The Plan
A married woman settles the score.80 total reviews
Comment from ladybird
A very good opening to a novel if you want to take it further. It is written with enough details to encourage me to read more. A story I could get interested into.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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A very good opening to a novel if you want to take it further. It is written with enough details to encourage me to read more. A story I could get interested into.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thanks so much,lady. I am elated to hear your response to this write....Bob
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You're welcome.
Comment from Fleedleflump
Your opening line is brilliant, as such things need to be; it imparts information about two characters, background, and a little setting. By the end; you've opened up many possibilities, in that this could bea drama, a romance, or a crime thriller depending on the direction you take it. A highly effective opener.
Mike
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Your opening line is brilliant, as such things need to be; it imparts information about two characters, background, and a little setting. By the end; you've opened up many possibilities, in that this could bea drama, a romance, or a crime thriller depending on the direction you take it. A highly effective opener.
Mike
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thanks so much, Mike...Glad you think so....Bob
Comment from Readywriter52
This is a good beginning to a novel. The reader is left wonder about what Renee plans to do to get rid of her husband. How much influence does Craig have on her?
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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This is a good beginning to a novel. The reader is left wonder about what Renee plans to do to get rid of her husband. How much influence does Craig have on her?
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Readywriter. Your opinion is very important to me as usual...Bob
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can not wait for the novel. When are you going to turn this into one. You have an excellent start here. Great job and good luck with the contest. I am tapping my foot impatiently for the novel.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I can not wait for the novel. When are you going to turn this into one. You have an excellent start here. Great job and good luck with the contest. I am tapping my foot impatiently for the novel.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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LOL...Hey, barb...Don't you want me to finish "Falling Up The Stairs first? LOL..thanks...Bob
Comment from adewpearl
A cheating rat bastard with bad aftershave - she sure has forgiven him for a lot - I love your list.
I love that God is not exactly the one who counseled her to start the revenge affair with the limo driver. LOL This story is filled with wry humor.
Oh, if I read this at the beginning of a novel I guarantee you I would keep reading the book, Bob - this is a gloriously funny, witty opening to a novel. Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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A cheating rat bastard with bad aftershave - she sure has forgiven him for a lot - I love your list.
I love that God is not exactly the one who counseled her to start the revenge affair with the limo driver. LOL This story is filled with wry humor.
Oh, if I read this at the beginning of a novel I guarantee you I would keep reading the book, Bob - this is a gloriously funny, witty opening to a novel. Brooke :-)
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks so much, Brooke. you made my day...really...Bob
Comment from Wild Flower
Awesome job! I'd read it. In fact I'm kind of disappointed that this is it. I want to see what she does to solve her problem with Blair. This was really great. You did good as always Bob.
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Awesome job! I'd read it. In fact I'm kind of disappointed that this is it. I want to see what she does to solve her problem with Blair. This was really great. You did good as always Bob.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Awww. thanks so much, Jo...So good to have you back....And the six stars!!! Thank you, thank you! Bob
Comment from IndianaIrish
Sounds like a good one to me, Bob. Just enough info to get me interested and wanting to read more. Great descriptions and hope you get right on it!
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Sounds like a good one to me, Bob. Just enough info to get me interested and wanting to read more. Great descriptions and hope you get right on it!
Indy :>)
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks Irish...LOL...Got to finsh my first one, first...I think.(Falling Up The Stairs)...maybe not...LOL...Bob
Comment from amada
I see the suspense building up in here. You have a way to raise the interest in the lives of these characters. Many special and intimate touches, as the desire for Lady Godiva dark chocolates.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I see the suspense building up in here. You have a way to raise the interest in the lives of these characters. Many special and intimate touches, as the desire for Lady Godiva dark chocolates.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks again,amada. I appreciate that....Bob
Comment from Changeisgood
Bob, Your humour is coming through on this on how the woman is rationalizing her affair (instead of divorcing her husband); yet she SEEMS to be trying to align herself with what God wants, so it's complex. There's a lot of room for self-trickery. If you see enough depth in it (*I do) to make a novel, it would be a good one. There's so many ways to go with it. I would do an outline, a loose outlines. I advize that because I tend to scatter unless I have in mind a particular ending.
Question: Are you going to post more on the foster children story?
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Bob, Your humour is coming through on this on how the woman is rationalizing her affair (instead of divorcing her husband); yet she SEEMS to be trying to align herself with what God wants, so it's complex. There's a lot of room for self-trickery. If you see enough depth in it (*I do) to make a novel, it would be a good one. There's so many ways to go with it. I would do an outline, a loose outlines. I advize that because I tend to scatter unless I have in mind a particular ending.
Question: Are you going to post more on the foster children story?
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks so much, Franny. I appreciate your comments and yes I will continue this some day...right now I am working on chapter seven of the book...Six is all but done and will be posted in next few days..Thanks for asking...Bob
Comment from Rain Chapman
I like it Bob, a crappy husband, a woman with a choice to make. An affair, a plan ... hmm, definitely enough hooks to keep my interest if you ever choose to continue this start. Great job and best of luck, Bob!
Lorraine :)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I like it Bob, a crappy husband, a woman with a choice to make. An affair, a plan ... hmm, definitely enough hooks to keep my interest if you ever choose to continue this start. Great job and best of luck, Bob!
Lorraine :)
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Hi, Rain..(love the name, Rain) (Lorraine) I really appreciate your input. I was hoping for enough to "hook" the reader...And, by the way, I see you are an avid reader. Good. People don't understand that if you want to be successful at writing, you have to be a reader. It's a must,but some on here don't believe that...LOL...Bob
