If The Jester Cried At Night
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Big Bubbles, No Troubles!"A collection of favourite poems by mrgrunty.
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Comment from Scissor handz
This was an awesome metaphor, loved it. I used to get that feeling when I dated that I needed a new piece of gum didnt realize that other people stepped in the one I spit out, JK. I always put mine in a little paper and toss it in the trash (proper burial, lol).
Scissor
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This was an awesome metaphor, loved it. I used to get that feeling when I dated that I needed a new piece of gum didnt realize that other people stepped in the one I spit out, JK. I always put mine in a little paper and toss it in the trash (proper burial, lol).
Scissor
Comment Written 31-Dec-2004
Comment from FmblingTwrdXtacy
Absolutely wonderful! Your poetry is always a delight to read. I loved the first verse:
Bubblegum upon my shoe,
reminded me of you.
I'd loved the taste then spat it out
and stepped right in the goo.
Reminds me of my ex and the mess that ensued! Wonderful.
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Absolutely wonderful! Your poetry is always a delight to read. I loved the first verse:
Bubblegum upon my shoe,
reminded me of you.
I'd loved the taste then spat it out
and stepped right in the goo.
Reminds me of my ex and the mess that ensued! Wonderful.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2004
Comment from Elliesbiggestfan
Oh layers, layers everywhere Mr Onion man!! This is a great little piece, again vivid imagery conjured up from your simple and effective verse, loved the last part best, new taste indeed lol.....
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Oh layers, layers everywhere Mr Onion man!! This is a great little piece, again vivid imagery conjured up from your simple and effective verse, loved the last part best, new taste indeed lol.....
Comment Written 31-Oct-2004
Comment from Tally
Are you going to get your old flavor back or a new flavor...what will you choose? Cool and refreshing, cinammon and spicy.... bubblegum sweet wouldn't even cross my lips as a choice for you... so I won't say good write or your sarcasm would get the best of you...
every stanza you do with the gum until the third stanza when you start to feel like the gum but then you go back to doing with gum... do...be...what does it matter to me...
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Are you going to get your old flavor back or a new flavor...what will you choose? Cool and refreshing, cinammon and spicy.... bubblegum sweet wouldn't even cross my lips as a choice for you... so I won't say good write or your sarcasm would get the best of you...
every stanza you do with the gum until the third stanza when you start to feel like the gum but then you go back to doing with gum... do...be...what does it matter to me...
Comment Written 28-Aug-2004
Comment from Cabrini
What a unique way of comparing a piece of gum with a relationship.
This one brought me back to my younger days. Toss one off for another.
Some of those relationships got very sticky LOL
Great job!
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What a unique way of comparing a piece of gum with a relationship.
This one brought me back to my younger days. Toss one off for another.
Some of those relationships got very sticky LOL
Great job!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2004
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Yes short and sweet but as usual very creative writing. I like the double meaning to this. Great job on the imagery, flow, and meter. Very enjoyable read.
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Yes short and sweet but as usual very creative writing. I like the double meaning to this. Great job on the imagery, flow, and meter. Very enjoyable read.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2004
Comment from ScarletAffliction
Interesting image of Mr. Grunty dancing about with sticky shoe. Now *that's* quality entertainment. Comical poem with more meaning than meets the eye. Bravo, little wierdo. ( and that's a compliment!)
Mel
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Interesting image of Mr. Grunty dancing about with sticky shoe. Now *that's* quality entertainment. Comical poem with more meaning than meets the eye. Bravo, little wierdo. ( and that's a compliment!)
Mel
Comment Written 26-Aug-2004
Comment from Maximilia
LOL, reminds me well of my dating days. Gawd, wasn't it just like that? Get all chewed up and trade it in for a different piece. Heh. Good rhyming, good flow to it, just good job overall. Cheers, handsome!
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LOL, reminds me well of my dating days. Gawd, wasn't it just like that? Get all chewed up and trade it in for a different piece. Heh. Good rhyming, good flow to it, just good job overall. Cheers, handsome!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2004
Comment from CSJohnson
Once again you've amazed me and made me smile with your imaginative yet down to earth words. Thank you for sharing your work!
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Once again you've amazed me and made me smile with your imaginative yet down to earth words. Thank you for sharing your work!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2004
Comment from Robert E. Blackwell
Fascinating...I like the analogy you presented here. The rhythm is very sing-songlike, which lends a school-kid quality to it. But really, though...who wants to chew ABC gum? (ABC = Already Been Chewed)
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Fascinating...I like the analogy you presented here. The rhythm is very sing-songlike, which lends a school-kid quality to it. But really, though...who wants to chew ABC gum? (ABC = Already Been Chewed)
Comment Written 25-Aug-2004
