An Author Walks Into A Story
A Jigsaw Puzzle Story20 total reviews
Comment from Colette
Congratulations on your win!
Hi John, I am giving you six because I never saw so much excellent content in so few words. I rarely read any of the storeys they bore me and I have no patience but your work keeps me riveted to the screen. You covered all criteria,
but you don't need to to tell you that.
What I wouldn't do to know what inspires your work Yea!
Colette
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Congratulations on your win!
Hi John, I am giving you six because I never saw so much excellent content in so few words. I rarely read any of the storeys they bore me and I have no patience but your work keeps me riveted to the screen. You covered all criteria,
but you don't need to to tell you that.
What I wouldn't do to know what inspires your work Yea!
Colette
Comment Written 01-Apr-2010
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You're imagination it amazing. Once again, I never would have thought like this up in a million years.
Two were women, one of whom was pregnant and breathing heavily. (There's always a pregnat women.)
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You're imagination it amazing. Once again, I never would have thought like this up in a million years.
Two were women, one of whom was pregnant and breathing heavily. (There's always a pregnat women.)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2010
Comment from Vladilynn
I always thought you're a female...oooooppsss!(why I though of that) Lmao :D
Your story is very powerful wit, I totally enjoyed it from all the entries. No doubt that you'll win!!
Thank you for sharing a clever scary story!
Love much
Lynn:0)
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I always thought you're a female...oooooppsss!(why I though of that) Lmao :D
Your story is very powerful wit, I totally enjoyed it from all the entries. No doubt that you'll win!!
Thank you for sharing a clever scary story!
Love much
Lynn:0)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2010
Comment from MikiB
Very interesting, as well as gross! It reminded me of a Twilight Zone story. It was very well written and I saw nothing wrong. Thanks for the nightmare!
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Very interesting, as well as gross! It reminded me of a Twilight Zone story. It was very well written and I saw nothing wrong. Thanks for the nightmare!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
Comment from Alexandra.Obreja
Wow John... wow!
I didn't believe it was a demon coming out from the woman's belly until the last sentence when they found out they were in hell.
Brilliant... I have no words left.
I wish you good luck in the competition!
Best regrads,
Alex
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Wow John... wow!
I didn't believe it was a demon coming out from the woman's belly until the last sentence when they found out they were in hell.
Brilliant... I have no words left.
I wish you good luck in the competition!
Best regrads,
Alex
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
Comment from irishauthorme
Wow, certainly enough gore, sex and mayhem to satisfy the most avid fan! The ending was great, just when the author and the hot thing thought that they had won and were going to get off free, the old Devil had them right there in Hell.
Great imagination, good story!
irish
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Wow, certainly enough gore, sex and mayhem to satisfy the most avid fan! The ending was great, just when the author and the hot thing thought that they had won and were going to get off free, the old Devil had them right there in Hell.
Great imagination, good story!
irish
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
Comment from Terrilynn
Lots of action, lots of blood, cut off the hand, the letters, the horror, and the thrill. This was a great jigsaw puzzler. I liked it. I think the author kept the story line cohesive, and the ending had a juicy horrific twist. Kept me guessing to the very end.
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Lots of action, lots of blood, cut off the hand, the letters, the horror, and the thrill. This was a great jigsaw puzzler. I liked it. I think the author kept the story line cohesive, and the ending had a juicy horrific twist. Kept me guessing to the very end.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
Comment from amada
This original and very well written story kept me in suspense. LOL! I'm not even a fun of mystery novels but here i was, eating up those colorful nicknames and action.
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This original and very well written story kept me in suspense. LOL! I'm not even a fun of mystery novels but here i was, eating up those colorful nicknames and action.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
Comment from DearlB
This piece is well written, but you have a weird imagination.
The story covered all of the contest guidelines with only spag errors that were intended.
Best of luck in the contest.
Dearl
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This piece is well written, but you have a weird imagination.
The story covered all of the contest guidelines with only spag errors that were intended.
Best of luck in the contest.
Dearl
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
Comment from bookishfabler
The story was fun and my attention did not waver throughout the whole story. I love horror stories. I think the baby monster thing may have been a bit over the top, but that's just me. It kinda reminded me a little of Saw. I just wanted to point out a few nits to look at.
While we were discussing her breasts, cut woman stirred.
This sounds weird, maybe the injured woman stirred)
addressed to each of us. I re-read the titles told everyone that it appeared they were addressed to each of us.
( I wouldn't repeat this twice)
entire elevator floor that she was seated on. (she sat on)
I picked up Expensive suit's letter from his lap, wiping (wiped) the blood off onto his suit jacket and began to read it.
your right hand of (or) you will die a crushing death.
hugs
book
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The story was fun and my attention did not waver throughout the whole story. I love horror stories. I think the baby monster thing may have been a bit over the top, but that's just me. It kinda reminded me a little of Saw. I just wanted to point out a few nits to look at.
While we were discussing her breasts, cut woman stirred.
This sounds weird, maybe the injured woman stirred)
addressed to each of us. I re-read the titles told everyone that it appeared they were addressed to each of us.
( I wouldn't repeat this twice)
entire elevator floor that she was seated on. (she sat on)
I picked up Expensive suit's letter from his lap, wiping (wiped) the blood off onto his suit jacket and began to read it.
your right hand of (or) you will die a crushing death.
hugs
book
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
