Full Pockets--Empty Heads
Big oil, small brains73 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Bob This is a good view of what may have gone on in the boardrooms after the BP oilspill. You give vivid descriptions off all the characters. I think the stopper was the best idea given for containing that Gulf of Mexico oil spill.
Drummond and Betsy seem to be in a relationship.
I don't think a CEO leading such a meeting would use such street language in the boardroom.
Congrats on winning this contest. I am sorry I missed it at its time.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Bob This is a good view of what may have gone on in the boardrooms after the BP oilspill. You give vivid descriptions off all the characters. I think the stopper was the best idea given for containing that Gulf of Mexico oil spill.
Drummond and Betsy seem to be in a relationship.
I don't think a CEO leading such a meeting would use such street language in the boardroom.
Congrats on winning this contest. I am sorry I missed it at its time.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thanks so much dear friend Joan. : ) Bob
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Bob,
You are most kindly welcome.
Joan
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:) Bob
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Brainstorming is useless when there are no real brains in the room. The CEO had not one contribution and he's banking the biggest bundle of them all. Been there, done that, when the Reader's Digest bought us out we spent more time in the Boardroom than attending to business and with a roomful of useless whatever. You got it right and so another 1st.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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Brainstorming is useless when there are no real brains in the room. The CEO had not one contribution and he's banking the biggest bundle of them all. Been there, done that, when the Reader's Digest bought us out we spent more time in the Boardroom than attending to business and with a roomful of useless whatever. You got it right and so another 1st.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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Thank you Ralf. :) Bob
Comment from Jean Lutz
Congratulations and thank you, Bob. As you know I have been living with this over 100 days now. I am posting the link to this on some local Facebook pages.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Congratulations and thank you, Bob. As you know I have been living with this over 100 days now. I am posting the link to this on some local Facebook pages.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Awww, Jean. I am so sorry. I can't imagine your grief. Bob
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I do feel so sorry for both fishermen and oil industry workers that are out of work because of this. Your humor helps vent the frustrated feelings. I attempt it myself sometimes. About a week after the spill I had my first (and last) colonoscopy. I made the comment that I believe the laxative prescription that I was given would have cleaned out the blown well!
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LOL...LOL...Bob
Comment from Vicwhiskey
No kidding. A smart, funny look inside what passes for "crises" mode in America's boardroom. Good work, hope it gets plugged soon. VW
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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No kidding. A smart, funny look inside what passes for "crises" mode in America's boardroom. Good work, hope it gets plugged soon. VW
Comment Written 26-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2010
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Thanks so much, Vic..Glad you liked it....Bob
Comment from zeezeewriter
Most most excellent. I just read your message. I don't spend much time here anymore. You certainly nailed this puppy. I have no idea how you did in the contest, but I hope you won. This is a great piece. You are a fine writer. Good luck. Zee
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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Most most excellent. I just read your message. I don't spend much time here anymore. You certainly nailed this puppy. I have no idea how you did in the contest, but I hope you won. This is a great piece. You are a fine writer. Good luck. Zee
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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Wow! A six from th eZee girl? I am honored! Yes, I see you aren't around much, lady. Find a new romance? LOL..Really, Zee...I am honored....Bob (Yes, I won)
Comment from Helvi2
Hi Bob,
THough I can't say I like the language in this, I think your depiction of what went down was expressed by the bigwigs exactly this way.
When you had the characters say, "The public squawking should taper off" I thought it was a perfect line for the pee wee heads of the coporation. Your writng almost made me belive you were in the boardroom....it was that real.
Great job of writng on a tragic incident that is over whelming everything in its path. THis is truly a very sad situationfor nature and man.
Blessings,
Helvi :o)
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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Hi Bob,
THough I can't say I like the language in this, I think your depiction of what went down was expressed by the bigwigs exactly this way.
When you had the characters say, "The public squawking should taper off" I thought it was a perfect line for the pee wee heads of the coporation. Your writng almost made me belive you were in the boardroom....it was that real.
Great job of writng on a tragic incident that is over whelming everything in its path. THis is truly a very sad situationfor nature and man.
Blessings,
Helvi :o)
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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Thank you so very much, Helvi...especially for bearing with the bum language. I only did it for realism...Sorry...Bob
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You don't have to be sorry Bob! I know you did it for realism and I believe that is exactly how it went down. You did a GREAT JOB!
HUgs and Smiles,
Helvi :o)
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:) Bob
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:) Bob
Comment from Amfunny
This got my attention when I saw it took place in Houston. Seems like it was an actual event and I felt like I was there. I only saw one error:
dark sparkiling (SP?) eyes
Very nicely done and I can see why it was a contest winner. :)
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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This got my attention when I saw it took place in Houston. Seems like it was an actual event and I felt like I was there. I only saw one error:
dark sparkiling (SP?) eyes
Very nicely done and I can see why it was a contest winner. :)
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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Thanks, Norma...you are so kind....Bob
Comment from NadineM
Bob, this was a very entertaining piece that impressed FS viewers! Congratulations on winning this contest!
Your writing is very detailed and I especially appreciated the vivid descriptions of the characters in the scene. I felt like I could see each one of them clearly! Great job!
"None were decaf." ~ love this statement, as if to say only the most powerful and REAL coffee would do.
"He wore an expression that suggested recent taxidermy." ~ here I am trying to figure out the scene in front of me and you've made me chuckle! Good humor!
