A Titanic Tribute
the final reality122 total reviews
Comment from jwlee211
good poem. You create images in the mind of the reader. Great work. I like the detail I also like the comparison to the whale. Good work
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2011
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good poem. You create images in the mind of the reader. Great work. I like the detail I also like the comparison to the whale. Good work
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2011
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Thank you JWLee.
Comment from gramalot8
Victor, another wonderful job of writing. I can just see the violinist (as depicted in movies of this disaster) who were definitley looking their fate straight in the eye as they played on even unto their death. Good job.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Victor, another wonderful job of writing. I can just see the violinist (as depicted in movies of this disaster) who were definitley looking their fate straight in the eye as they played on even unto their death. Good job.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you much my dear.
Comment from Realist101
No, you are not insignificant my friend. Just weary and worn. I know. We all matter Victor. Your poem is a grand description of how small we can feel in the face of things bigger. But no, you are a grand person. Anyone who can meet the challenges you have, is close to being an angel, if not one. My best to you. Susan
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2010
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No, you are not insignificant my friend. Just weary and worn. I know. We all matter Victor. Your poem is a grand description of how small we can feel in the face of things bigger. But no, you are a grand person. Anyone who can meet the challenges you have, is close to being an angel, if not one. My best to you. Susan
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2010
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Susan, ur support helps me in many ways and many layers. I do thank U.
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you're welcome, please remember yu are not alone in troubles, ok? Keep writing, you really have much talent! S.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A disasterous loss of life
which so easily could have
been avoided had the owners
not been (just as they do today)
cutting cost, which is what it
all boiled down to. You're so
right - each and every one of us
are so insignificant among the
vastness.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2010
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A disasterous loss of life
which so easily could have
been avoided had the owners
not been (just as they do today)
cutting cost, which is what it
all boiled down to. You're so
right - each and every one of us
are so insignificant among the
vastness.
Margaret.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2010
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Thank U for reading this Margaret. I think this is one of my better efforts. Regards.
Comment from sadnessbringer
I loved the language you used in this, the word choice was beautiful and it flowed really nicely, i loved the photo, and i thought it really added to the poem
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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I loved the language you used in this, the word choice was beautiful and it flowed really nicely, i loved the photo, and i thought it really added to the poem
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you once again.
Comment from Judian James
This is the happiest piece to read on Father's Day and I do hope Tori is spoiling you rotten! With that being said, this is a very well written piece including your author's notes.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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This is the happiest piece to read on Father's Day and I do hope Tori is spoiling you rotten! With that being said, this is a very well written piece including your author's notes.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you Jude. It's funny, I'm answering this almost one year to the date later.
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Wow. Where have you been that you would even find this one year later D.??? Thanks, I think. I hope all is well!! Jude
Comment from Joan E.
Your poem is full of pathos and metaphor. I particularly like your "whale" and "Feathers" metaphors and your bits of rhyme. My favorite line is your theme: "Finality brings sought freedom."
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Your poem is full of pathos and metaphor. I particularly like your "whale" and "Feathers" metaphors and your bits of rhyme. My favorite line is your theme: "Finality brings sought freedom."
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Joan, you are one of very few to mention that line. After the first stanza (my favorite), I thought this stanza was next.
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Thank you for sharing the evocative work and this response to my review. I definite agree with your order. Well done- Joan
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi victor,
This is such an accomplished poem. The metaphor and message is fabulous. Also I like the archaic language you used. It fits the poem beautifully. Well done. Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2010
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Hi victor,
This is such an accomplished poem. The metaphor and message is fabulous. Also I like the archaic language you used. It fits the poem beautifully. Well done. Blessings, chey
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2010
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Chey, thank U so much for ur wonderful review. I'm sorry U were offended with my other poem. I was simply so happy with the acceptance of this poem, that I celebrated and just wanted to share my enthusiasm. Obviously not everyone understood the little ghetto rave.
Comment from honeytree
To know of ones fate within these words, would be frightening for everyone on board. If one has faith in life after death can be some comfort. I feel being in this position one may not have faith in God, after death. What happens to them?
God I am sure will not forsake His Children.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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To know of ones fate within these words, would be frightening for everyone on board. If one has faith in life after death can be some comfort. I feel being in this position one may not have faith in God, after death. What happens to them?
God I am sure will not forsake His Children.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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I sure hope you are correct, Honeytree.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This poem skillfully uses the sinking Titanic as a touching metaphor of death. What a striking image to contrast insignificance with vastness: "Feathers come to rest upon the silent floor."
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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This poem skillfully uses the sinking Titanic as a touching metaphor of death. What a striking image to contrast insignificance with vastness: "Feathers come to rest upon the silent floor."
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you, as always, Jeanie.
