Wee Fairies Flitted Through the Sky
a fantasy80 total reviews
Comment from Xylok
Wee fairies flitted through the sky --
cool line, imagery, alliteration.
their wings aflutter caught my eye.
Such magic I don't often spy
as sprites who glitter as they fly.
love the rhyme scheme.
I saw these pixies shimmering
with silver sparkles on each wing
very cool imagery right there as well, and again with the 's' alliteration...it's sonorous and effective. lovely.
flick'ring ring
cool
that set my heart aquivering.
awesome rhyme, great word choice at the end there.
They circled 'round, then waved goodbye
before they parted by and by --
nice one, and excellent cadence throughout.
Though they chose me, I don't know why,
but I'm so glad they caught my eye
:)
pretty poem, sounds great, strong imagery that sticks and i love a poem that gives me the experience too like this one does. your art choice was impeccable and your poetry dazzles. i have one piece of advice...yknow...keep writing! (though somehow i suspect you would have anyway, ahahaha ;) enjoy existing.
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Wee fairies flitted through the sky --
cool line, imagery, alliteration.
their wings aflutter caught my eye.
Such magic I don't often spy
as sprites who glitter as they fly.
love the rhyme scheme.
I saw these pixies shimmering
with silver sparkles on each wing
very cool imagery right there as well, and again with the 's' alliteration...it's sonorous and effective. lovely.
flick'ring ring
cool
that set my heart aquivering.
awesome rhyme, great word choice at the end there.
They circled 'round, then waved goodbye
before they parted by and by --
nice one, and excellent cadence throughout.
Though they chose me, I don't know why,
but I'm so glad they caught my eye
:)
pretty poem, sounds great, strong imagery that sticks and i love a poem that gives me the experience too like this one does. your art choice was impeccable and your poetry dazzles. i have one piece of advice...yknow...keep writing! (though somehow i suspect you would have anyway, ahahaha ;) enjoy existing.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2010
Comment from LYLE
Brooke,
These little pixies are old friends, so you must be careful not to step on one and harm it. There is a pixie fixer, but I can't remember the mix. The pixies usually come around after about five drinks, a terrible headache,
and bloodshot eyes. The perfect example of their visit
was described in a movie "My Man Godfrey," with William Powell, Carole Lombard, Alice Brady, and Eugene Pallette,
made in 1935-36. It is a classic comedy. So, being an authority on pixies, I can review this and declare that it is accurate and well written, and could be proudly read by any pixie.
Fondly, Lyle
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Brooke,
These little pixies are old friends, so you must be careful not to step on one and harm it. There is a pixie fixer, but I can't remember the mix. The pixies usually come around after about five drinks, a terrible headache,
and bloodshot eyes. The perfect example of their visit
was described in a movie "My Man Godfrey," with William Powell, Carole Lombard, Alice Brady, and Eugene Pallette,
made in 1935-36. It is a classic comedy. So, being an authority on pixies, I can review this and declare that it is accurate and well written, and could be proudly read by any pixie.
Fondly, Lyle
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Pixie fixing mix - I love it - sounds like there might be a business venture there. LOL Thanks so much, my lovely friend : -) Brooke
Comment from Frozen Fire
What a wonderful, fairytale poem that's just brimming with colorful imagery. Your imagination was in full speed again when you penned this piece. The flow, meter, and rhyme are spot on!
Shirley
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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What a wonderful, fairytale poem that's just brimming with colorful imagery. Your imagination was in full speed again when you penned this piece. The flow, meter, and rhyme are spot on!
Shirley
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Shirley. So glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
this, my friend, is absolutely precious
I'm going to bookmark it so I can share
it with my Lexi over and over again
she likes to look at my laptop to see
what I'm doing when she's off in her
creative world playing -- sometimes she
will look at the pictures, so this will
delight us both -- thanks for sharing
love, jan
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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this, my friend, is absolutely precious
I'm going to bookmark it so I can share
it with my Lexi over and over again
she likes to look at my laptop to see
what I'm doing when she's off in her
creative world playing -- sometimes she
will look at the pictures, so this will
delight us both -- thanks for sharing
love, jan
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Jan. I am thrilled you are sharing with Lexi :-) Brooke
Comment from Janine Ellis-Fynn
This poem takes me back to my childhood when I believed in fairies. I used to look for them underneath toadstools and inside the petals of flowers. A beautifully written poem, well done.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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This poem takes me back to my childhood when I believed in fairies. I used to look for them underneath toadstools and inside the petals of flowers. A beautifully written poem, well done.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Janine. You USED to believe?? Oh, don't tell me you stopped :-) Brooke
Comment from Amicus
Despite your cheer,
beware, my dear,
of your fairy friend
for it's her style
to steal your smile
and leave you toothless
in the end!
