost the innocent as well as the guilty.
I rated the poem a five star because after reading it over several times, I finally decided it was my ignorance marring the presentation rather than any lack in the poem itself.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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I found a lot of power in this poem, power that was well expressed and thought provoking. I must admit to a plebian view, however, because I really do not get the comparison between Ahab's obsession and the destruction of the Titanic. Perhaps it has to do with both disasters were caused by arrogance, an arrogance that cost the innocent as well as the guilty.
I rated the poem a five star because after reading it over several times, I finally decided it was my ignorance marring the presentation rather than any lack in the poem itself.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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First of all, thank U. Secondly, I don't think U need to be so hard on yourself. I think the mention of Ahab's obsession works in so many ways and at so many levels. But this doesn't mean U can't question it. Or that u must agree with it. But I do find comforting ur willingness to reread. To question yourself. And I think U have answered ur own interrogative quite elegantly.
Comment from Shirley B
This is a beautiful poem. This is a poem that is meant to be read a loud and with deep emotion. To know that death is coming, and all the money in the world will not save you must be a helpless and sobering feeling. Your poem paints that picture well. Great job, Shirley
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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This is a beautiful poem. This is a poem that is meant to be read a loud and with deep emotion. To know that death is coming, and all the money in the world will not save you must be a helpless and sobering feeling. Your poem paints that picture well. Great job, Shirley
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you Shirley. I do believe it would be quite sobering.
Comment from Nicki_Mist
This was a great dedication to the Titanic. I loved that movie and feel horrible for the people that was really on that ship. When the end comes there is nothing we can do so why go screaming. To think they sung, Nearer My God To Thee. Wow! Good imagery and keep on writing like this.
Nicole
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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This was a great dedication to the Titanic. I loved that movie and feel horrible for the people that was really on that ship. When the end comes there is nothing we can do so why go screaming. To think they sung, Nearer My God To Thee. Wow! Good imagery and keep on writing like this.
Nicole
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you Nicole.
Comment from rudywalsh
A very well written poem, the first time on fanstory that I have seen anyone write about that ill fated journey of the titanic, well illustrated and presented.
Even in your authors notes you keep your poetic tone about you.
Thanks for sharing a wonderful write, have a great day, Rudy.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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A very well written poem, the first time on fanstory that I have seen anyone write about that ill fated journey of the titanic, well illustrated and presented.
Even in your authors notes you keep your poetic tone about you.
Thanks for sharing a wonderful write, have a great day, Rudy.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you Rudy.
