The Pianist
A Spenserian stanza21 total reviews
Comment from Realist101
Hi Alvin! This is one I missed! So sorry. I love it, altho it is, to me, a complicated style, it is beautiful to read. You are a REAL poet Alvin, and I think I will see if Tom will have you teach a class on poetry. I was reading about Tanka poems, and see where you would if they asked! Congrats on this win too! Susan
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Hi Alvin! This is one I missed! So sorry. I love it, altho it is, to me, a complicated style, it is beautiful to read. You are a REAL poet Alvin, and I think I will see if Tom will have you teach a class on poetry. I was reading about Tanka poems, and see where you would if they asked! Congrats on this win too! Susan
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Thank you; you are very kind. Yes, by all means, ask Tom. I think it would be inappropriate if the request came from me.
Comment from Nan Beeson
Ha! When I saw the picture, at first I thought it was a stairway...LOL...Then I realized it was a piano keyboard.
Forgive me for the kooky eyesight...but that's great, because it made me give the poem even more attention.
Line One caught my attention immediately and I had to reminisce before I went on to line two.
I was taking a music class at the College of the Desert in Palm Springs and needed a keyboard to study on at home. Since my condo was so small I did not know how I was going to fit one in there. I was driving down Palm Canyon and saw in the corner picture window of the piano store a GORGEOUS WHITE BABY GRAND PIANO! My heart turned over and I wanted it so bad, but knew it would not fit in my condo. The salesman told me to go back home and measure the room and IT FIT! I love it to this day and play it every day.
I love the metaphors in this poem and find it to be very sensual, and I like that. I understand the "Emotions" part exactly, because when my infant child died, I wrote "The Song/Ode to Death" and would play it with tears streaming down my cheeks. My cat at the time loved to sit on top of the piano while I played and cried, and he and purred.....I guess he liked the vibes from the piano, and so that explains my identifying with the "Emotions" part.
I love your line, "Upon your soul I saw no blot or stain," because I write a lot of music with corresponding Scriptures, and they certainly have "No blot or stains on them.".
I love your "Petite, enchanting , and demure," line, too; and having a big fat ego, took it personally. Only joking of course, but what a lovely way to describe this enchanting instrument. If I lived in an empty house...it would have a piano in it if nothing else...
Your last line, "Eroticism had prevailed," I answered it ahead of time.
I was so intrigued by the poem and found that they had ten syllable lines and I liked that too, because I had been practicing how to write ten syllable sonnets for my "Interpretation of the Tarot.'
I am so glad I read it, because I am not much on reviewing. Thank you for writing and sharing it with us piano and music lovers.
Nan
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Ha! When I saw the picture, at first I thought it was a stairway...LOL...Then I realized it was a piano keyboard.
Forgive me for the kooky eyesight...but that's great, because it made me give the poem even more attention.
Line One caught my attention immediately and I had to reminisce before I went on to line two.
I was taking a music class at the College of the Desert in Palm Springs and needed a keyboard to study on at home. Since my condo was so small I did not know how I was going to fit one in there. I was driving down Palm Canyon and saw in the corner picture window of the piano store a GORGEOUS WHITE BABY GRAND PIANO! My heart turned over and I wanted it so bad, but knew it would not fit in my condo. The salesman told me to go back home and measure the room and IT FIT! I love it to this day and play it every day.
I love the metaphors in this poem and find it to be very sensual, and I like that. I understand the "Emotions" part exactly, because when my infant child died, I wrote "The Song/Ode to Death" and would play it with tears streaming down my cheeks. My cat at the time loved to sit on top of the piano while I played and cried, and he and purred.....I guess he liked the vibes from the piano, and so that explains my identifying with the "Emotions" part.
I love your line, "Upon your soul I saw no blot or stain," because I write a lot of music with corresponding Scriptures, and they certainly have "No blot or stains on them.".
I love your "Petite, enchanting , and demure," line, too; and having a big fat ego, took it personally. Only joking of course, but what a lovely way to describe this enchanting instrument. If I lived in an empty house...it would have a piano in it if nothing else...
Your last line, "Eroticism had prevailed," I answered it ahead of time.
I was so intrigued by the poem and found that they had ten syllable lines and I liked that too, because I had been practicing how to write ten syllable sonnets for my "Interpretation of the Tarot.'
I am so glad I read it, because I am not much on reviewing. Thank you for writing and sharing it with us piano and music lovers.
Nan
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thanks for the exceptional and extensive review. You truly understood what I wanted to convey. I am sorry for your loss.
