LIfe, a Free Verse Poem
A whimsical look at life26 total reviews
Comment from Ailo
This is hilarious, in a cynical way, but very entertaining. I love your scheme and the dry humor. Entertaining intro, and very powerful ending. Love your work, can't wait to see more. No improvement needed, perfect as is.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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This is hilarious, in a cynical way, but very entertaining. I love your scheme and the dry humor. Entertaining intro, and very powerful ending. Love your work, can't wait to see more. No improvement needed, perfect as is.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Wow, thank you for reading, and the great review! It was just one of thjose days, and I was in that frame of mind. Cheers, irish
Comment from Njorgensen
What an enjoyable read! I laughed and smiled all the way through. Sometimes we all need an escapist jaunt. This provided that for me. Very well done, indeed.
Nancy
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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What an enjoyable read! I laughed and smiled all the way through. Sometimes we all need an escapist jaunt. This provided that for me. Very well done, indeed.
Nancy
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Thank you Nancy, for the great review, and the stardust! It was just one of those days, and you know . . . Cheers, irish
Comment from Adri7enne
Ah, funny, Irish. I chuckled all the way through it. Of course you know the poem is not free verse, even if life is. It's a great little rhymner. "vault like a herd of pregnant turtles." That's fast, Irish! LOL!
"Brace yourself, Ethel it's almost prime!" How romantic is that! Too funny, Irish!
"And I have this dream of a virgin girl, Who lets me change her entire world." Ah, you guys are all alike. LOL! Sorry if any of this was meant to be serious, but I thought it was a hoot. Great fun, Irish.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Ah, funny, Irish. I chuckled all the way through it. Of course you know the poem is not free verse, even if life is. It's a great little rhymner. "vault like a herd of pregnant turtles." That's fast, Irish! LOL!
"Brace yourself, Ethel it's almost prime!" How romantic is that! Too funny, Irish!
"And I have this dream of a virgin girl, Who lets me change her entire world." Ah, you guys are all alike. LOL! Sorry if any of this was meant to be serious, but I thought it was a hoot. Great fun, Irish.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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What a sweetheart you are! It was one of those days, and I was in that frame of mind, so I quit trying to repair a waterline, and sat down at the desk. You're right, this was all humorous, and the girl was just pretending to be innocent. Thank you for your generous review, and the stardust!
irish
Comment from Donovan
You know what I like about this, it sounds like something an Irishman would write. Whimsical and cute. I like the Wal Mart line....you rhyme it with it, which is not a sin..but I am so oblivious to all of this, it is all I could see.
Ah, what passion, how she takes it! (I must admit) ??
I croon and groan, while she lies there and fakes it.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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You know what I like about this, it sounds like something an Irishman would write. Whimsical and cute. I like the Wal Mart line....you rhyme it with it, which is not a sin..but I am so oblivious to all of this, it is all I could see.
Ah, what passion, how she takes it! (I must admit) ??
I croon and groan, while she lies there and fakes it.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Thank you for the generous review, and the stardust! It was just one of those days, and that is what came out. Cheers, irish
Comment from winsome
This is more than whimsimcal it is downright funny. Starting with the great artwork and right on down through the whole poem. Great job
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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This is more than whimsimcal it is downright funny. Starting with the great artwork and right on down through the whole poem. Great job
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Wow, thank you for the generous review, and the stardust! It was one of those days, and that is what came out. Cheers, irish
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
LOL LOL- I REALLY enjoyed this!! Your are quite a character and quite a descriptive writer. LOVED the parts about Ethel and the Sunday morning lovemaking- and the 'Walmart' part- LOL. Laughed my head off !! Love it all! Thanks so much for sharing! Betty
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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LOL LOL- I REALLY enjoyed this!! Your are quite a character and quite a descriptive writer. LOVED the parts about Ethel and the Sunday morning lovemaking- and the 'Walmart' part- LOL. Laughed my head off !! Love it all! Thanks so much for sharing! Betty
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Hi Betty, thank you for the 'Exceptional' rating! I am humbled!
It was one of those days when nothing seems to go right, so I took a break from repairing a broken water line and turned on the seductive screen, and this is what came out. Thanks again for all of the stars, irish
