Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from Mengleoh67
Ah hell something is going to happen before he gets the chance to talk to her about this isn't it? It's a good thing I have more chapters to read or this would make me nuts LOL
Excellent chapter. Great pace and a nice downgrade from the sexual tension of the past few chapters to the more emotional tension that's beginning. Great interaction and dialogue.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Ah hell something is going to happen before he gets the chance to talk to her about this isn't it? It's a good thing I have more chapters to read or this would make me nuts LOL
Excellent chapter. Great pace and a nice downgrade from the sexual tension of the past few chapters to the more emotional tension that's beginning. Great interaction and dialogue.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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I am impressed that you had enough to read so many chapters. Thank you.
Comment from Nicnac
Catch up time!
;)
Fabulous chapter. Nice flow.
I like how Leya is becoming a little hesitant of the relationship. She doesn't doubt her feelings (I don't think) but she is fearful of getting hurt.
I don't have any suggestions. Great work.
Nic
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2010
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Catch up time!
;)
Fabulous chapter. Nice flow.
I like how Leya is becoming a little hesitant of the relationship. She doesn't doubt her feelings (I don't think) but she is fearful of getting hurt.
I don't have any suggestions. Great work.
Nic
Comment Written 03-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2010
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Thank you stanger for returning and reviewing my work. I have been worried about you.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
I hope you know that the suspense is becoming unbearable. I hope things start happening soon.
I only spotted one thing.
if she missed breakfast[,] there probably wasn't any left,
Roberta
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2010
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I hope you know that the suspense is becoming unbearable. I hope things start happening soon.
I only spotted one thing.
if she missed breakfast[,] there probably wasn't any left,
Roberta
Comment Written 21-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Beauty28
Although I haven't read anything of this book as yet, I am very interested in reading more of the chapters.
I note in particular the part where Leya doesn't think that she is entitled to eat, because when she was little she wasn't able to eat if she was late ,she assumed that would be the case then also
I thought that this was so so sad the way she remembered what her mean dad was like, it must have ben very bad for her, since she thought again that this would be the case.
You portray very well how she remembered just what the situation was when she was growing up in this paragraph that I have below me here.
"While growing up, if any of us missed a meal for any reason, my father wouldn't allow us to eat until the next meal. Once at the other house, Jim told Peggy since she was late to breakfast she was out of luck."
"I'm in charge of this house and anybody can eat whenever they're hungry. As for Jim and Peggy, if she missed breakfast there probably wasn't any left, but she still could have fixed herself something." He thought for a moment. "You've gotten food for your cat?"
Leya obviously remembers how her father badly treated her because when steve is talking to her she doesn't answer with regard to hurting her.
By this verse is is very obvious by Steve is rather curious when she also adds that "she doesn't think that he would physically hurt, but there are other ways to hurt someone.
Steven's hand covered Leya's. "You know I'd never hurt you, don't you?"
When she didn't answer, Steven started worrying as she stood, took the plate of half-eaten food to the kitchen, took another bite, and said, "I'm going to my room."
He held her arm. "Leya?" After a deep breath, he continued, "I'd never hurt you."
You have been very good with leaving this as a bit of a curious subject. I am keen to find out the answer to all of this . Nicely done, well written. Beautbabe.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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Although I haven't read anything of this book as yet, I am very interested in reading more of the chapters.
I note in particular the part where Leya doesn't think that she is entitled to eat, because when she was little she wasn't able to eat if she was late ,she assumed that would be the case then also
I thought that this was so so sad the way she remembered what her mean dad was like, it must have ben very bad for her, since she thought again that this would be the case.
You portray very well how she remembered just what the situation was when she was growing up in this paragraph that I have below me here.
"While growing up, if any of us missed a meal for any reason, my father wouldn't allow us to eat until the next meal. Once at the other house, Jim told Peggy since she was late to breakfast she was out of luck."
"I'm in charge of this house and anybody can eat whenever they're hungry. As for Jim and Peggy, if she missed breakfast there probably wasn't any left, but she still could have fixed herself something." He thought for a moment. "You've gotten food for your cat?"
