Viewing the World With Fresh Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Why Do Mommys Embarrass Their Kids?"The fifteen Years of My Life
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Comment from Alaskastory
'Why Do Mommys Imbarrass Their Kids?' makes me think of all the stories I told on my kids. This is an entertaining story and the picture is so good with it.
Descriptions are very well written. I see nothing to correct.
Good job.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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'Why Do Mommys Imbarrass Their Kids?' makes me think of all the stories I told on my kids. This is an entertaining story and the picture is so good with it.
Descriptions are very well written. I see nothing to correct.
Good job.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Thanks for the review. It is easy to know the answer to that question from the adult point of view but probably a lot of kids like me were not that happy about adults thinking they are funny.
Comment from Judith Ann
This story was fun to read. I could relate to some of the anecdotes and chuckled at the rest of them. Children are a lot more aware of things around them than we adults sometimes give them credit for.
Your line, "Aunt Eva said they found me in a cabbage patch. That makes more sense," is a hoot. Very nice work. -Judy
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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This story was fun to read. I could relate to some of the anecdotes and chuckled at the rest of them. Children are a lot more aware of things around them than we adults sometimes give them credit for.
Your line, "Aunt Eva said they found me in a cabbage patch. That makes more sense," is a hoot. Very nice work. -Judy
Comment Written 23-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Judith Ann, Thanks for the delightful review. I'm glad you found it fun to read.
Comment from MizKat
Your cute little story is well written and a very enjoyabable read. I remember once when my great-granddaughter was dancing and it was so cute I laughed. She stopped immediately and looked at me, embarrassed. I had to explain to her why I laughed.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Your cute little story is well written and a very enjoyabable read. I remember once when my great-granddaughter was dancing and it was so cute I laughed. She stopped immediately and looked at me, embarrassed. I had to explain to her why I laughed.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Thank you MizKat, Kid are delightful and I can see now who parents laugh but back then I didn't like it at all. I'm glad you liked my story.
Comment from wierdgrace
Excellent, and so true, I had two sisters and a brother, and I saw the world the way you did, they all teased me and made it so public, my mom and dad stood with them, I always remembered this. thank you so so mcuh.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Excellent, and so true, I had two sisters and a brother, and I saw the world the way you did, they all teased me and made it so public, my mom and dad stood with them, I always remembered this. thank you so so mcuh.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you liked the story.
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you are so welcome
Comment from Showboat
I'm reading with blinders so I don't know who the author is, but this is darling, very poignant. I don't know why adults humiliate their kids like that. I tried never to do it, that's for sure.
Couple of things to consider.
She will probably tell people all about this((,)) too. Add the comma.
"She told me to go take a nap, till she had time to come inside and find a pair for me." Either 'until' or 'til. As written, it's like plowing the ground..till the soil.
Best in the contest,
Gayle
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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I'm reading with blinders so I don't know who the author is, but this is darling, very poignant. I don't know why adults humiliate their kids like that. I tried never to do it, that's for sure.
Couple of things to consider.
She will probably tell people all about this((,)) too. Add the comma.
"She told me to go take a nap, till she had time to come inside and find a pair for me." Either 'until' or 'til. As written, it's like plowing the ground..till the soil.
Best in the contest,
Gayle
Comment Written 23-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Thank you Gayle, I appreciate the review. I'm glad you caught the spags. I've corrected them.
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
Yes, that really does seem like the way a child would see the world.
Praying man tis. The pun here was most appropriate.
The stone that grew legs and a head, and being afraid to eat water melons...that was funny.
Juliette
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Yes, that really does seem like the way a child would see the world.
Praying man tis. The pun here was most appropriate.
The stone that grew legs and a head, and being afraid to eat water melons...that was funny.
Juliette
Comment Written 23-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Thank you Juliette, I appreciate the review and delightful comments.
Comment from Nanny 6
This is so full of typical, cute kids actions, that I find myself laughing through all of it. Now I know how my granddaughter feels. lol. Great entry Good luck! Judy
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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This is so full of typical, cute kids actions, that I find myself laughing through all of it. Now I know how my granddaughter feels. lol. Great entry Good luck! Judy
Comment Written 23-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Thank you Judy, I'm sure you were a cute kid once, too. Don't you remember? LOL I appreciate the delightful review.
Comment from MissMerri
So nicely told, and clearly shows the world as seen through the eyes of a child. I'm impressed with what a good memory you have, but I've noticed that often people who write well do have a great memory for detail. You've painted a vivid picture of a child's world.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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So nicely told, and clearly shows the world as seen through the eyes of a child. I'm impressed with what a good memory you have, but I've noticed that often people who write well do have a great memory for detail. You've painted a vivid picture of a child's world.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Thank you MissMerri, I appreciate you reading and commenting on my story.
Comment from findingmyroom
Your recollections are so aptly portrayed in the voice of a young child. The things we don't even wonder about as adults were surely wonders to us as children. Nice job.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Your recollections are so aptly portrayed in the voice of a young child. The things we don't even wonder about as adults were surely wonders to us as children. Nice job.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Thank you so much for the review of my little story. Kids who watch TV probably don't wonder about the same things we wondered about.
Comment from Begin Again
Writer
Yes, our children of today are far more advance in knowledge of the world than it use to be...I listen to my two year old granddaughter and think she's going on fifteen...What happened to the magic of childhood?
Carol
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Writer
Yes, our children of today are far more advance in knowledge of the world than it use to be...I listen to my two year old granddaughter and think she's going on fifteen...What happened to the magic of childhood?
Carol
Comment Written 23-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010
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Thanks Carol for reading and commenting on my story. Kids today are nothing like we were.
