Thieves And Liars
Flash Fiction69 total reviews
Comment from missy98writer
Janilou
I really enjoyed reading your flash fiction story 'Thieves And Liars.' I didn't expect the twist I assumed the homeless man was the thief. The attractive lady was holding up homeless at gun point. She got what she deserved. Excellent descriptive writing, dialogue and characterization. I loved the narrative. Great imagery put me in the thick of the action. Your flash fiction is very entertaining and well written. A real contender for the contest worthy of an excellent rating.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Janilou
I really enjoyed reading your flash fiction story 'Thieves And Liars.' I didn't expect the twist I assumed the homeless man was the thief. The attractive lady was holding up homeless at gun point. She got what she deserved. Excellent descriptive writing, dialogue and characterization. I loved the narrative. Great imagery put me in the thick of the action. Your flash fiction is very entertaining and well written. A real contender for the contest worthy of an excellent rating.
Melissa.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Thank you so much. I sincerely appreciate the feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading this.
Jani
Comment from BJean
This was certainly a surprise ending. I quess you never know with life on the street! At least she is reaping what she sowed. Very well written story for entry. Love, Jean
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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This was certainly a surprise ending. I quess you never know with life on the street! At least she is reaping what she sowed. Very well written story for entry. Love, Jean
Comment Written 12-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Thank you so much. I sincerely appreciate the feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading this.
Jani
Comment from c_lucas
Congratuations on the originality of your twist. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Congratuations on the originality of your twist. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Thank you so much. I sincerely appreciate the feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading this.
Jani
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You're welcome, Jani. Charlie
Comment from Abio
Janilou,
I dont really know if you could be a liar, but the story is interesting and only until the very last scene we learned who was the real thieve.
Congratulations and good luck at the contest.
Abio
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Janilou,
I dont really know if you could be a liar, but the story is interesting and only until the very last scene we learned who was the real thieve.
Congratulations and good luck at the contest.
Abio
Comment Written 12-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Thank you so much. I sincerely appreciate the feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading this.
Jani
Comment from patwannabe
Well, Janilou,this had a real twist at the end.
Reminds me of "Man bites dog"stories.
Very good. You pulled me in and then pounced. Well done. pat
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Well, Janilou,this had a real twist at the end.
Reminds me of "Man bites dog"stories.
Very good. You pulled me in and then pounced. Well done. pat
Comment Written 12-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Thank you so much. I sincerely appreciate the feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading this.
Jani
Comment from RebelRose
Well, that was a surprise ending. Very well done. This is a winner in my book. A great story with an interesting beginning, plot, and ending.
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Well, that was a surprise ending. Very well done. This is a winner in my book. A great story with an interesting beginning, plot, and ending.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Thank you so much. I sincerely appreciate the feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading this.
Jani
Comment from vandawalker
What a surprise! This changed instantly at the end. I really like your story. The description is very visual of the characters and fooled me completely. This is definitely good writing. You're very talented.
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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What a surprise! This changed instantly at the end. I really like your story. The description is very visual of the characters and fooled me completely. This is definitely good writing. You're very talented.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Wow! Thank you so much for the fabulous rating and your kind words. I am honored to see the six stars. Sorry it took me so long to answer your review.
Jani
Comment from JeffreyStone
Six stars for hooking me, fooling me. I was ready to shed tears for the poor victim. Great descriptive writing; great dialogue; superb ending. JeffreyStone
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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Six stars for hooking me, fooling me. I was ready to shed tears for the poor victim. Great descriptive writing; great dialogue; superb ending. JeffreyStone
Comment Written 12-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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Jeffrey, I am honored by this rating and your kind words! Thank you so much. :-) You made my day!
Jani
Comment from Saigo
I was captivated by this from the beginning, but still, I never saw the ending coming! Your writing is very descriptive, it's almost as if you can actually hear and see what they are doing. I saw no mistakes. Please keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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I was captivated by this from the beginning, but still, I never saw the ending coming! Your writing is very descriptive, it's almost as if you can actually hear and see what they are doing. I saw no mistakes. Please keep up the great work!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Thank you so much. I sincerely appreciate the feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading this.
Jani
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Janilou,
Your ending was so unexpected! That is a sign of a good story teller. You gave perfect descriptions of the man in the army blanket, very believable. A good story that I enjoyed reading...Good luck in the contest...blessings...chey
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Hi Janilou,
Your ending was so unexpected! That is a sign of a good story teller. You gave perfect descriptions of the man in the army blanket, very believable. A good story that I enjoyed reading...Good luck in the contest...blessings...chey
Comment Written 12-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Thank you so much. I sincerely appreciate the feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading this.
Jani