Comment from AMORE AGENT
Hello again,
I liked this poem, it flowed well, had some nice feelings behind it, I could vision the setting, the piano the vibes.
I liked this bit, well done!!
Your skill alone surpassed by your allure.
Upon your soul I saw no blot or stain;
You were petite, enchanting, and demure.
Eroticism had prevailed; there was no cure.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Hello again,
I liked this poem, it flowed well, had some nice feelings behind it, I could vision the setting, the piano the vibes.
I liked this bit, well done!!
Your skill alone surpassed by your allure.
Upon your soul I saw no blot or stain;
You were petite, enchanting, and demure.
Eroticism had prevailed; there was no cure.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thanks for a good review. That is one of my favorite stanzas, as well.
Comment from Belinda
Hi Alvin, sorry for this late review. This story of infatuation and falling in love is so sweet: "Emotions I felt I could not explain", and for this 'disease' "there is no cure". And crafted in a Spencerian stanza too. Before I forget, congratulations for winning. Imagine us winning together...:)
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Hi Alvin, sorry for this late review. This story of infatuation and falling in love is so sweet: "Emotions I felt I could not explain", and for this 'disease' "there is no cure". And crafted in a Spencerian stanza too. Before I forget, congratulations for winning. Imagine us winning together...:)
Comment Written 29-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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It was a fun contest, wasn't it? Thanks for a good review.
Comment from daniela.albu
This romance poem and VisionaryPoet777's artwork make a perfect blend. The tempo evokes Chopin (at least to me) while of course the unseen main character can play both "classics as well as the blues". The best quality of this poem is exactly how it craftedly manages to indirectly suggest a portait.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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This romance poem and VisionaryPoet777's artwork make a perfect blend. The tempo evokes Chopin (at least to me) while of course the unseen main character can play both "classics as well as the blues". The best quality of this poem is exactly how it craftedly manages to indirectly suggest a portait.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thanks for the exceptional review; I am highly honored. You understood exactly what I wanted to convey.
Comment from Frances Jean
A beautifully presented and well written poem conveying how the person in your poem was enchanted by the pianist and the music; infatuated by the magic of the moment. Good luck in the competition. Frances
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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A beautifully presented and well written poem conveying how the person in your poem was enchanted by the pianist and the music; infatuated by the magic of the moment. Good luck in the competition. Frances
Comment Written 29-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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Thank you for a good review; I truly appreciate it.
Comment from Ann Smith
Of course, since I play the piano, I love this one. I like the phrase 'you played the classics as well as the blues.' Sounds like a well rounded pianist. I like the description of 'you were petite, enchanting, and demure.' Sounds like me when I was young, just kidding. I was petite, I don't know about the rest of it though. Good luck with the contest. ann
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Of course, since I play the piano, I love this one. I like the phrase 'you played the classics as well as the blues.' Sounds like a well rounded pianist. I like the description of 'you were petite, enchanting, and demure.' Sounds like me when I was young, just kidding. I was petite, I don't know about the rest of it though. Good luck with the contest. ann
Comment Written 28-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Thanks for a great (and amusing!) review. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
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You are welcome. ann
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You are welcome. ann
Comment from adewpearl
I've never written a Spenserian stanza - sounds like a good one to try for its flow and rhyme. I like the scene you create of the pianist and the speaker's attraction to him and subsequent backstage visit. allure/demure - nice rhyme ;-)
Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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I've never written a Spenserian stanza - sounds like a good one to try for its flow and rhyme. I like the scene you create of the pianist and the speaker's attraction to him and subsequent backstage visit. allure/demure - nice rhyme ;-)
Brooke
Comment Written 28-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Thanks for a great review.
Comment from Carol D Parker
This is beautiful. I was wondering who the writer was writing about, a guy or a girl. After reading it a few times I understood it was a man. Your words at the end helped. This is lovely writing. And the story is well done. Very creative.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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This is beautiful. I was wondering who the writer was writing about, a guy or a girl. After reading it a few times I understood it was a man. Your words at the end helped. This is lovely writing. And the story is well done. Very creative.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Actually, I left it purposefully ambiguously. But I thought of the pianist as a woman! It's good to know my work has a multivalence of meaning. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from warbler
This poem is nicely done. The strict meter and form is in contrast to the light and sweet subject. The wording flowed well and the musical images worked well.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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This poem is nicely done. The strict meter and form is in contrast to the light and sweet subject. The wording flowed well and the musical images worked well.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Thanks for a great review. I truly appreciate it.