A few spots to look at require some minor repair. See below:
"Betsy was absolutely gorgeous. She had a soft brown complexion, dark sparkiling(sparkling) eyes ..."
"and a thin mustache(moustache) that looked like (a) grease(d) pencil."
"sunlight from the window glanced (bounced off or ricocheted off?) off his square..."
Loved your description of Gus Shipley. Created very vivid image in my head of this man's physique and stature.
"Okay, C(.) R(.), we know we've got that twenty-one inch pipe that's spitting out the crude..."
"He was short and bony, with curly black hair and a squirrel(-) like face frequently speckled with late-blooming acne"
"Sorry, Chief, (i)It'll just take a minute here."
"He gnawed at a fingernail, (then spit the tiny bit toward the wastebasket.)spit a piece of nail at the wastebasket."
"I'm going home and (getting or to)get drunk, Betts."
"With all the money we pay those bastards, wouldn't you think they'd stop fucking the palms of their hands and come up with some answers.(?)"
I hope this is helpful. I will certainly upgrade my rating once you've considered these.
Thank-you, Bob, for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 28-May-2010
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Bob, this was a very entertaining piece that impressed FS viewers! Congratulations on winning this contest!
Your writing is very detailed and I especially appreciated the vivid descriptions of the characters in the scene. I felt like I could see each one of them clearly! Great job!
"None were decaf." ~ love this statement, as if to say only the most powerful and REAL coffee would do.
"He wore an expression that suggested recent taxidermy." ~ here I am trying to figure out the scene in front of me and you've made me chuckle! Good humor!
A few spots to look at require some minor repair. See below:
"Betsy was absolutely gorgeous. She had a soft brown complexion, dark sparkiling(sparkling) eyes ..."
"and a thin mustache(moustache) that looked like (a) grease(d) pencil."
"sunlight from the window glanced (bounced off or ricocheted off?) off his square..."
Loved your description of Gus Shipley. Created very vivid image in my head of this man's physique and stature.
"Okay, C(.) R(.), we know we've got that twenty-one inch pipe that's spitting out the crude..."
"He was short and bony, with curly black hair and a squirrel(-) like face frequently speckled with late-blooming acne"
"Sorry, Chief, (i)It'll just take a minute here."
"He gnawed at a fingernail, (then spit the tiny bit toward the wastebasket.)spit a piece of nail at the wastebasket."
"I'm going home and (getting or to)get drunk, Betts."
"With all the money we pay those bastards, wouldn't you think they'd stop fucking the palms of their hands and come up with some answers.(?)"
I hope this is helpful. I will certainly upgrade my rating once you've considered these.
Thank-you, Bob, for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 28-May-2010
reply by the author on 28-May-2010
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Thanks , Nadine...Bob
Comment from Annmuma
BIG OIL - small brains -- That's the story in a nutshell. What you did with the rest of the page is a spectacular enhancement of those few words. It seems to me that most corporate meetings work pretty much like the one you described. In fact, sometimes it seems to me that life works pretty much like the meeting described, i.e. everybody hopes somebody else will solve the problems, face the consequences and do the right thing. I think I need a drink! Congrats on a well deserved win. ann
The place was a thousand feet in altitude and maybe ten billion dollars in attitude--- a great sentence with not only description, but emotions. I love
He wore an expression that suggested recent taxidermy.
--This piece is full of gems!
that twit from Alaska said 'drill baby drill.' Ha! I'd love to know how they're gonna champion that crap now."
-- Funny - I heard her talking to a tea party group a couple of days ago. She explained how the oil accident was a direct result of the oil companies having the democrats and the current administration in their back pocket. The woman is an idiot who spouts enough sludge to possible stop the oil leak.
reply by the author on 27-May-2010
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BIG OIL - small brains -- That's the story in a nutshell. What you did with the rest of the page is a spectacular enhancement of those few words. It seems to me that most corporate meetings work pretty much like the one you described. In fact, sometimes it seems to me that life works pretty much like the meeting described, i.e. everybody hopes somebody else will solve the problems, face the consequences and do the right thing. I think I need a drink! Congrats on a well deserved win. ann
The place was a thousand feet in altitude and maybe ten billion dollars in attitude--- a great sentence with not only description, but emotions. I love
He wore an expression that suggested recent taxidermy.
--This piece is full of gems!
that twit from Alaska said 'drill baby drill.' Ha! I'd love to know how they're gonna champion that crap now."
-- Funny - I heard her talking to a tea party group a couple of days ago. She explained how the oil accident was a direct result of the oil companies having the democrats and the current administration in their back pocket. The woman is an idiot who spouts enough sludge to possible stop the oil leak.
Comment Written 27-May-2010
reply by the author on 27-May-2010
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LOL....LOL...LOL...LMAO Yeqah, like Bush the oil man didn't have people in his "pockets" God, I dislike her soooooo much....Thanks for the wonderful review, ann...And thengorgeoous sixer! Wow! Bob
Comment from Chuck23
I enjoyed reading your story. You are obviously a talented writer. The only thing that I noticed or could offer as a suggestion, was the areas where you chose two or three descriptive words. I think if you eased up on the character descriptions - the story would be even better. Just my opinion.
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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I enjoyed reading your story. You are obviously a talented writer. The only thing that I noticed or could offer as a suggestion, was the areas where you chose two or three descriptive words. I think if you eased up on the character descriptions - the story would be even better. Just my opinion.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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Hi, Chuck. Welcome to Fanstory. I agree with you...I just love doing it....LOL.Thanks so much...Bob
