Poor Steven
Roommates try to find a girl for a friend.15 total reviews
Comment from azwildrosa
haha, great read. got a nice laugh out of me. i don't think i would have asked if the lady was for steven or not. maybe my jaw would have hit the floor, and a few words of approval may have escaped my mouth, but no questions to be asked. this was a great read. perfect for the entry. good luck! :)
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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haha, great read. got a nice laugh out of me. i don't think i would have asked if the lady was for steven or not. maybe my jaw would have hit the floor, and a few words of approval may have escaped my mouth, but no questions to be asked. this was a great read. perfect for the entry. good luck! :)
Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Thank you, Rose. I'm happy you enjoyed the story.
Comment from AlvinTEthington
Oh, how often this happens. This is extremely well written. The dialogue moves quite rapidly and the talk of the youth is realistic. You have captured that stage between an adult and a youth where the adult wants to be altruistic and the youth is selfish. Good characterization. The last line is very typical (at least to me) of youth.
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Oh, how often this happens. This is extremely well written. The dialogue moves quite rapidly and the talk of the youth is realistic. You have captured that stage between an adult and a youth where the adult wants to be altruistic and the youth is selfish. Good characterization. The last line is very typical (at least to me) of youth.
Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Thank you, ALvin. I appreciate your comments. I agree, the last line is so typical.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Shirley McLain
God story and poor Steven gets left out again. You did a good job and your characters are strong and keep the story moving. I did not see any spag.
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God story and poor Steven gets left out again. You did a good job and your characters are strong and keep the story moving. I did not see any spag.
Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Lol, poor Steven. But watch him become the next Stsven Jobs, then he'll be rich and he'll be saying..."Ooh, those poor people." Lol
Comment from bhogg
I don't know .... maybe good intentions, lucky me! This was a fun read. I didn't notice any corrections. A light but enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest.
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I don't know .... maybe good intentions, lucky me! This was a fun read. I didn't notice any corrections. A light but enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Thank you, bhogg. I'm glad you ejoyed the story.
Comment from RebelRose
Well, I am hoping poor old Steven finally got a date.
An interesting piece you have written here. Things like that do happen.
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reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Well, I am hoping poor old Steven finally got a date.
An interesting piece you have written here. Things like that do happen.
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Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Thank you, Rose. Hopefully someone felt sorry for him.