Leya obviously remembers how her father badly treated her because when steve is talking to her she doesn't answer with regard to hurting her.
By this verse is is very obvious by Steve is rather curious when she also adds that "she doesn't think that he would physically hurt, but there are other ways to hurt someone.
Steven's hand covered Leya's. "You know I'd never hurt you, don't you?"
When she didn't answer, Steven started worrying as she stood, took the plate of half-eaten food to the kitchen, took another bite, and said, "I'm going to my room."
He held her arm. "Leya?" After a deep breath, he continued, "I'd never hurt you."
You have been very good with leaving this as a bit of a curious subject. I am keen to find out the answer to all of this . Nicely done, well written. Beautbabe.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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Some answers will be given in my following posts. Thank you for your review.
Comment from fionageorge
Great chapter, especially Steve's explanation to Leya about not having to be afraid. Their interaction in the kitchen, and Leya's reluctance to tell him about her history, was well done. Ralph's little growl came in at the right spot, to break up the conversation between Steve and Leya, and to re-inforce the comeraderie in the house.
I enjoyed the read. Warmest regards, Marijke
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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Great chapter, especially Steve's explanation to Leya about not having to be afraid. Their interaction in the kitchen, and Leya's reluctance to tell him about her history, was well done. Ralph's little growl came in at the right spot, to break up the conversation between Steve and Leya, and to re-inforce the comeraderie in the house.
I enjoyed the read. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment Written 19-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from words
This is the first time I have read a chapter from this so I am a tad lost.
But, the dialogue is believable.
The situations are realistic.
The characters are well drawn.
I do want to know what Steve wanted to say. Guess I will have to keep an eye out for your posts.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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This is the first time I have read a chapter from this so I am a tad lost.
But, the dialogue is believable.
The situations are realistic.
The characters are well drawn.
I do want to know what Steve wanted to say. Guess I will have to keep an eye out for your posts.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your review. I usally only posts on weekends because I teach first grade and those little guys take up most of my time. I am on spring break this week so was able to post early. Next week back to the grind.
Comment from jmdg1954
Barbara....
nicely written... the page kept my interest and I was a little lost by not knowing the storyline...
I need to go back a few chapters to "catch" up on the story... but even without that I enjoyed this..
John
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Barbara....
nicely written... the page kept my interest and I was a little lost by not knowing the storyline...
I need to go back a few chapters to "catch" up on the story... but even without that I enjoyed this..
John
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate it.
Comment from dmjones
Really nice chapter. Fast paced and great dialogue. I don't know the characters real well yet but I like them. Leya's father must have been jerk.
Steven chuckled. "I'm not sure we're talking about the same man." LOL
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Really nice chapter. Fast paced and great dialogue. I don't know the characters real well yet but I like them. Leya's father must have been jerk.
Steven chuckled. "I'm not sure we're talking about the same man." LOL
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Leya's father is a horrible person. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from misscookie
This is a very deep story and you wrote it very well
i love the way you express the young womans life when she was young, so many people are messed up by the harsh treatment they trcieved when they were a child.
this is a good write.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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This is a very deep story and you wrote it very well
i love the way you express the young womans life when she was young, so many people are messed up by the harsh treatment they trcieved when they were a child.
this is a good write.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Yes, childhood experiences can really mess adults up. Thank you for your kind review.
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your wecome, have a nice day.
Comment from closetpoetjester
This is great writing and another interesting chapter although I think I may have missed a couple between this and the last one I read. I will be going back to fill in the blanks.. You have a very nice style to your writing, not pretentious in anyway and was well outlined and narrated throughout. A pleasure to read and I look forward to continuing with your story.
Cheers closetpoetjester
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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This is great writing and another interesting chapter although I think I may have missed a couple between this and the last one I read. I will be going back to fill in the blanks.. You have a very nice style to your writing, not pretentious in anyway and was well outlined and narrated throughout. A pleasure to read and I look forward to continuing with your story.
Cheers closetpoetjester
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your review.
