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Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "a magical ride"keep your hope alive....
24 total reviews
Comment from bowls
This whole entry was a feast for the eyes. I realy enjoyed it. You have certainly met all the requirements for the poem. I especially like your use of colour. It seems to add to the fantasy-like quality of the ride. You use the word several times, and I feel this embellishes the joyful imagery and rhythm of your poem. Very nice!
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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This whole entry was a feast for the eyes. I realy enjoyed it. You have certainly met all the requirements for the poem. I especially like your use of colour. It seems to add to the fantasy-like quality of the ride. You use the word several times, and I feel this embellishes the joyful imagery and rhythm of your poem. Very nice!
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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thank you - don't forget to vote tomorrow :)
Comment from Dall
I liked this so much. It seemed like it would be such a nice dream. I saw the horses, and the animated outline was wonderful too. This would be nice for children... Well done!
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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I liked this so much. It seemed like it would be such a nice dream. I saw the horses, and the animated outline was wonderful too. This would be nice for children... Well done!
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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thank you dall :)
Comment from Joan E.
How clever of you to parlay that fact about fictionwriter and respond to luna's challenge so effectively. I'll be in Israel from Monday through May 22 and hope to catch your work periodically when I can connect to the internet. I enjoyed your tale, along with your rhymes and wonderful animations. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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How clever of you to parlay that fact about fictionwriter and respond to luna's challenge so effectively. I'll be in Israel from Monday through May 22 and hope to catch your work periodically when I can connect to the internet. I enjoyed your tale, along with your rhymes and wonderful animations. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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thanx joan! :-)
Comment from resilke
Thank you for sharing your poem. Lots of flamboyant imagery and great detail. Good use of literary device to capture the attention of the reader. Paints a wonderful picture that is enjoyable and fun to read. Great work. Keep writing. All best,
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Thank you for sharing your poem. Lots of flamboyant imagery and great detail. Good use of literary device to capture the attention of the reader. Paints a wonderful picture that is enjoyable and fun to read. Great work. Keep writing. All best,
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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thank you much :)
Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is a fantastic poem with great artwork and animation. It flows very well and I enjoyed reading it tremendously. The picture of the horse is beautiful and leaves the imagination wide open. Excellent read! God bless you.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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This is a fantastic poem with great artwork and animation. It flows very well and I enjoyed reading it tremendously. The picture of the horse is beautiful and leaves the imagination wide open. Excellent read! God bless you.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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thank you for flying by :)
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You are welcome. I will be flying out of here. LOL! Have a blessed day. Marilyn 0:)
Comment from Dom G Robles
This is one of the best stories ever imagined by a fiction writer. It is like a fairy tale--journey to the stars and beyond. The product of the imagination is exceptional--keen--extraordinary and the rhyme and rhythm are as excellent as the imagination, itself. The dreammaster, Luna, and Joy with her friends enjoying a free ride in the heavens visiting planets: orange, red and blue...and then back home--a free ride...The artpicture--the horse flying--moving, and the stagnant stallion (horse) below the poem is reflective of the excellent choice of the author as, well. This poem could be adaptable for reading in grade school where young children--young minds could dream and fly up in the sky--in the heavens and further beyond and beyond... Superb!--congratulations. Dom G Roboles
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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This is one of the best stories ever imagined by a fiction writer. It is like a fairy tale--journey to the stars and beyond. The product of the imagination is exceptional--keen--extraordinary and the rhyme and rhythm are as excellent as the imagination, itself. The dreammaster, Luna, and Joy with her friends enjoying a free ride in the heavens visiting planets: orange, red and blue...and then back home--a free ride...The artpicture--the horse flying--moving, and the stagnant stallion (horse) below the poem is reflective of the excellent choice of the author as, well. This poem could be adaptable for reading in grade school where young children--young minds could dream and fly up in the sky--in the heavens and further beyond and beyond... Superb!--congratulations. Dom G Roboles
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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ooh thank you for the coolest review! :-)
Comment from AnnaLinda
shelley,
I enjoyed reading your poem. I see that you have
met ALL of those VERY long and detailed requirements
of the contest in this nice poem. I typically don't
like all the magical, fairy type stuff, but I think
that you did a great job on it and I like your
animated presentation as well.
Best wishes in the contest,
Linda
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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shelley,
I enjoyed reading your poem. I see that you have
met ALL of those VERY long and detailed requirements
of the contest in this nice poem. I typically don't
like all the magical, fairy type stuff, but I think
that you did a great job on it and I like your
animated presentation as well.
Best wishes in the contest,
Linda
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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actually neither do i lol! :)
Comment from Thilophian
It is really a 'joy' to read the poem. As you are an established poet, words at your mercy. Such a flow of imagination and play of words are very rare. Excellent work. Congratulations!!!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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It is really a 'joy' to read the poem. As you are an established poet, words at your mercy. Such a flow of imagination and play of words are very rare. Excellent work. Congratulations!!!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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thank you so much! :)
Comment from dragonqueen1983
wow i didn't know about this contest. its really cool as is your poem. i see no errors and it goes well with Luna's theme. well done
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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wow i didn't know about this contest. its really cool as is your poem. i see no errors and it goes well with Luna's theme. well done
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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i think there are still openings! :)
Comment from Sasha
I've been so busy I missed the contest, but I just love the whole idea. What a wonderful idea. You have done a marvelous job with this one and I look forward to reading all the entries. Very good work and a delight to read. I wish you all the best in this fun contest.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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I've been so busy I missed the contest, but I just love the whole idea. What a wonderful idea. You have done a marvelous job with this one and I look forward to reading all the entries. Very good work and a delight to read. I wish you all the best in this fun contest.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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thank you smurphette :)