Just saying....
Cute poem, by the way...perverted but cute :>)
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Despite your cheer,
beware, my dear,
of your fairy friend
for it's her style
to steal your smile
and leave you toothless
in the end!
Just saying....
Cute poem, by the way...perverted but cute :>)
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Amicus, what the hell am I going to do with you and your suspicious ways??? Why would a lovely little fairy want to steal my smile and my teeth? I am still trying to uncover your dark past where some fairy at some time did something terrible to you or a loved one. LOL Brooke
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I don't know why the fairies do this but ask any kid and they will they will tell you about tooth fairies. I will pray for you to be released from the awful spell of these creatures...be brave.
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They don't steal the teeth from mouths!!!! What a hate-monger you are. They trade the teeth already missing from the mouth for cold hard cash. LOL Oh, you could write those nasty political commercials that spin a man's wartime heroism into a scandal. LOL
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Poor dear, see how mind washed you have become by taking tea and cavorting with THEM.
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ROTFLMAO
Comment from --Turtle.
Hi Brooke,
I read the fairies poem,
I think I read it twice... once a few days ago, and then this evening. I recall the first time I read it, the last lines tripped me up a bit, but when I went to read it again I got pulled away from my computer. Today I didn't miss my step in the last lines, they flowed to me.
I'm not actually sure if it changed, or maybe I did. Which is altogether possible.
Well, either way, I liked the caught in a magic moment feel about this poem. Lots of upbeat words, kind of has the essence of walking in my own little world. There are those nice to read double letter descriptions, like fairies flittered and silver sparkles, which stick out and catch the brain.
I do think the second two lines of the first set made me pause still, though I'm not sure why. I just know I paused, read it again, and then went to the next set to see the next image was.... when they fly?
--Turtle.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Hi Brooke,
I read the fairies poem,
I think I read it twice... once a few days ago, and then this evening. I recall the first time I read it, the last lines tripped me up a bit, but when I went to read it again I got pulled away from my computer. Today I didn't miss my step in the last lines, they flowed to me.
I'm not actually sure if it changed, or maybe I did. Which is altogether possible.
Well, either way, I liked the caught in a magic moment feel about this poem. Lots of upbeat words, kind of has the essence of walking in my own little world. There are those nice to read double letter descriptions, like fairies flittered and silver sparkles, which stick out and catch the brain.
I do think the second two lines of the first set made me pause still, though I'm not sure why. I just know I paused, read it again, and then went to the next set to see the next image was.... when they fly?
--Turtle.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Turtle - I'm glad you worked things out, or at least most things. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Joan E.
Hey, ho, the fairies are back--they haven't visited for a while. They chose you because you're the apple of their eye--couldn't resist joining in! I found your rhymes, alliteration and fantasy quite appealing. I also particularly liked your fresh use of "glitter" as a verb.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Hey, ho, the fairies are back--they haven't visited for a while. They chose you because you're the apple of their eye--couldn't resist joining in! I found your rhymes, alliteration and fantasy quite appealing. I also particularly liked your fresh use of "glitter" as a verb.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks so much, Joan - my daughter's birthday is approaching, so my mind returns to fairies :-) Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
Thank you Brooke for you lovely joyful poem.
Made me feel like a child again.
Why, my mother never read to me make believe stories or any fairy tales when I was a little girl.
Now I have wind chimes in my back yard that serenade garden creatures, fairies and angels.
Gert
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you Brooke for you lovely joyful poem.
Made me feel like a child again.
Why, my mother never read to me make believe stories or any fairy tales when I was a little girl.
Now I have wind chimes in my back yard that serenade garden creatures, fairies and angels.
Gert
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Gert. I grew up on fairy tales and all sorts of fanciful books and poems :-) Brooke
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No wonder you can write your poems so well you have a very vivid imagination
Gert
Comment from El.Marjie
Good morning, Brooke,
You've seen something I've never seen, though I have Irish heritage. I loved reading your poem Fairies Flitted Through the Sky. I could picture them flickering, glimmering, sparkling as they formed that ring in the sky. Your poem brought a smile to my face. Thank you. Best Blessings! Marjie
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Good morning, Brooke,
You've seen something I've never seen, though I have Irish heritage. I loved reading your poem Fairies Flitted Through the Sky. I could picture them flickering, glimmering, sparkling as they formed that ring in the sky. Your poem brought a smile to my face. Thank you. Best Blessings! Marjie
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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You just have to believe, Marjie :-) Thanks so much. Brooke
